Reviewer: invisible sanctuary
Date: 02/04/07 20:26
Chapter: Thousands Say Farewell

First of all, I have to say that I love the beginning. It seems almost sepia-toned with all the browns and blacks and then you're thrust right into this vibrant present of white walls and red hair. Great job there! You don't even need to be told that it was a flashback because of that great imagery. I have to take issue with you, however, with the newspaper article. It didn’t really seem like a newspaper article. Instead, it read a lot like a letter to the editor. It seems unlikely that a journalist would explicitly speculate over how many people were there for Harry Potter and how many were there for the Boy-Who-Lived. If you wish to keep it as an article, it might be more effective to imply this like you do when the journalist states that less people would have come if the weather were dismal. I also like the description of the service, which seemed more objective than many of the earlier parts of the article. I love the outside observation of the difference between Ginny and Hermione. It lends support to the idea that Ginny would lock away her memories of Harry’s death. I think you did a great job with this and I hope to read more of your stories.
invisible sanctuary
Knight of the Turnip Table

Author's Response: Thank you a lot for the wonderful review, invisible sanctuary. I'm thrilled that you liked the beginning; the entire story really sort of grew out of that one, clear image that I had in my head of the chest and such.

Anyway, I see what you mean about the article; it isn't very separated, in the sense that a journalistic report would be, and emotions get in that probably would best be left out. My main reason for doing so was as such: Whenever one has a fantastic leader or someone of great importance, there's those 4-page length articles where people sort of remember and such (I know, a lousy explanation). That type of thing was sort of what I was going towards -- more like a magazine reflection than a CNN news report.

But as I didn't specifically mention that it WAS written by a journalist, you can always imagine that it was written by someone who had close ties to Harry (like Luna ;)

Okay, I'm rambling now, but once again, thank you so much for the review. I'm extremely thrilled that you liked the story, as this is one of my favourites.

~Megan

Reviewer: I Love Severus Snape
Date: 06/15/06 17:45
Chapter: Thousands Say Farewell

Bloody hell... this is very beautiful! The ending is just so powerful that I started shaking. The newspaper article is so lovely... you had me grinning throughout the entire thing. The descriptions in the Daily Prophet article are poignant, detailed and thoughtful. At the beginning of the fic, I’ll admit that I was a little worried, because there was actually too much detail that the description seemed stressed. After some dialogue was thrown in there, however, it was much easier to get through. It only dawned on me at the end when Elizabeth said, "Tell me about Dad," that she's Harry's daughter. I wish I had realized that earlier, because it would have made the read even that more powerful. Spectacular job overall… it was very charming and thought provoking.

Author's Response: Wow! Thanks a lot for reading, and thanks for leaving such a wonderful review! I've not written a lot of stories (one-shots or not) that deal with a lot of emotions and . . . stuff, for lack of a better word right now :) so I'm glad you liked it. I was pretty surprised as well that it turned out as good as it did, to be honest, considering I wrote it so fast. Don't worry about not figuring out Elizabeth was Harry's daughter until the end; I didn't leave a whole lot of clues in the beginning anyway. But again, thanks a lot for reading and leaving such a great review!

Reviewer: Yun Harla
Date: 05/08/06 6:49
Chapter: Thousands Say Farewell

sorry for the double review thingie I tried to delete one but it wont go!! Oh well

Author's Response: That's fine, don't worry about it :)

Reviewer: Yun Harla
Date: 05/07/06 22:28
Chapter: Thousands Say Farewell

I think this is a brilliant story!!! I just couldnt help but cry as I read it!!! Something I think you would like to know though is that in Britan Elizabeth is also Elspeth I think is kinda sounds better but either way its a pretty name! Hope you do somekinda followup or second chapter if you did I would definatly read it!!!

Author's Response: Whoops, double post :)

Reviewer: Yun Harla
Date: 05/07/06 22:27
Chapter: Thousands Say Farewell

I think this is a brilliant story!!! I just couldnt help but cry as I read it!!! Something I think you would like to know though is that in Britan Elizabeth is also Elspeth I think is kinda sounds better but either way its a pretty name! Hope you do somekinda followup or second chapter if you did I would definatly read it!!!

Author's Response: Hey, I'm glad you think this is a brilliant story! I am quite proud of it, especially considering how quickly I wrote it to get it submitted to the challenge.
I was aware of the differences in spelling of Elizabeth, but I chose to use Elizabeth due to the fact that it's the name of a good friend of mine, who is partially and distantly an inspiration for the girl :), but thanks for letting me know anyway.
As for a second chapter or followup, I'm definitely considering doing something, due to the fact that there are some questions that could be answered concerning how Harry died, what happened to Ron, etc. However, whether I write something or not, it's going to have to wait for a bit.
Again, though, thanks for reading and reviewing.

Reviewer: Potter_freak0515
Date: 04/30/06 21:22
Chapter: Thousands Say Farewell

Oh. My. God. I literally have tears in my eyes after reading this.You are a great writer. I originally found you from Harry Potter and the End of All Things. Even though I hate Harry/Ginny and don't like Ron/Hermione I still love this fic! What happened to Ron? And how did Harry die? Please e-mail me at potterfreak0515@gmail.com. I love your work!

Author's Response: Well, I'm glad you loved this story. It seriously was just a really quick thing; it had to be to get submitted in time for the challenge :) so I haven't really thought up some of the answers to your questions, to be honest. Pretty bad, huh? Maybe I'll think on those questions and write either a second chapter or an accompanying one-shot.
Again, though, thanks for reading and taking the time to review. I am quite proud of this story, and it's been well-received, too.

Reviewer: Kerian
Date: 04/10/06 20:38
Chapter: Thousands Say Farewell

Very meaningful and emotionally powerful. I really liked the article and the way it kind of narrated the funeral, I also liked the way you had it read by a young Elizabeth. Nice work!

Author's Response: Thanks for the comments. I'm really glad you liked it, and I'm surprised at how well it turned out, considering the extremely short amount of time that the story was thought up, written out, and submitted. Again, thanks for reading and reviewing.

Reviewer: iliveinaworldofcandy
Date: 03/17/06 6:56
Chapter: Thousands Say Farewell

I thought this was amazing. Not perfect, no... some places the dialogue or descriptions seemed stilted or unatural, and I felt the newspaper article wasn't very article-ish, but at the same time it made me hurt, if that makes sense. I got that dull pain in the bottom of my stomach- not sad enough to cry, but it depressed me, and I love getting depressed by stories. What's the point in a story making you happy, I say, you won't remember that. So I thought it was very very good. Excellent work.

Author's Response: Thanks for reading and taking the time to review; I really appreciate getting people's opinions. You're right in that some of the dialogue and everything seemed a bit unatural, but that mostly had to do with the fact that the story wasn't in the editing and tweaking process for very long. In order to get it submitted to the challenge, I had to do the entire thing in less than two days, but the product turned out pretty good for the short thinking and writing period that it was created in. Anyway, glad you liked it, and thanks again for the review.

Reviewer: LexiGirl
Date: 03/15/06 16:49
Chapter: Thousands Say Farewell

I love your story So much, I almost wanted to cry with Elizabeth. REALLY good story!!!!!!

Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing, and I'm really glad you liked it. It actually turned out okay, and I was pretty happy with it, considering I did the entire thing in less than two days! Anyway, thanks again for the review.

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