Reviewer: 7 11 all the way
Date: 01/02/07 23:31
Chapter: ...and prose

i know im reviewing kinda late but better late then never right!?lol but i really liked it!! it was very cute and sweet! i liked the prose it explained more! anyways it was very cute good job!!!

Author's Response: Thanks so much!

Reviewer: evil prince
Date: 12/29/06 8:23
Chapter: ...and prose

I liked these very very much =D both are very good but I liked the dialogue more then the prose..I know the prose is more detailed but you still kind of get the picture with the dialogue.......just need imagination =D =D =D =D

Author's Response: Imagination totally rocks, doens't it? =D

Reviewer: evil prince
Date: 12/29/06 8:20
Chapter: ...and prose

I think that the first one is bettter- the dialogue-

=D....I love


Author's Response: Thank you!

Reviewer: DragonPhoenix
Date: 12/02/06 15:46
Chapter: ...and prose

i must admit i like the prose better than the first chapter. it explains things better and sounds better. anyway, good story, love it

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: Elpinoine
Date: 12/02/06 10:27
Chapter: ...and prose

I live the prose version best. The story is more compelling that way. It just seems more... natural that way I guess. With pure dialog you sometimes just don't know how to fill in the blanks. But don't get me wrong! I enjoyed both very, very much! Keep writing!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for enjoying! I promise to keep writing if you keep on reviewing!

Reviewer: Celestial Melody
Date: 10/17/06 18:21
Chapter: ...and prose

Hee! I enjoyed that very much. You have a great writing style; very sweet and funny at the same time without being sickeningly sweet at all. Marvelous! :-)

However, I do have a touch of critique. (I always do ... sorry.) *shrugs* You wrote that "Remus asks for gritted teeth." This is not the correct expression--at least, it isn't one that I'm familiar with--I've always heard it as, "...THROUGH gritted teeth." And, yes, I know, it's so very minor and you really don't need to change it. But, there you have it... I'm picky; what can I say? :-)

All in all, though--and I'm going to leave my review for the first chapter of this, too--I really enjoyed this story. As I said before, you have a lovely gift for writing and it made me happy to read this.

I enjoyed the extra information on the second chapter because, first and foremost, I am a details-oriented reader and writer. I adore stories that are full of imagery and my writing is chock-full of it as well. However, I find myself enjoying the first chapter as much as, or maybe more than, the second. The short sentences truly captured the innocent feelings of Sirius and Lupin's exasperation showed through the pages extraordinarily well. Really, I commend you for taking those short sentences and imbuing them with meaning though you were limited to dialogue. Really lovely two-part one-shot. I enjoyed it very much. :-)

~Julia~

Author's Response:
Oh, I do try SO hard not to be sickiningly sweet

*rushes to correct*

I'm a detail oriented reader/writer myself. I want to know everything that's going on. Writing this the first way, with only the dialogue was a bit of a challenge for myself. To see if I could provide a visual without actually GIVING one. I'm glad I managed it.

Thanks, love!

Reviewer: dragonsrock
Date: 09/09/06 17:48
Chapter: ...and prose

nice


Author's Response: thanks

Reviewer: Depper92
Date: 08/11/06 20:25
Chapter: Something to Keep You Warm-dialogue

That was sooo cute! (((laughing incontrollably)))

Author's Response: Thanks!

Reviewer: vega lyrae
Date: 08/06/06 11:41
Chapter: ...and prose

Aaah, great one! I think I liked just the dialogue better, but both very good... More please!

Author's Response: I'm glad you enjoyed! My author's page is littered witih Sirius/Remus stories if you'd like more, though. Thanks for reading.

Reviewer: vega lyrae
Date: 08/06/06 11:39
Chapter: ...and prose

Aaah, great one! I think I liked just the dialogue better, but both very good... More please!

Reviewer: Kyr
Date: 07/07/06 11:39
Chapter: ...and prose

Love it. Them... I think the dialogue is more effective but the prose is slightly more genteel on the nerves. LoL

Author's Response: Lol. And whenever I read over it and I go from the dialogue into the prose, I always feel like I'm experiencing a train wreck. Glad you enjoyed them both!

Reviewer: nikki_malfoy
Date: 07/04/06 5:24
Chapter: ...and prose

oh..that story is soooo cute.. i dont know if cute is the word that you wanted but i think that it is very... good.. lolim so glad tat you have written so many sirius/remus stories cause they ae V good

Author's Response: Cute. Fluffy. Same difference. I'm glad you're enjoying them all!

Reviewer: i_luv_the_marauders
Date: 06/22/06 20:50
Chapter: ...and prose

i liek teh version with the way they said things and the movements added

Author's Response: Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: Alexys_Nicole
Date: 06/19/06 5:23
Chapter: Something to Keep You Warm-dialogue

FUNNY!!! (Ashwee the slow: My friend is actually right for once.) YAY. What are we talking about again?(Ashwee the slow: the stor.) Yea the story it is VERY GOOD. I was Remus(The Smart One) BYE

Author's Response: Thank you.

Reviewer: Konrad
Date: 06/17/06 13:08
Chapter: Something to Keep You Warm-dialogue

Marvelous, really. I enjoyed reading this, it's quite refreshing in comparition with other fics. I'm afraid I can't be too constructive, the only thing I noticed is that you've entered too much at a certain point.

------------------------
“What?”

“Your heart is still going very fast. If I put my ear on your chest I can hear it thumping. It sounds like someone’s after
it.”

“I’m sure that someone is. You never know who might want my heart on a silver platter.”
------------------------

Just so you'd know :-) Furthermore I'd just have to admit that I'm jealous that I didn't wrote this...

Author's Response:
Thanks for pointing that out; I'll fix it right now.

I'm almost entirely sure I've never been so flattered in my life...

Reviewer: anAnachronism
Date: 06/16/06 17:55
Chapter: ...and prose

Ah, alright, after "ghost-reading" quite a lot of your other fics, I'll review. And I must admit that, as someone who is normally squirmy about reading any sort of romance, especially SSP, I am hooked. You wrote this beautifully, and it really is sweet.

I find it very interesting that you included the prose second, even more interesting is that I could already figure out most of the tones of voice/who was speaking, etc. without the prose. Congrats on this masterful storytelling, it really is marvelous!

Author's Response: Well, I'm glad that you've finally come out and reviewed something, especially this. The reason that the prose came second is because it was written second and the original fic really is only the first chapter of dialogue. I'm glad you didn't find it too confusing. Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: Purplemage
Date: 06/11/06 18:48
Chapter: ...and prose

I really enjoyed the interaction between Sirius and Remus, it's great characterizarion! It's funny and sweet at the same time. I also liked the fact that Remus was the one to kiss Sirius and in such an unexpected manner. Great job!

Author's Response: I'm rather proud of this alternate 'first kiss' version myself. Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: aintcrazy4you
Date: 06/05/06 17:04
Chapter: Something to Keep You Warm-dialogue

Love it!!! ={) Funny and cuuutttee!

Author's Response: Thank you!

Reviewer: williow
Date: 06/04/06 18:38
Chapter: ...and prose

i LOVE this! i read the other version first (which i also love by the way) but this is just that little bit more special seeing as it goes just that little bit furthur... ; P !!

sequel??

Author's Response: I find it so interesting, which version people prefer....No sequel to this, directly, but other fics and one-shots that feature them, certainly. And 'Much Ado About Puppies' of course. Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: anonymousreader
Date: 05/30/06 20:08
Chapter: ...and prose

Good job with that story. You managed to make me grin that fabulous grin of mine when I realise something big. This story was great and while I must say that I'm not too big of a fan of Lupin/Remus I might have to rethink my opinions of them all.

Author's Response:
Lupin/Remus is one person, you do realize? *grin* Sirius and Remus, on the other hand, happen to be one of the greatest, most shipped pairings in the fandom. You just have to realize the limitless potential that the pairing has; the two really are incredibly compatible and suit each other perfectly, balancing each other out and what not. I love my puppies and I'm so happy I got such a grin out of you.

Go read 'Much Ado About Puppies' if you liked this; it originally started out as a joint fic, but as the other writers never really got involved (or wrote anything) it's currently 12 chapters written by me, with a different version of the First Kiss.

Thanks for reading!

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