Periwinkle, this story was great! For your first fanfic, I would have to say it is pretty decently written. Your grammar is really good. I thought that you portrayed Draco pretty well in this, and you incorporated the lyrics nicely. I really like this song, and I think the storyline that you created with it was very fitting. You kind of show a different side to Draco, about him hating his life, kind of looking back at all the wrong that he had done in the past. I think your descriptions are wonderful. They are very effective, like this one: “Draco wasn't alive. He wasn't living. He was empty, a broken shell. He was a shadow of someone else.” I thought this was an interesting way to put how he felt. In my mind, I pictured like an eggshell, that was cracked, sort of. Empty and sitting alone. There were a couple of other good ones as well, but this one I thought was particularly good. Not sure why it stood out. Great stuff, though! 10/10
Author's Response: Thanks! I really appreciate your review! I'm glad you liked it! Those descriptions just came to me...I felt it fit in with what Draco was feeling at the moment. Thanks again for the review! *huggles*
I cannot ever be sympathetic towards Draco and I had this prejudice about Draco/Hermione fics. But you have pulled off an amazing one here.
I liked the description of Draco, forlorn and confined to himself. Great sentences to start off with. Excellent depiction. Does Draco drink Jack Daniels? Where's the Firewhisky?
Anyways, I will be looking forward to the next chapters if there are any. P.S. Please read and review my fic.
Author's Response: Thanks, I really appreciate your review!! Draco was feeling very muggle at the time, so that's why he was drinking Jack Daniels. ;)
Adore it! I think that it was an interesting way to end... very different, esp. for a one shot because it isn't terribly sad, nor is it incredibly happy either. I definitely think that you should continue! If you don’t I'll have to resort to begging! 8D
Author's Response: Thank you! I wanted to do something that wasn't cliche..something different. I'm glad you guys are enjoying it! As for you, I'm leaning more on the side of doing a sequal. Probably. Most likely. ;)
That's a really good story, I'm no Draco/Hermione shipper, but I still think you did it well, and Boulevard of Broken Dreams is perfect for the kind of story you were doing. Of course, one of the reasons I like it is because Green Day's my favourite band and Boulevard of Broken Dreams my favourite song, but hey! You're still a really good author. 10/10
Author's Response: Aww... thanks. You really made my morning, cause you were the first to respond. But thank you to all my reviewers! I know BoBD is good. I was sitting on my bed, listening to the radio, and all of a sudden this song came on, and I'm like "Wow, I could use this for a story!" So there you go.
im such an idiot, i forgot to say the most important thing: I WANT A CHAPTERED SEQUEL PLS!!!!!!!! oh wait i made a mistake: I NEED A CHAPTERED SEQUEL NOW!!!! pretty pls??????? c'mon u left it at a cliffhanger, now i really need more!!!
Author's Response: Maybe if I get more responses I can get a better idea if you guys are interested...
I luved it!!!!! Very interesting, and very different!!!!!! You r an amazing writer!!!!! U really should write more dr/hr fics!!!! ny ways, 1000/10!!!!!!! really very much enjoyed!!!
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it!!