First and foremost, this is an excellent poem. The rhyme scheme is very interesting. I'm not sure if I really liked the sheme you used, "AABC" "DDEF" very much, but it was a good poem. The one thing I noticed was the rythem (Ah, I can't spell!) was a tiny bit off. I know to write poems with a set rhyme scheme is difficult (that's why I don't write set poems) However, you generally want the rhyming line to have a similar look and feel to the line previous to it, which it rhymes with. In parts, that seemed off. Besides that, I liked this poem. My favorite line would have to be "Bidding goodbye to the starry net." I really liked the figurative language used in that line. Great job!
Author's Response: Thanks :) I admit that I'm not the best poet in the world, and I generally don't think of the rhythm when I begin to write... but thanks for being kind with your constructive critisizm, a lot of people generally aren't.
This poem connected to me on a personal level as I am in a situation similar to Hermione's...the summary was very, very appealing. Most summaries in poetry are not that good. That is most likely the reason why poems are not usually read and reviewed. Very good, I connected with your protagonist, which, when it comes to my poetry, I believe to be the most satisfying praise. I cannot understand why I'm the first reviewer. Then again, my one accepted poem only has one con.crit. review and only 17 reads. The poem I have currently queue is not as good, and I don't expect much more reads or reviews.
Author's Response: I'm gonna read your poem now... -goes to read lupinslover12's poem-
