that was great! I can definately see Hermione thinking all those things.
i really liked this one, its something that could really happen after book 7
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad that you liked it. I was trying to make it realistic.
***Sad*** But thats what is probably going to happen.
It was sad but good.
Author's Response: Thanks! I do think that something like this is likely for all the teenagers who survive the war. I've done research on wars, and the survivors tend to have this kind of outlook.
Great job i like how it's all her thoughts, really well done.
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it!
Great job i like how it's all her thoughts, really well done.
That was awesome. The format was the first time id seen it and it was done really well. Great job.
Author's Response: Thanks so much. I'm glad you enjoyed it. I chose the format because I like writing in first person, it's more direct, but I also wanted to get the dialogue in without writing "I said..." constantly.
This was an amazing piece! I loved how you laid it out - with one spoken line between every little thing Hermionie thought. The language was very good, and I thought that , even though it was short, it was one of the best fan fics I have read!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it. I spliced the thoughts with dialogue because I wanted to keep the reader aware of where Hermione was at the time, but I wanted most of it to be in first person, and obviously Hermione isn't going to be saying all of that to her parents... ;)
Wow. The only word I can think to describe this would be powerful. You've done an amazing job portraying Hermione's thoughts after the war. I've never thought about what it might be like for Hermione with her Muggle parents and you've brought a very real scenario to life. This story gave me shivers while reading it. Amazing job.
Author's Response: Thank you very much! The scenario with Hermione and her parents was something I've been thinking about for awhile. I'm doing a research project on WWII at the moment, and one of the things that always strikes me about the war stories is that I have no idea how these soldiers can just go home and go back to normal. I mean, the people who weren't there aren't going to understand, are they?
