it's a really great story, but why did you not complete the letter until the end.
Author's Response: That was the first time Ron managed it without running into either a "That's stupid!" or a "Drat that Fidelius Charm!" and he thought he'd better stick with it. Thanks for reviewing!
this was even odder than the first
Author's Response: *chuckle* I do tend to write rather odd things sometimes.
Aww. Cute. Poor Ron. Just like a teenage boy... There is just a bit of angst, too, though. After all, the whole letter is about saying that it "isn't going to work". A very different, clever and sweet but bitter fic.
Author's Response: Thanks! I get "different" a lot. It's a much nicer word than "mental," for a start, so I like it. A good ship needs some tossing around, and I try to push out of normal narrative now and again. This challenge (diary or letter form) was a good incentive for both.
Ah, poor Ron. =[ I understand how he feels.
Author's Response: He is in quite the bind here. Thanks for reviewing!
I really know this feeling, poor ron, trying to get out what needs to be said yet not knowing how to say it without hurting d's feelings. Great story.
Author's Response: Without hurting Draco's feelings, without betraying the Order, without getting stopped by a Fidelius Charm, without... Poor Ron, who's not all that good at expressing himself to start with. It's quite the project, isn't it? Thanks for the review!
lol. cute. honestly.
Author's Response: Thanks!
I loved this letter idea. I might use this for something - or I might not. I'm really enjoying this strange pairing. =)
Author's Response: If you do, let me know -- I'm always curious about something a little different. These two make such a lovely, funny, angsty pairing, don't they? Romeo and Juliet turn slash. Thanks for reviewing!
That was funny! And sad, but mostly funny. I counted, and Ron tried and failed to write to Draco 43 out of 44 times. If that's not funny, then I don't know what is.
Author's Response: Poor tongue-tied, quill-incapable Ron. Sometimes those important things just won't come out. And when it happens to someone else, it's funny. Especially when it happens 43 times (Thanks! I never counted those myself!)
So sad... Nicely done, though. The effect of him starting the letter over and over was really good. And I felt so sorry for him, because of what he had to do. Poor Ron, and poor Draco...
Author's Response: Thanks. Yeah, me too. They're just so doomed at this point in time. Maybe when they grow up a little things can sort themselves out, eh?
Good lord those were some crazy bits of letters. My head hurts from reading them. Good though. i like the ending I wanted to cry. I
Author's Response: The letter idea was actually from the posted challenge; it was fun doing something a little different with them. Poor guys, they have a rocky road for a romance, don't they? Thanks for reviewing!
that was pretty funy. i liked the way that you made it to where i could actually picture him doing that-oh wait, that's probably why you did it- just ignore me.
Author's Response: In fact it's good to know that you could, so no, I won't ignore you, but rather be happy about it. It was a tricky bit. Thanks for reviewing!
i really like how this works. how i t is all in a letter form, and how it just never really gets to the point until the end which turns out to be the shortest. very nice ideas!!!!!
Author's Response: Thank you! I really had fun working out how to write this one. The challenge required that the story be told entirely through letters or journal entries, and suddenly the idea just popped into my head -- nowhere did anyone say they had to be finished letters! Poor Ron.
Still breaks my heart.
Author's Response: Aw, shucks. Thanks for reviewing!
whoa did not see this coming!!! love it though!!!
Author's Response: Thanks! Both for review and for loving it!
hey i realy like this stly i think it shows a good way to get acros what ron is thinking i hope you expaned on it further soon
Author's Response: There's one more at present. Beyond that, well, it depends on the bunnies. Thanks for reviewing!
What an original one-shot, VV. I'm torn between laughing at the quagmire they've managed to get into, and feeling so, so sorry for them. Of course, it's more Ron I'm leaning towards, here, but I can only begin to imagine how Draco must feel, liking a Weasley. Come to think of it, reading the reply from Draco would be highly interesting!
Even so, what striked me the most was the way you managed to bring out Ron's character into the way he wrote the letter; just by reading it, I got the expression that this is one boy who is the opposite of eloquent, and who is unsure of himself. I also feel as if he cares about other's opinions of him, which is also, in my eyes, the reason he turned Draco down, even though he loved him.
In the end, I'll quote Jan and say that you're a genius, because you really, really are.
Author's Response: Aw, shucks. *blush* You've probably found Draco's response by now, eh? Third of the series. It's always interesting to see what people bring to this one-shot, and how they read Ron's thoughts between the lines. I think you're right to find what you do, and of course the other's opinions are going to be considerably lowered by the fact that Ron cannot say where he is. #12 Grimmauld Place, behind a Fidelius Charm, specifically, which hardly furthers the cause of young love! "The opposite of eloquent" is making me think of Steve Martin, oddly; I think the quote is "Some people have a way with words. Others -- have not way."
Anyway, that's a lot of discussion for a review. The challenge said the story had to be told entirely in letters or a diary; I decided the best way to show Ron's character was to have all the attempts for one letter, rather than a long letter or several. Time passed, ideas failed to occur to him...
Thanks for reviewing!
Aw thats sad! They should be together! Stupid Ron... I love the way you portrayed Draco in Blue Eyes Reflecting!!
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm thinking they should indeed be together, but also that it can't possibly go smoothly for them. Poor Ron -- he is in quite the situation here.
oh my gosh i think i might cry.
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing!
They belong together!!!
Author's Response: Oh, probably -- but it can't go and be easy, can it? *evil grin*
Thanks for reviewing!
I'm not much for slash, but I love the way this was done. It tells so much so simply. Excellent! (And thank you for ending with a completed letter!)
Author's Response: Thank you! This was something of an experiment -- how much of the story could go entirely between the lines? Poor Ron, caught by the Fidelius Charm and utterly unable to explain himself even at the best of times. Poor Draco, trying to interpret Ron's long silence and short note. I'm glad you enjoyed the not-very-slashy slash!