Weird pairing. You write really well. It was nice , the ending. :)
That was very sweet - and also an extremely strange pairing. I didn't see, though, much of Myrtle's traditional self-pitying moods. Maybe you should have her start off as sad, and then have Neville convince her she's not so alone. That would be more in character for Myrtle.
Great work with a rare pairing!
I liked it-- I think the idea of Myrtle/Neville would take a bit of getting used to for some people, though. However, it was very good. They pretty much seem to keep each other from delving into self-pity, which is a great thing. It would be fun to read a sequel where Neville introduces Myrtle to Luna. *Yay, Neville fanclub power!*
Awww. I can't stop saying it. Awww! This was a really sweet story. And what an interesting ship too, I never would have thought of it. Although it really isn't so farfetched--Neville and Myrtle really do have quite a lot in common! And the human/ghost relationship opens up a lot of possibilities, possiblities that I think you handled very cleverly in this story--not to mention adorably. :) I love how Neville just immediately closed his eyes and prepared himself for a kiss when he saw the mistletoe--he definetly trusted her.
Onto concrit, I did notice this one small tense change in the first paragraph: But even so, it looked like Neville was the only one that took her up on the offer. I didn't notice it at first, but upon rereading, I'm pretty sure that it should be "Neville was the only one that had taken her up on the offer."
I saw this occuring twice, when you had parentheses, but you placed a comma both before and after the parentheses, such as in this sentence: Astonished by the sight of Myrtle babbling as though bitten by the know-it-all bug, (much like a certain Gryffindor he knew), ... I'm pretty sure that there should only be one comma, usually after the final paretheses.
All in all though, it was very cute. :) I really liked you portrayal of Neville--particularly when he had the courage to stand up to Gran and say that he was staying at Hogwarts, despite her protests. Go Neville!
And stay there he would…but not in the bathtub because his hands were starting to prune.
It was subtle little sentences like this that made me laugh--you share my sense of humor, I can tell. I thought this was a very original, funny peice, and I'd love to read more of your work...it made me smile, a lot.
And thank you so much for contributing to our group! I gotta say, you win a special "Good Member" award, lol! I'll send you a cookie and huggles! Thanks a lot, it's a great story, and I'm really grateful to you for posting it! Good job. =)
I really kinda liked this story. I'm glad that someone was nice to Myrtle. I think if anyone could understand what Myrtle went through when she was at school it would be Neville. Keep up the good work.