I love poetry a lot and this is really a good
poem. This is a piece of a poem by
Edgar Allan Poe "All that we see or seem
is but a dream within a dream" that is one of my favorite poems. Well just look at me carrying on. It was really lovely.
I like this poem. It was a little brief, but good to read. There wasn't much story, yet it portrayed feelings extremely accurately. I can't say how much I enjoyed it. What's with the Abuse warning though? I'd give it an 8 or 9/ out of ten probably because I'm picky. On one hand, I think the fact there was no set rhyme scheme was doing something different, on the other it just can't compare with some poems I've read with rhyme scheme. However, I have to congradulate you on a worthy effort and capturing emotion extremely well.
I really enjoyed this poem. I love the repition of the first and last line, as well as the lovely description of the passing of time. Also, the structure of the poem is very good. My one complaint is that we didn't get much story from the actual poem... I feel that I would have been pretty confused without the summary, but I also love the sparse detail, so what are you gonna do? One question- why the dubious consent warning? Overall- 9/10
Author's Response: Well...you're going to think I'm a bit...stupid but I didn't mean to put the warning 'dubious consent' on this poem. I have no idea what I did or why i put that there. Believe me, I'm laughing hysterically because of it and an error caused by me. Anyway, more serious matters to press...I know i didn't put any of the story in the poem but you see...most poems are like that anyway. In Romeo and Juliet, at the party scene where they both share a dance, has anyone noticed together, they make up a sonnet? That poem has nothing about their story its about one thing...love. Thats what my poem is about, starined love for someone who is far away as plus, isn't it more fun to figure out the poem for yourself??? You know, to find the deep meaning behind all the phrases I used and metaphors. Next time...I might not have a summary at all and people will just have to guess...*laughs ebily*