Reviews For Everytime
Reviewer: Traggles
Date: 07/02/06 3:49
Chapter: EveryTime

It's a good poem, but it's very vipolent. I wonder why they got married, if they are Lucious Malfoy is violent.

Reviewer: Octopus
Date: 07/02/06 3:44
Chapter: EveryTime

That poem is a bit violent. I don't like the Malfoys.

Reviewer: RiddleHatred
Date: 06/08/06 10:21
Chapter: EveryTime

Oh... this is sad. *snifflesnuffle* My friend Angora-chan is v. into the Malfoys, so I must get her to read this.

Reviewer: Lilypudding
Date: 03/03/06 15:27
Chapter: EveryTime

I really liked this poem. It conveyed a story well, besides being well written. I have issue structuring poems, and I like how you structured it well while conveying emotion. I would really really like to read free verse or a very loose poem by you, because you did a very good job making this an interesting read and a good story while keeping an orderly rhyme scheme and structure. I'd really like to congradulate you on writing such a beautiful poem about Narcissa and Lucious and their relationship, a subject many authors are testy around. I've read one of your other poems and plan on reading more. I must say, I really enjoy your insight on the Malfoy's lives. You have a great poetic skill and I really can't say more but wonderful job. *Goes off to read more of your poems!*

Reviewer: iliveinaworldofcandy
Date: 03/03/06 7:36
Chapter: EveryTime

I thought this was a very good, intriguing poem. A few things to point out: 1. I think there is a typo in one line, it says "I" when I think it should say "in" or something. 2.I found the structure interesting. While there was some definite rules-ie first and third (?) lines rhymed, and four lines per stanza, there were also some places where you allowed yourself more freedom- ie syllabal count. I think this did a good job in conveying Narcissa's emotions, while at the same time being poetic. 3. I love the story! Moving away from the technicality of the poetry, the idea that Narcissa is abused by Lucius and yet continues to love him is, I find, very touching. (not sure if thats exactly the right word, but hey). Overall, excellent job! I'm off to see what else you've written.

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