Okay, It sounds like Valora is related somehow to the Wasleys. Nice story though. Abit slow in spots, not too bad. It does sound interesting...Does Valora know that Mrs. Figg is a Squib?
I'm sure she may know, otherwise, she would'nt be staying there.
Author's Response: Valora is Mrs Weasley's niece. I have a tendency to pay a little too much attention to some details, which in turn makes the story slow. Valora isn't entirely sure how Mrs Figg fits in, but she knows that she has some connection to the magical world. Professor Dumbledore planted Valora at Mrs Figg's to keep an eye on Harry and report how he was doing. Thank you for your review.
Sounds like a good story to me. Should be very interesting to see what transpires between Harry and Valora.
Author's Response: Thanks for your review. At the moment, Harry and Valora have a kindof childlike friendship. I've been thinking a lot about how I'm going to have their relationship mature.
Chapter 8 - Tactics
I like your story so far. The narative is a bit choppy, but I can deal with that in order to read a good story. But what's with this line: “Valora, it is impolite to cut food with your left hand,” ---What?! What kind of nonsense is that and where did it come from?
Author's Response: Sorry about the choppiness, by writing has changed dramatically over the past few years that I have been writing this story for, to the point where it is difficult to edit earlier chapters.
As for the cutting line, it is merely referring to Valora's tendency to do everything with her dominant (left) hand and relates to aging social norms about table manners. In this case, the particular rule that is being referred to is that when dining in company, people normally would cut with their right hand and use the fork with the left. There's no real relevance to the plot.
Thank you for your review.
I thought this was really interesting, and I will be reading more of it once I get the time. :D
I think the plot is very good so far.
The only thing that I noticed was that you put a word or two in the wrong tense.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review, Jamie. I'm glad you have enjoyed reading the story. I wrote this chapter ages ago, back in the time where I hardly even knew what quotation marks were. Personally, I've noticed an improvement in my writing as the story progresses. Thanks again, Jamie.
Great start, I'm definitely looking forward to see how the rest of your story unfolds!!!
Author's Response: Thanks, utaker07. I'll get future chapters up as soon as I can so you can see how the story unfolds.
The New Photo
Author's Response: Thank you for your review, I'm glad you like it.
An Extremely Unwelcome Visit
good story! cnt wait for the next update!
Author's Response: Thanx, pammiez. I'll update soon!
Good beginning, I always find it's the hardest part, where exactly to begin. I'm intrigued about what's going to go on between Valora and Harry. Keep up the good work and keep updating.
Author's Response: Thanks hermione23_granger. I agree with you, starting is the hardest part. It can take me a long time to think up the beginning and the title. Something interesting will happen between Valora and Harry sooner or later, and I'm not trying to be cryptic. I'll see you 'round.
Mmm... I'm intrigued! This looks like it's going to be good. It'll be interesting to find out more about this Prewett girl. I recognize the name, too, but it's driving me crazy because I don't remember - *goes to HP Lexicon* Ah! I know! Now I'm REALLY intrigued. Anyway, I wish I could leave a better review, but I guess I'll have to read a bit more to see what happens. In the meantime I'll give you a nice chunk of stars with my good rating!
Author's Response: Thanks Isabel. I'm glad to have intruiged you, at least I'm not boring you. More information about the Prewett girl will surface shortly, seeing as Harry seems to be in an interrogating mood. Please keep checking back, I'm expecting my next chapter to be added any day now. Thanks again!