Reviewer: ginny96
Date: 07/03/12 16:29
Chapter: What Happens in Godrics Hollow, Stays in Godrics Hollow

i really hate peter!
good story. well written and an intresting plot line

Reviewer: Pirate Fanatic
Date: 09/08/07 11:15
Chapter: Secrets

If Lily had found out that a close friend had been killed before the war had started, she would have been in tears. But these days, death was a part of life itself.

that's what i call saddd i would still cry if my best friend died!!!

Reviewer: Pirate Fanatic
Date: 09/08/07 11:13
Chapter: Prologue- the meeting

Interesting...very interesting.

Reviewer: hpfreak101
Date: 08/25/07 14:15
Chapter: What Happens in Godrics Hollow, Stays in Godrics Hollow

I enjoyed this fic very much. There were a few grammatial issues in chapter two that I think needed to be sorted out, but the writing was quite eloquent and I very much like the idea of the couple having switched to Wormtail just a few days before Hallowe'en. Beautiful job.

Reviewer: lunarocks15
Date: 08/03/07 15:31
Chapter: What Happens in Godrics Hollow, Stays in Godrics Hollow

ooh i liked it it was really good. the ending was sad obviously but i really like it :)

Reviewer: daddyslittleangel181
Date: 02/21/07 1:11
Chapter: What Happens in Godrics Hollow, Stays in Godrics Hollow

excellent. the riddle was clever and if j.k. had writen a would've had have been similar. I like the slight anger that James gives towards Dumbledore...its kind of like Harry with Dumbledore(like father like son?)

Reviewer: gryffindors_girl
Date: 10/01/06 14:04
Chapter: Prologue- the meeting

i like the story, but you spelled Sirius wrong

Reviewer: expecto_patronum_this
Date: 05/08/06 19:31
Chapter: Prologue- the meeting

I really enjoyed this so far. I've never seen a fic going in-depth about this stage in James' and Lily's life before, so it's all very new to me. Originality is always so refreshing to stumble upon.

The fight seen you sort of had James reminisce upon was very real seeming, I think. A lot of the time you find people actually going all 'in-depth flashback' on you to try explaining a fight. But the way you just explained it nice and clean-like without a bunch of big words and such was very nice. Just a straightforward explanation to get is caught up on the happenings of events before your fic began.

I though you did a really nice job with James' character. His thoughts and emotions were very real, once again. Like the way he felt sort of useless because he didn't hit a Death Eater in the brawl but Lily did. At the same time, though, I was sort of unsure about Dumbledore. You had him say some very Dumbledore-ish things; it's true, such as the elephant comment. But over-all I found him sort of stiff and a bit too demanding: I have asked you both here for a very serious reason; even now our enemies might be on their way to act. Please, dont interrupt while I am explaining, I will be pleased to answer all of your questions as soon as I am done. The bit at the end there makes it a bit better, but I still can't really see Dumbledore speaking like that unless it was a very, very dark thing he was talking about.

Still, even with that, I thought the way you introduced us into your fic was very nice. You also did a really good job keeping this canon with the books by having Dumbledore talk about his meeting with Trelawney and such. Though, I did notice that in your last paragraph you spell "Sirius" as "Serious". But, anyway, really good work on this, Avenger!

Author's Response: Thank you very much for this in depth review. I have had a few people comment on Dumbledores character through out this fic. I understand he seems a little stern, but we must remeber a few thing- 1) He was a little younger back then, so he might have been a little quicker 2) He is, as cocky as it sounds, used to peopel acsepting his points of view 3) I had time constraints for the challange, and did not have time to combe through it for every detail. Thanks a lot, I hope you like the rest of the fic, and I am happy you enjoyed it!

Reviewer: ilovetom
Date: 03/05/06 14:24
Chapter: What Happens in Godrics Hollow, Stays in Godrics Hollow

It was pretty good. It explains a lot of what happens to them after school and in between the prophecy and everything. Though I found it really sad and I prefer Humor so maybe it's not the best story for me to read. Tom

Author's Response: Thanks for taking the time to review my fic. This not being my best fic, I am happy you enjoyed it. If you found this sad, then you should stick to humour. Thanks for the review-

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