Reviewer: FaithintheFutur
Date: 02/23/08 2:49
Chapter: Breaking the Mind Trap

I love how caring draco is in this story!

Author's Response: Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it. He's not always a selfish child, and I think he always has the opportunity to change and grow up well.

Reviewer: cutiepoet
Date: 11/02/07 22:01
Chapter: Breaking the Mind Trap

Good story. I liked the eerie theme to the flashback. Wonderful writing style. My, you've got talent!

Author's Response: Thank you very much for the review. I'm glad to hear that Hermione's nightmare came out as vividly as I hoped!

Reviewer: dollfaceDISASTER
Date: 06/30/07 10:43
Chapter: Breaking the Mind Trap

awh, this was such a cute combination of angst and fluff. i love it!

Author's Response: Thanks, I'm glad you liked it!

Reviewer: dollfaceDISASTER
Date: 01/01/07 20:00
Chapter: Breaking the Mind Trap

That was so sweet. I loved it!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I'm glad you liked it.

Reviewer: padfoot_returns
Date: 12/19/06 17:36
Chapter: Breaking the Mind Trap

that was so cute. i rly liked it, even though i expected hermione to be more sorry for him about his mother's death. overall, it was a great one-shot especially the last part. great job

Author's Response: Thanks alot for the review. I suppose I thought that Hermione would be more upset about being locked up than worrying about Draco's feelings and thinking about how everything could go wrong... Anyway, thanks again!

Reviewer: houndog5383
Date: 10/14/06 21:00
Chapter: Breaking the Mind Trap

awww I LUFF IT!

Author's Response: Thanks, and glad you enjoyed it!

Reviewer: ThemrsRemnisLupin
Date: 07/24/06 14:10
Chapter: Breaking the Mind Trap

pretty good story

Author's Response: Thanks for the review.

Reviewer: ans
Date: 07/12/06 10:10
Chapter: Breaking the Mind Trap

FLUFF!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review, although I must confess I did not mean it to be fluff at all...

Reviewer: Hermione_twin
Date: 06/25/06 20:44
Chapter: Breaking the Mind Trap

Wow, that was really good! I loved it! You write really well, it's easy to tell! (oops, little rhyme there! lol) It flowed well, it was interesting and you wrote it in a wat that you stay hooked! Oh, but I wish it was longer than a one-shot though! I would have loved to read on! Doesn't matter, I loved it and it was great like that!!!!! I wouldn't have you change a thing! Please keep on writing, love your stuff! Once more that was great! :-)

Author's Response: Wow, triple post... Thanks again, again.

Reviewer: Hermione_twin
Date: 06/25/06 20:43
Chapter: Breaking the Mind Trap

Wow, that was really good! I loved it! You write really well, it's easy to tell! (oops, little rhyme there! lol) Oh, but I wish it was longer than a one-shot though! I would have loved to read on! Doesn't matter, I loved it and it was great like that!!!!! I wouldn't have you change a thing! Please keep on writing, love your stuff! Once more that was great! :-)

Author's Response: Oops double post! Thanks again.

Reviewer: Hermione_twin
Date: 06/25/06 20:42
Chapter: Breaking the Mind Trap

Wow, that was really good! I loved it! You write really well, it's easy to tell! (oops, little rhyme there! lol) Oh, but I wish it was longer than a one-shot though! I would have loved to read on! Doesn't matter, I loved it and it was great like that!!!!! I wouldn't have you change a thing! Please keep on writing, love your stuff! Once more that was great! :-)

Author's Response: Thanks for the review and the praise. Perhaps I will find the time to expand this but probably not for a while. Thanks again.

Reviewer: comewhatmay
Date: 06/16/06 11:43
Chapter: Breaking the Mind Trap

your writing flows elegantly
with every word. you try not to force
the choice of words like so many other
writers here. well love the story.


Author's Response: Thank you for your praise. I live for words, so it is a very nice compliment to know that you think well of it. Thanks.

Reviewer: Narci Jones
Date: 06/09/06 18:31
Chapter: Breaking the Mind Trap

what dresser.......lol jk.......phewww!! that insider on harry and ginny calmed my nerves....keep up da good work!!

Author's Response: Glad you aren't fretting about the story.

Reviewer: Periwinkle
Date: 06/08/06 16:54
Chapter: Breaking the Mind Trap

What a wonderful story! How captivating!
I love how you start the beginning - so quickly yet powerfully.

She screamed, the animal-like howl stretched like a taut wire in the quiet of the night.

I love the sentence above. It introduces the story for the readers quite surprisingly. One would not expect for a beginning to be so rough, so filled with emotion. The description doesn't mar the beginning, however, it adds to it; fills it up. I like the choice of words - taut, howl, quite, wire, night. They're quite normal words, but when placed together in the context you put them in, they create quite a distinct atmosphere. What is interesting is that you started out your first sentence with a strong metaphor, something I don't quite see around here. And that's how you guaranteed the reader's attention....that's how you reeled them in. Lovely.

The way you presented Hermione's feelings was fantastic. It's how one would expect her to feel and act, but you added a special touch of your own.

The transition from reality to her dream wasn't as smooth. However, for some reason it fits with the story perfectly. The story up to this point is raw, tough, strong. Your transition gave it an edge; another push. I don't think a smooth transtition would have worked as effectively, then.

Your paragraphs flow fluidly together. You don't have Hermione feeling horrified and then calm the next. The paragraphs eventually give way to each other, they transfer cleanly from one to another. Even in that transition from present to past, the paragraphs' mood stays the same. It never really changes.

In that vein, I quite like how you managed to keep the mood consistent to the end of the fic. Even if the words and phrases had different meanings - opposite words, the mood never quite changed. Even at the end, when everything is sunny and hopeful, as readers we never forget what happened before. We don't forget. Even though Hermione is now happy, no longer suffering, we still remember how it felt before. That may sound too easy to you. That of course everyone remembers what happened earlier in the fic. But they momentarily forget when they read the solution. In your story, as we're reading the ending lines, in the back of our minds, something nags and holds on tight, making us remember what happened earlier WHILE reading the current text. And that's pretty impressive.

Dear, I've rambled on more than I thought I would. But your story is quite fascinating. Let me get back on track... ;)

To the dream...I like how you keep Draco's personality hidden in him. He's obviously changed, different. But you still have him posess some of his previous qualities, so it' realistic. He's not kind-to-everyone-suddenly-nice Draco, but the change is evident. You don't completely change him, like some authors do. Rather, you change one side of him, and leave the other intact. The other side of him still gives snide remarks. It still isn't as polite as it could be. It still is a part of him.

I love the ending of the dream...it connects with the rest of the fic splendidly. The light of in the doorway introduces the hope that the rest of the story brings. It is a great prelude to the rest of the text. What makes it a bit strange is Draco saying he's scared. It doesn't quite fit in with the current situation. He was confident at the beginning, and then he experienced hesitation; fear. But it is a human emotion, and almost an expected one. I suppose it's part of the change in the story that you're introducing, however, it mars the area there a bit.

At the beginning of the dream, Draco is saving Hermione. But then, at the end, you have Hermione saving Draco. It's a subtle hint, yet a profound difference. It shows what love can do and how it can change people.

The ending is satisfactory and clears away any doubts or lingering feelings. I think it's the perfect ending to your story, if there is such. You don't give away everything...there are a couple things for us to mull over.

Stunning job, Kristin! Loved it. ;)

Author's Response: Wow, thanks for the critiques/ comments, you have no idea how much I appreciate them. I really wanted this story to be raw emotion rather than plot, too much love seems to be the wishy washy stuff of pink paper hearts and butterfly wings. Draco is my favorite character to write, so I am really relieved that you (as a fellow Draco lover) think he is in character. As for Draco being scared, I wanted him to have thought about getting Hermione out, but not really contemplating what would happen after that. He could block it out up to the point where he was faced with the door and then he had to make and irrevokable decision. I probably should have showed that better rather than just assuming the reader would pick up on it. Oh well. Thank you again and glad you liked it!

Reviewer: Narci Jones
Date: 06/07/06 19:22
Chapter: Breaking the Mind Trap

did they actually take harry???!?!?!? is he okay......AHHHH!!!

great fic by the way.......A+!!!

Author's Response: Ooops, double review! Thanks again!

Reviewer: Narci Jones
Date: 06/07/06 19:21
Chapter: Breaking the Mind Trap

did they actually take harry???!?!?!? is he okay......AHHHH!!!

great fic by the way.......A+!!!

Author's Response: They did not take Harry. Draco got Hermione out so he had no reason to come for her. Also, just to set your mind at rest, Harry married Ginny (see photo on dresser) and is living quite happily. Glad you liked it!

Reviewer: hermionelover87
Date: 06/07/06 18:10
Chapter: Breaking the Mind Trap

awww how cute!!! great story

Author's Response: Glad you liked it and thanks for the review.

Reviewer: dracosgirl06
Date: 05/07/06 17:17
Chapter: Breaking the Mind Trap

That was a really bittersweet story. it was really good.

Author's Response: Thanks. I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Reviewer: shinyface
Date: 03/20/06 0:18
Chapter: Breaking the Mind Trap

Very believable. Very sweet and sour relationship, nicely done.

Author's Response: Thanks. I'm glad if was realistic, since that is one of my biggest focuses. I appreciate the review!

Reviewer: KneazleWeazl
Date: 03/04/06 12:04
Chapter: Breaking the Mind Trap

OOOH IT'S GOOD!!! YOU'VE LEFT ME WONDERING A MANY THINGS, SO UPDATE DAMN IT!!!

Author's Response: I'm afraid that this is a one-shot, so there won't be any updates. But I am very glad you enjoyed the fic.

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