I`m terribly sorry for reviewing again, but I had to because I read it, again, and cired, again. But everytime I read this I see another side of Draco portrayed. This time I love how he`s angry at Ginny for thinking she has it all: the status, now. How he used to be the exact same, but now he only cares about her. Keep writing!, I love your flowing, while still naturally changing style.
This is fabulous!!!! I'm pretty sure I have already reviewed this several times, but I never get bored of it. It brings out every side out Draco, the ones you see, and the ones he keeps to himself. My favourite is by far the sixth paragraph because Draco first demands that she apologizes but because he loves her so much his anger changes to Harry. This, would totally be real love and I kind of wish that Draco and Ginny had gotten together in the actual movie.
This is one of the BEST stories on here, and the 2nd saddest story/book/letter (whichever you prefer to call it) and I LOVE it to no, even though I like happy ending, this is just soo amazingly well-written that every time I read it I cry. I desperately hope you keep writing stories, because otherwise your pure talent would go to so much waste! Luv it
This is by far one of the best stories I've read on here...and I really hope you write more...but I wish he did send the letter...why? because i feel like she should be as depressed as he is. Keep writing I love it!
Absolutely amazing. Not at all what I expected, since I'm not a very experienced Draco/Ginny reader. I loved this story so much so, though, that I felt compelled to review.
The entire letter flowed so smoothly and seemed to fit just perfectly together. How it went from bittersweet and sad to an almost accusatory tone and back to the bittersweet worked wonderfully. I feel you really captured Draco's character. He's always being bitter about everything around him and loves to blame Harry for getting things he doesn't deserve. He's also a bit of a possesive kind of person and you demonstrated that through him calling Ginny his. "You were mine-" Also, good job with the fancy vocab!
But it was confusing when he kept referring to a letter he never even recieved. Maybe I just missed something, but how does he know she explained everything if she had never sent it?
Other than that one point, the rest was fantastic. This is really a beautiful piece of work. Thanks for sharing your gift!
Author's Response: When Draco refers to the letter he "never recieved" he is, in a way, lost in his own thoughts and insanity. The letter is a fantasy, and how he believes things should be. He wished that Ginny had left him something like a letter to explain why everything went wrong. Hope that helps! :]
In the letter you never wrote me, you told me you'd never forget all those days we spent at that teashop in Diagon Alley. I love how the reader at once is made curious. I had to blink and read this line several times to try and understand what was going to happen next with them. It's hard to start like that, with no introduction or prologue, and I thought it was quite interesting.
With or without a dark lord, love would still remain. But apparently, my hopes were wrong at a time they were needed most. I found this part confusing because I couldn't tell whether Draco was saying that he wanted Ginny to tell him all of that about the war, or whether that's what he himself thought about it.
Left me alone to rot here in this…this prison. I think what you wanted here was an interrupter, meaning two dashes, like so: --
At that very moment I hear a mother's cry as she loses a son; a husbands sobs as his wife slips into an everlasting sleep. The punctuation in this sentence was a little hard to follow. I think a comma after 'moment' would make it clearer. Also, the examples you gave in this paragraph, of everything Draco had to endure, were heartbreaking. In a powerful way.
May it never be sent, just for you. What a poignant ending! I feel terrible for Draco, and the conclusion to his letter is really a pouring-out of everything he's said above. Excellent job with that. Of course, the happily-ever-after side of me wants him to end up sending it, and for him to feel better and Ginny to be distraught.
Oh, and I love Libba Bray. And I didn't know your penname. How did I not know that? You did a magnificent job with this story, Jen love!
wow omg! wow omg! wow omg! this was so beautiful! words cannot describe what this did to me! it was just beautiful! i loved it! absolutely loved it!
I like. I like. Very good. I like how you put "in the letter you never wrote me...". Good Job, ol' mate! -.-
I really liked this, great job!
like the other reviewers, I'm not usually a DM/GW shipper, but your story was so good I'm starting to reconsider. it's a really good, descriptive portrayal of the REALLY down sides of a wonderful thing. great job!!
like the other reviewers, I'm not usually a DM/GW shipper, but your story was so good I'm starting to reconsider. it's a really good, descriptive portrayal of the down sides of a wonderful thing. great job!!
by the way, I loved the last line "May it never be sent, just for you..." AWESOME!
Wow! Another great piece of writing. I love how the whole story is a letter. Again, very original. Draco's voice simply shines through the whole thing. Before this, I had never really shown much interest in Ginny/Draco, but now I'm in love. You are an extremely gifted writer, and I mean that!!! 10/10
I was suprised by my reaction to the stroy, for I am not a Draco/Ginny shipper. However, the moment I began reading, I was hooked in. Reading this story gave me the chills. The story was written very well, and contained very descriptive words. To that I have to say BRAVO!! It was so good that I plan to read 'Of The Sorrows' also. Thank you for writing this story.
Author's Response: Ohh, well thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it. =)