Reviewer: Valentinia
Date: 04/03/07 17:06
Chapter: Frights

A cliffie? Arrg! Must continue reading...
But first, I love that Eris is Epis but I feel so sorry for her, having gone through all of that to help Remus only to find out the Marauders had already done it. I love Eris seeing Severus' soft side through Epis! :D But now, I think I'll go keep reading...

Author's Response: Near the end of the story, Eris finds out that Fenrir may have turned Remus, but it wasn't because of her-- she really feels stupid then! I thought it would make her more 'real' to make a grand gesture, and then find out it wasn't needed.

Reviewer: Valentinia
Date: 04/03/07 16:42
Chapter: Trials

I wonder what's up with Epis... hmmm... She's one cool cat so far, though! :D It's nice to see Severus relax like with her, even if she's a cat! I really enjoyed this chapter! The hospital wing scene was really funny and I can't wait to find out more about when Eris used that blood spell!

Author's Response: You've got me singing 'Everybody Wants to be a Cat' now! 'Because a cat's the only cat, who knows where it's at--groovy!' :D

Reviewer: Valentinia
Date: 04/03/07 16:31
Chapter: Glimpses

Aw, poor Sirius. Not really... :D I like how Severus and Eris are becoming friends. Eris is a fun character, as is your "version" of Snape. I can't wait to see where this fic leads and how it continues! Plus, the Marauders' descriptions were funny - I can just see James being "self-righteous" like that. :D I'd be annoyed too!

Author's Response: I thought it extremely interesting that Harry was annoyed with his dad's behavior in Snape's Worst Memory. He has more in common with the malevolent bat, heh, but in sheer dislike of Slytherin, I think he's most like Sirius. :]

Reviewer: Valentinia
Date: 04/03/07 0:08
Chapter: Meetings

I knew we'd see the cat again! :D Seeing Severus' choices and his life, really, unfold like this is very interesting! As is Eris' life! Love Kettleburn, of course! :) And I can't wait to see the two's lives become more intertwined... :D
One thing though, why do the Marauders think of Severus as a future Death Eater if they're still called Knights of Walpurgia (sp...?)? Other than that, great chapter! I can't wait to read the next! :D

Author's Response: Kettleburn is a cross between Billy Connolley's Uncle Monty in a Series of Unfortunate Events and a Monty Python character. :D I'm glad you love him too!

The Knights of Walpurgis are the secret organization Voldemort supporters that maintain their places in society, while DE's are the what the public know. They're the inner circle who wreak havoc and often have their faces on 'Most Wanted' posters! :)

Reviewer: Valentinia
Date: 04/02/07 23:47
Chapter: Classes

Yay for Slinky! He finds his way into everything, doesn't he? :D Otherwise, this chapter was cool, too! I keep reading Eris instead of Erik whenever he shows up... Had me freaked for a second there... But I can't wait to see what happens when Snape is brought to... wherever they're taking him... And I feel so sorry for Eris! Her uncle... *shudder* How can she look at Remus? Anyway...great chapter!

Author's Response: Slinky even found himself written into my R/T OotP story by accident. My beta said 'did you realize you put 'Slinky' instead of 'Kreacher' ?' :D I was definitely freaked for a second there, heh.

Reviewer: Valentinia
Date: 04/02/07 23:35
Chapter: Conversations

Aw. Love Severus with the cat, :D. And poor Eris! What a nasty thing for "Uncle Fenny" to do to her! I wonder how this fic with progress, and I'm really enjoying seeing more on Eris' and Severus' characters! Plus, the bit about Narcissa was rather sad, and did add to the chapter. Which was great, by the way, :)

Author's Response: Thank you! I have a different characterization of Narcissa in this story. She's self-absorbed and vain, but she's mad about Lucius and a good friend. Uncle Fenny gets even more interesting as time goes on.

Reviewer: Valentinia
Date: 04/02/07 23:19
Chapter: Observations

Hi again! :D I just can't resist reading whatever you write...
And this promises to be a great read! I really like your character of Eris! She keeps seeming to be almost a Mary Sue only to... you know, not be... :) And I like your portrayal of Snape! It seems very much like I would imagine a younger version of the canon character we all know! :D I'll go read the next chapter now...

Author's Response: Yay! You're reading this story!

I smiled over your review- that's the handicap of writing OFC, lol. Ever read the HP Mary Sue Litmus Test? Even if your character isn't incredibly beautiful, popular in all Houses, talented, desired by males, envied by females and doesn't change/save the boy she has a romance with, you still have points against her for being an attractive female, non-canon character having a romance with a canon character. I learnt to live with it, since I must admit when I read OFC I tend to have a 'prove to me she's not a Sue' attitude. :D

Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 03/14/07 14:17
Chapter: Decisions

I think I got confused during that whole cruciatius thing. I know they wanted to erase Lily's mind so her guilty feeling wouldn't cause her to "tell". Then Snape erased James mind because he was too transparent. And Eris is the secret keeper so that no one knows what happened unless she tells. But if this is the case, James shouldn't be having that conversation with Eris about keeping secrets from Severus nor discussing whether an automatic prison sentence for the Cruciatius is ethical.

The rest of the story was excellant. Not sure how you did it but you made it believable that Eris would fall for a potential Death Eater.

Author's Response: Thank you! To be like Inigo and sum up, they used a Memory Charm on Lily, so she wouldn't go noble and tell. James is keeping Lily's secret, therefore he needs a Secret Keeper so no one can find out what Lily did, even by using Legilimency. James chose Eris, so after Severus assisted James and Eris with Fidelius Charms, she used a Memory Charm on him.

Severus thought he and Eris had been snogging, then hid under the desk when they heard someone trying to enter. Hearing Potter say his girlfriend’s name, Severus rolled his eyes. He should’ve hexed instead of hidden.

Thank you for the compliment, and if you get a chance to read The Potions Master's Apprentice, I'll be thrilled! ^_^

Reviewer: Willow Rosenberg
Date: 01/29/07 18:28
Chapter: Meetings

ahaha. i defintely love your portrayal of kettleburn. hilarious.

Author's Response: Thank you! He's very Monty Python inspired. :D

Reviewer: VeniaTaint
Date: 01/03/07 16:04
Chapter: Decisions

This is probably one of my favorite fics of ALL TIME! your characters are really well developed, and you make some key points as to relationships that occur with Severus in the HP books...Your writing is gorgeous, and the Greyback family adds so much depth and meaning and explanation to the books, keep up the fantastic job! The only thing I'm dissapointed about is Sirius, yoiu represent him as such a...blank...character, just a face with a voice and nothing behind it, very little expression or reason...all in all a fantastic piece though! and I absolutly love the Greyback house scenes; they'r well put together and really openup alot about the characters...keep on writting (I'd like to see a Tom Wilkes fic personally) and best wishes in the New Year!
~The Tainted One

Author's Response: Wow, thank you for the nice compliments! As for Sirius, yes, exactly, to Severus (Eris too, really) he has no reason for acting the way he does than a rabid (pun intended) dislike of Slytherin in general and Snape in particular!

If you ever read the Sirius fic Semi Charmed Life you'll see that Snape comes across as a snarky git to prank to Sirius and a boy to be pitied to Rosmerta, but doesn't have much of a role in that story, because he just wasn't that important. What is primary is Sirius' friends and girl.

In this story Black is despised, but this is seventh year--Severus has his future...and a girl...on his mind.

Thanks for bringing that up. I love to talk stories...as you can prolly tell....:D

Reviewer: ladrea
Date: 01/02/07 16:02
Chapter: Decisions

hhhhhhmmm!! keeps getting better all the time! Happy new year to you, hoping 2007 will bring us more of your great stories!

Author's Response: Great timing! I just posted the sequel The Potions Master's Apprentice! Happy New Year to you too, and I hope you enjoy Severus and Eris' adventures in Wales. ^_^

Reviewer: Athene713
Date: 12/30/06 19:06
Chapter: Decisions

Sounds great! I can't wait for the sequel, and awesome chapter!

Author's Response: Thank you! Severus and Eris' relationship is definitely 'adult' in the sequel, but it's still T rated sexiness. :D

Reviewer: lilyevans91
Date: 12/29/06 12:29
Chapter: Decisions

this was a wonderful ending to a wonderful story! i loved the plot--it's romantic and complicated, realistic and fun. you make all the characters real and yet likeable too, and i love the ending line--it reminds me of the goblet of fire movie, when harry and moody are talking about the dragons, and harry says, i'm not allowed a broom, and moody replies, you're allowed a wand. great job, i can't wait for the sequel!

Author's Response: I can't wait to be able to post the sequel, :D, so thanks for sharing my eagerness! I didn't remember that line, but those kind of responses resonate, don't they? Thank you for reading, and especially for looking forward to the next story!

Reviewer: Hermione_Rocks
Date: 12/27/06 19:08
Chapter: Decisions

Yay! It was perfect, and I'm glad it's a happy ending. Looking forward to the sequel! :)

Author's Response: Thank you for looking forward to the sequel. I think you'll enjoy the adult shift of the story and the Welsh location!

Reviewer: Leukhendian
Date: 12/27/06 8:32
Chapter: Decisions

Yaaay... can't wait for the sequel! ^_^

Author's Response: Thank you! I had so much fun researching all sorts of things Welsh. I think you'll enjoy it too! (First chap starts off with Severus in the bath, lol)

Reviewer: A House Elf
Date: 12/26/06 18:31
Chapter: Decisions

Well, I'm glad you 'begged.' It made my day. So, if the story's done, why is still shown as uncompleted?

Author's Response: I forgot you can make it complete without editing. The site is wonky, won't let me update with a ch 24 quote, saying the category is locked. Grrr.... I've changed the status to complete now, thanks to you! ^_^

Reviewer: A House Elf
Date: 12/26/06 13:13
Chapter: Decisions

Perfect! I love it! How did you get this in during break? Oh, I don't care. What a wonderful ending! I want to read the next one really bad now. Oh, and the whole doll-giving thing... is that tied into "White Wedding"? At least, I think that's what you called that Narcissa/Lucius one-shot.

Author's Response: Thank you and yes, exactly! I wrote White Wedding at the same time...just didn't get round to posting this chap as soon. :D On the home page, it says 'there are ways'...I think they involve begging and pleading, although I could be wrong, lol.

Reviewer: madelynn
Date: 12/21/06 21:41
Chapter: Observations

good! :D
and by the way, how's it going with the Remus/Tonks stories?
hope you update semi charmed life too. it's great. :D
happy christmas!

Author's Response: SCL and the R/T story should update today, cross fingers! (Got to have them out of the way so I can post the final chapter of this story. :D) I hope your holiday is one of joy and peace!

Reviewer: jennifer_Gryffindor
Date: 12/21/06 13:34
Chapter: Darkness

i love it !!! makes me want to sit around all day on the computer waiting for the next
to be posted!!

Author's Response: Oh, thank you! I promise the last chap will be up soon. ^_^

Reviewer: A House Elf
Date: 12/21/06 0:34
Chapter: Observations

Oh, and here's who I think did it:
1. Lily Evans - Because of that insane-ness Tom made her go through.
2. Um... Me - Because she gets Snape.
3. Me. Oh, yeah. I said that.

Author's Response: Temporary insanity is a good plea...what's your excuse? :D Thanks for the laugh, I'll try and have the last chap up soon so you'll know 'who done it'!

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