I really liked this fic, although it was sad in places, Verity did, with the help of her mirror self, accept herself for who she is. It's nice to see one of the minor characters in canon being given a back story too, and such a detailed one at that. It was my understanding that squibs could do no magic at all, so perhaps the incident with the nail polish shows she isn't actually a sqib. Perhaps when she saw her mother kill the house elf and vowed never to use magic, she repressed her own magical abilities. I'm adding you to my favouries and i'm going to read the companion piece to this.
Great story!
I loved Verity as an OC, and the idea behind her was very nice. I can't really imagine how hard it would be to be a Squib in the wizarding world. You wrote Verity’s troubles well, and I really felt for her. Especially in this line:
“A Squib could never have such luck.”
I also enjoyed the beginning. It intrigued me, and I wanted to keep reading! Also, you wrote with just the right amount of description. You added details where they needed to be, but the story didn’t drag on at all!
Well, great job, thanks for my lovely banner, and I’m off to read the companion piece! :]
What a neat story! Keep up the work!
Author's Response: Thank you!
But finding a channel that actually wasn’t disturbed by magic was an attempt in vain. I love this idea! I suppose setting up a TV in a magical household would be difficult.
She wished she could blow something up or that she could disappear into a foreign country where she could start over. I love the options you've given her! Poor Verity. Great characterisation, though! I adore OCs.
Chastity, Faith, Hope and Verity. Very uplifting names.
"Which is true, but I would like to see my legs again. I don’t know why, but I like to tie my shoelaces the Muggle way,” her sister said, smiling broadly. This is such a sweet little detail! I would never have thought of it. Good job.
You've really captured the whole issue of being a Squib, "caught between two worlds," as Chastity so astutely put it. It's something the reader doesn't really think about, yet something that the wizarding world has all the time. Verity's struggles are so real! You did well at capturing that part of the Wizarding World.
Author's Response: Thank you very much for this review. I'm so glad you liked it. Thanks!
I really enjoyed that. You really showed how difficult it would be for squibs, especially, as in this case, in a pureblood family. I had never thought about how hard it would be for them to live in the muggle world. You also clearly illustrated how all the prejudice in the family about being pureblood was tearing the family apart. Overall, it was very interesting and the characters were believable. I'll have to check ot 'His Verity' soon!
Author's Response: Thank you very much for the lovely review! I'm glad you enjoyed it.
I haven't seen the challenge, I haven't read the companion, but, nonetheless, I really enjoyed this fic! Like CA said, you portrayed the protagonist's feelings very well, and I felt like I was there with her and I felt what she felt. It was a bit slow at the beginning; not a whole lot of action, but once you got deeper into it, you could understand what she was feeling, and that made up for it.Overall, very, very nicely done!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review! I'm glad you liked it.
I think that this is a very good application of the Challenge! I haven't read the companion yet (although now I may have to) but I felt that I knew Verity and her troubles.And the names! I thought it was bad enough with Chastity and Faith, and then I found out there was a Hope too! Attack of the Virtuous Names!
Anyway, I think you've given a character that we've seen only briefly and given no information about a good solid life. I felt so bad for her.
Well done!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for reviewing! I really enjoyed working with Verity's family and I'm glad it was worth the work. I hoped it would be convincing, and I also hope you'll like the companion piece. Thanks again.
