Awww, how lovely!
Awww, how lovely!
Well, what can I say? Besides that it was wonderful, amazing, impressive, awesome and all those other adjectives with similar meaning. Well, I can say three things - atmosphere, atmosphere, atmosphere. I mean, every time I even think about your story the first image that comes to my mind is a warm and lazy afternoon, quiet and a little deserted with an open veranda door and crumpled pieces of paper lying on the floor. And it's not only the image, but also the feeling as if I actually were standing there in the rose garden and looking towards the house. Speaking of the plot, I like the idea of James never giving up. I think it is one main trait of his personality, and I think it's a very honourable trait. Even though 'sometimes he might even realize that the letter would never be sent' he still keeps on trying to write it. Oh, and I liked how you mentioned his mother - his mother's rose garden, his mother won't be angry that he stained the tablecloth, his mother checking on him as if she doubted his sanity - I'm not even sure why I liked it, perhaps because it ties James to the rest of his family, but at the same time emphasizes his loneliness. There were many passages I'm extremely fond of but they're too long to be all mentioned so I'll just tell you my very favourite - 'Sometimes he would even fly out on his broom, fly at the stars until his mind caught up with him and reminded him that they were out of his reach, just like her.' And oh, one more, since I just can't leave it out - 'Sometimes James would just close out the world and dream of her emerald green eyes, the ones that he sees in the stars, the ones that he sees in the fire.' Oh, poor James. The rest of the Marauders should pay him a visit at the first possibility - it's not healthy to 'think of the pointlessness of it all, ponder the meaning of life, think of the endlessness of the universe' for too long. ;)
I like sad stories. This was a sad story. I liked this story. This was a joke. maybe you didn't get that. But, i really did like it. I'm serious (no you're not!, you say.. and you're right..or left if you prefer) The review doesn't quite fit for this story, but what can you do. it is a review for this story, a sad story, a lovely story, a story full af feelings. and loneliness
Author's Response: I like good reviews. This is a good review. I liked your review... Thanks
Oohh, this was so sad! I didn't quite get the last part, though. "I'm too bad to be loved by you"? Maybe it's just too early, and later I'll think of it and think I was stupid not to get it... Anywho, I thought you described James' frustration in writing Lily well. How it had to be perfect for her, but nothing was ever perfect enough...and then he'd just give up and think about her eyes. Sad and adorable at the same time. Too many emotions for 9.30 in the morning! Niamara
aww this one shot is soo sad and depressing... good writing
Author's Response: Thank you!