I never thought I'd read a SS/HG fanfic, but if I were to, one of yours had better be my first.
I loved it, the way Snape was all mysterious and how the goody goody Granger just gave in to him. Short but great :D
Author's Response: Aww thanks. Glad that my fic was your first!
O_O....nice...
Author's Response: Haha. Thanks??
The details in your story are fabulous, and you have a great style of writing but a little editing and proofreading wouldn't hurt either. There are a few minor mistakes here and there that detract from the plot of the story because one has to read over those sentences a few times or hesitate on a word or two before the meaning becomes clear.
Also, you did a great job at the beginning of the story. The build-up was wonderful, but then it came to an abrupt halt at the ending. I would have preferred a little more before the story was completely over, not another chapter but maybe one or two more paragraphs to flesh out the last portion of your fic.
My last comment would be, seeing how this is supposed to be Hermione's last year at Hogwarts, and we now know that Snape is a wonderful Occlumens, it would be been a good idea to use this in the story so he could tap into her thoughts.
8.5 / 10
We can hope the the end of Hermione's end of innosence was better than two teens in the back of a car. I liked your imagry.
The Serpent-Devil = Loving it :D
Great fic by the way :D
The End? Wow, Queen, i expected better of you. a great build up, just as usual, and then *poof!* a horrible ending. so they hook up. then what happens? If you didnt want to finish it, i personally dont think you should have started.
oh you stink. lol. I would have loved a second chappie. I Loved it. With a capital "L." lol.
aww PLEASE make more parts to this!! this is a great begining to a story and i LOVE LOVE LOVE it!!!!
You did a very good job, and i think you should write more.
I really enjoyed your story. One of the best ss/hg fanficts I've read.
I think Dracula is a fascination of many girls- there is something so forbidding and erotic about the whole blood sucking and power bit. Anyway, you did very well on this. Most of the fan fiction I've read (and write myself) find a way to explain Snape, but I definately think leaving him unexplored is a different yet interesting approach to the character. Thank you for writing.
ooh of all the one-shots i have read (and i have read alot!) that was the best so far.
~ashley
it made me giggle how you used Bram Stokers Dracula since Dracula in that is played by Sirius..well Gary Oldman. lol. nice story though
This is so sicko, but somehow you have a way of turning gross stuff into amazing material...I've read delightful pain and Stranded of yours, and they have the same quality.
y don u cuntinu????
newayz the chap was awsum.
Very well written. Intriguing pair. I absolutely love the title, and the story itself did not disappoint!
retarded. never ever ever ever ......ever write something about those 2 again. the story was great just weird
This was a good story. Don't take this the wrong way, but I'm glad you aren't going to continue with this story. There are stories that I wish would continue, but yours ends so very nicely. If you continued to make this a series, I think it would detract from this story. I love how you made this a school girl crush. I haven't read a Severus/Hermoine fic that takes that angle. The characterization of Severus was a little odd at first, but he seemed to become more Snapeish later on. I love how he just snuck up behind her and wanted to take her right then and there. I love the parallel to Dracula. I really liked this, good job!
OOOoooo! thatwas awesome...i thought some areas were written a little crudly and it could have been polised a bit more but i Loved the references to Dracula ....The way you composed the story was strangly disjointed but I enjoyed that and thought it suited the style. I really liked the ending and kept the lastpart mysterious....I think you have done really well to try and keep snape and hermione both in canon and I think you did pretty damn well at that! Keep up the good work.....emerald eyezxox
OOOoooo! thatwas awesome...i thought some areas were written a little crudly and it could have been polised a bit more but i Loved the references to Dracula ....The way you composed the story was strangly disjointed but I enjoyed that and thought it suited the style. I really liked the ending and kept the lastpart mysterious....I think you have done really well to try and keep snape and hermione both in canon and I think you did pretty damn well at that! Keep up the good work.....emerald eyezxox
