Loved it! Very good! I enjoyed how Hermione listed off all the years.
Author's Response: Thank you muchly. I honestly think that is one of the aspects of the story that went overboard, but then, these early stories are what they are, you know? I think they're good at bringing people in, and in the end there's this kind of aging that you do as a reader through the stories, you know, a growing up, and here we're still very young.
I really like this story...It is so different from my own Ron/Hermione first kiss fanfic that it makes it interesting to read....Great job!!
Author's Response: Thank you, I'm just hoping you enjoyed it enough to read the rest of the story.
This was freekin AWESOMELY AWESOME! 10!
Author's Response: heheh... thanks, i really hope to see you for the rest of my stories!
Love, Love, Love, Love this story. It is just how I imagine Ron telling Hermione how he feels. By yelling it out in public during a fight. Great job.
Author's Response: Why thank you very much. Look at that, I always love it when I get someone new to the stories! Welcome, and hope you read them all.
This is so good, I love all your stories and how well you portray the characters.
Author's Response: Well, thank you very much, I appreciate it greatly. I hope to see you for the rest of the stories!
I love this whole story arc off to review them all after reading. This first one is a great song for Ron/Hermione and rings very true of how they may get together. Great characterization and love the H/G interaction too.
Author's Response: Thank you ever so much. You know, while all of my stories follow one arc, I rarely look at that arc as a whole. And it's interesting, I suppose to try and see how these earlier pieces fit. I guess, if I were to repackage the whole story, I think I would call Right Here and One Good Day a single part... Maybe... And possibly lump in Epi Part I as the end of that part. No... definitely these first two stories have a kind of innocence about them that makes them unique among my stories, lighter and fluffier no doubt, with the hint of darker things to come only just beginning to sprout at the end of One Good Day. Thank you so much, and I look forward to responding to the rest of your reviews.
That was reaaly good!
I always imagened the HermioneRon first kiss scene right after they fought and she was crying.....then one says something really shocking that makes them both realize their undening love for each other......Yada Yada Yada!
Anyway you did great and your in my favorites! Along with all the other WONDERFUL writers!!! =}
Love ya much, your annoying little reviewer :Bubs
Author's Response: You are not annoying. Far from it. I never consider anyone who reviews my stories an annoyance, and actually, I often thank them. The thank comes, traditionally at the beginning of a response, as it does here (thank you) and then somewhere towards the end of the response, after I ramble on about whatever I feel like it, and then beg you to read the rest of my stories. I'm just walking you through the process, that's all. yes, you and I happen to be a part of a camp wherein we feel that Ron and Hermione aren't just going to slide in together, but instead do so rather violently, and in some scenarios, with a body count. I figured the body count wouldn't be such a great idea, considering I made the setting the wedding, but there you go, that's just me. Of course, this is just the beginning, as I'm hoping you realize when/if you read the author's note, and I really hope you go on to read the rest of my stories. One Good Day is my least favorite, but people tend to like it, and after that, well, I think I got a couple of good stories for you to read, and they all are in the same story arc as this one, so hopefully you'll enjoy. Thanks again, and I hope to see ya for the next story.
that was sosoo good! im a huge ron hermione fan, and that was GREAT :D
Author's Response: Thank you so much, now please read the rest of my stories! They all fall in step with this one!
I'm so glad I stumbled across this - it's fabulous! A blazing row is the perfect way to get those two together, because Ron really isn't ever going to become emotionally competent enough to work out what's in front of him otherwise. I agree with Ginny - they did need this.
The argument is so intense. I really love the line, “IS THAT ALL I AM TO YOU? HAVE NOTHING, KNOW NOTHING, WORTH NOTHING RON?” because it seems to completely sum up all of Ron's frustration and bitterness, thinking that he isn't good enough for her. You've managed to successfully blow the top off of six years of friendship, love and denial and dragged up all the old little wounds that they inflicted on one-another, without ever making it melodramatic.
“BECAUSE I LOVE YOU, DAMMIT!...I WOULD BLOODY WELL DIE FOR YOU!" Trust Ron to come out with with such romantic sentiments in such an unromantic manner - it's so true to the character. And only Ron could manage to storm off when she tells him that she feels the same, but the "I will," was perfect. It really got to me!
I loved the lighter moments that you put into it too though. It was so fitting that it was Harry that made Ron do something about it because he refused to go off hunting for the Horcruxes with them sniping at each other the whole time and the line of, Hermione smiled coyly, or at least what passed for coyly when it came to Hermione. made me laugh out loud because it was so accurate!
*wanders off to read the rest of your stories*
Author's Response: uh-oh, somehow I'm able to access this site from work again. It's all over now! Nevermind that. I always love it when a new reader comes into the stories, particularly when said reader leaves such an awesome and long review. And of course you are starting at the beginning which as absolutely perfect. Sometimes I forget about this fic, and it's always good to remember. Thank you so much for everything you've said, and so let's see exactly what you said. I along with both you and Ginny all seem to agree that they did indeed need the row. Why? Well, as you point out because of the fact that there are still so many personal hurdles to get over, and only a row could do such. But also from the standpoint of the author, it's just better this way. It's more passionate, and more engrossing. Sure, I could have had Ron and Hermione just go out for a nice civilized talk and work through their issues, but, yeah, how interesting is that? Which brings us to the fight itself, and how it comes across. As I've said many times before, really this argument was me setting the stage and then letting the characters take over after a point. At least that is how it felt. I really didn't try and push them in any specific direction, but instead... I guess it's like pachinko. You know that game with the metal ball, and you drop it in at the top and it bangs against those little pegs? I guess Viktor Krum would be the first peg, and the ball just kept bouncing from there. In this regard, I thin kthat may have been what gave the fight its passion without going overboard. I really did what Ron and Hermione do all the time in canon, only this time, I didn't let them stop. I will disagree with you on one point, and that's because I have a very finely defined image of romance. The line you mention, to me at least, is incredibly romantic and that's because it comes straight from the heart with all the emotion and passion he could muster.He could take her atop a tower on a moonlight night and bestow upon her a daimond encrusted ring whilst quoting her poetry, and it wouldn't be nearly so romantic because it doesn't have the same meaning. And we explore this a little further in Epilogues Part III, that being that what makes Ron romantic is not the flourish or the gestures, but the fact that when he acts, and when he speaks it carries such gravitas emotionally that you can't help but to feel along with him. But then, as you point out, only he would be so stupid as to be insulted when he shouldn't be. But then even Harry saw this coming. Which set up, "I will," and I have to say, I worked so hard for that one singular moment. I don't know. When you're writing, you get these brief spots where you feel it, where you know you knocked it right out of the park, and you may as well start jogging around the bases, and that one was it. And ultimately, I think that also is necessary. Someone had to give. Someone had to bear their belly and in not so many words say, "Kill me. Take every part of me or no part of me, just know that either way, I belong to you... I'm yours, and you are free to do with me as you wish." And then there's the lighter moments you mention. When inspiration struck, the only thing that really hit me was the argument. Problem was, I couldn't just drop the reader into the all out war that eventually ensues, so I had to figure out a way to frame it. Since the first site I posted this on was a H/G site, I figured that was how to start things, and it let me use Harry's POV which had the benefits of making it easier to ape JKR's voice, as well as free me from the burdon of having to adopt Hermione or Ron's point of view which may have made the scene too lopsided. Anyway, and i think from there the lighter moments were born, especially considering I don't think I would have been able to put them in there if I were going at it from Ron or Hermione's POV. But the thing I've noticed is that I have a quieter sense of humor in my writing, definitely not the kind that lends itself to writing a comedy story, but it's there, and what's worse, I can't get rid of it. Epilogues Part III is most definitely a very serious and dark story, and yet I find myself still unable to avoid the offhanded joke or two, even in the most serious of parts. But in the end, I think I'm learning to live with that, I think it adds texture and depth to what I do, and it definitely adds to my voice, I think. Anyway, I'm glad you enjoyed it, and now I'm off to go eagerly await the rest of your reviews.
Makes me think about things, sad things....anyway that is all sad and dreary. It was a good fic. I thought I had read it before but I haven't I really liked the line where Ginny yelled for the band to start up again, priceless!
Their first kiss was a family event...hehehe
Author's Response: Thank you ever so much. Yeah, there was definitely some sadness to it, but I think all ended for the better, don't you? Of course, this isn't the end at all, but just the beginning, and I hope ever so much that you'll keep reading my stories as they all follow a single story arc. Thanks again, and I hope to see ya for the next one.
Makes me think about things, sad things....anyway that is all sad and dreay. It was a goo fic. I thought I had read it before but I haven't I really liked the line where ginny yelled for the band to start up again, priceless! their first kiss was a family event...hehehe
W o w. So before my California accent takes over, this little fic was immensely entertaining. It was a great mix of funny and sweet and drama, and the lyrics in no way weakened the story; if anything, they were an enjoyable bonus. I loved how perfectly Hermione and Ron's banter reflected their personalities and their emotions. At the same time, how you intermitently returned focus to Harry and Ginny was brilliant and so well done!
Oh. Fantastic. I'm so glad you decided to break all those rules of yours. And even if JKR includes something along these lines in book 7, I'll remember I read your fascinating fic first.
Just one nit-pick: the first paragraph I had to read a couple times simply because I had to decide when "the day" you're talking about is/was. I mean, on reflection yes it's quite clear that it's the day after Dumbledore's funeral. But then the next sentence, I don't know, something about how it just begins "the day" makes me stop and go, oh is it the same day or another day um is it today or last week, or tomorrow? That's all. The rest is all s u p e r =D
~ Cheers !
Author's Response: Thank you very much, and let me say before I get into anything else that this is only the first of my stories, and i hope you'll read them all especially considering that they are all in the same story arc. I'm really glad you thought the characterization was satisfactory. Honestly, when I wrote this, i put the song on repeat and just let Ron and Hermione take over from there. I honestly think I was unconscious for much of the writing of this. As for your nitpick, I couldn't agree with you more. I have reread this story a couple of times and every time I do I cringe at that first paragraph. I think the biggest problem is that I just had one or two "the days" in there too many.I think I was going for something Dickensian there, but I think in the end it just came off feeling amateurish. it's one of those things that I think I will eventually go back and fix, but never seem to make the time for. Anyway, again, let me say thank you, and PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE, read the rest of my stories as I think all of them with the exception of One Good Day are far better than this one. (I'm not fond of OGD with the exception of the last chapter). See ya there! ps. Californian? which part? I grew up in Stockton and Hayward.
Wow.... I am absolutely speechless. I have been trying to write arguments like that for such a long time and I think I might just give up now because mine will never even come close to what you've written. Great job! Keep up the good work. The song also fits really well.
Author's Response: I'm really sorry if I ruined it for you... Didn't mean to. Thank you ever so much, and I can only hope you'll read the rest of my stories, as Right Here is only the first in my story arc. Thanks again.
Absolutely beautiful! no wonder you are one of my favorite authors.
Author's Response: Thank you ever so much.
I just loved it! The whole H/R scene was just genious! Thank you for making things work with the quartet.
Author's Response: Heh. That's kinda what I do, make things work just so I can break it down and destroy it so they have to work at making it work again. Hope you read everything else I've written.
I am with you....this was so well done that it doesn't matter if it is a fan fic or not. What a GREAT write. I have jsut discovered your work and plan to spend the day perusing it....
this is one of the best I have read!
Author's Response: Thank you ever so much. While I do think that Right Here holds a special place in my heart, I also think it is far removed from my best writing, and so I hope that the future things you read from me will be far better. Thanks again.
wow...i read one good day first...and i said the same thing..i love this song..first time ive heard it but it is awsum...and this fic is soooo good...write more....this was amazing....
Author's Response: Ah. Tsk tsk tsk. You read out of order, hehehe. Thank you so much. As a matter of fact, I've written quite a bit more, and really these stories are just kind of warm ups. Please do go check out Everybody Does It, and the Epilogues series. Thanks.
*Is in complete love with this story*
Seriously, I don't think I have ever read a Hermione/Ron fanfiction which has porrayed them so accurately, so them. It's perfect, the argument is so so right and then their reactions too. The only drawback is that when JKR actually writes this scene I'm not going to enjoy it half as much because it couldn't possibly live up to this one. I've read it 6 or 7 times and it's only now that I think I know it well enough to leave a decent review. I hadn't heard the song 'Right Here' before I read this but I instantly went and bought it. Then I sat back and heard it play, all the time marvelling at how much it is Ron and Hermione. You're right, it is their song in every single sense of the expression, the words, the actual music, everything. I've played it in the background while reading this and the two gel together so well, just as any good songfic should with it's inspiration. I like the little smatterings of humor and the way you've worked the lyrics in. My favourite part is Ron's GAH in the middle of his first tirade against Hermione. It made me smile, I just love the way you write him! It also never occured to me before I read this fic that Harry breaking up with Ginny at the funeral was a weird thing to do as he's going to see her just a couple of weeks later at the wedding. Very interesting, I wonder how Jo's going to work round that! Mind you, if she's got any sense she'll write it like this. I don't want to finish this review, I love this story so much! I do have to move on though, I think I'm going to start reading Epilogues part two.
Author's Response: Damn how is it I let my reviews get this far ahead of me? sheesh. Okay, well, first and foremost, thank you so much. Yeah, I still like this one. There are little bits of it that really make my skin crawl, and funnily enough one if them is your favorite part, the Gah! bit. It's so amateurish, and yet I think it's honest, and maybe that's why I'm still happy with this one, it's just honest. Well, you're getting to part II, so I can't wait to start reading your responses there. Thank you so much for everything.
nice one yo. im turning into the biggest geek!
Author's Response: Don't worry, you learn to accept it.
hey--i meant Can, not can't, obviously...sorry!i think you CAN write well, not CAN'T...
Author's Response: Yeah, I kinda had that figured out.
Author's Response: Yeah, I kinda had that figured out.