I love this chappie keep at it! I want to see what made Lily lash out at James in fifth year! I'm impatient! 10/10!!!!!!!!!!
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm happy you like the story, though it'll be a while before they get to fifth year. Keep reading--in my humble opinion, the chapters get better and better.~rog :D
i feel sooooooo bad for sirius!!!!!!! not fair. :,( but i like that regulus isnt actually totally evil. he's still a coward, though. i need an update!!!!!
Author's Response: YAY!! Thank you for reviewing! :D Regulus is an absolute Slytherin...and not all Slytherins are 'evil.' I'm halfway through writing chapter seven, and I'll update as soon as I can!~rog :D
Ohhhhh brownies! *grabs a handful of the yummy chocolate* Update soon Streams!
Author's Response: Hehee, *grabs a handful, too* I'll do my best! Thanks for reviewing!!~rog a.k.a. sos :D
Good hinting at Remus's 'grandmother' being ill. Sneaky, sneaky! The chappie was wonderful, as always, m'dear.
Author's Response: Thank you, princess!! Did I ever mention how happy you make me when you review? Hehe, and I'm glad you found that little hint...~rog (is VERY happy) :D
Great job! This story is turning out wonderfully! Never stop writing, you're too good at it for your talent to go to waste. I mean it.
Author's Response: Aww, princess...thank you. *takes a moment to blush* That means a lot to me.~rog :)
ooooooh!!! very good!! Can't wait to read Mrs. (cow) Black's reaction!!
Author's Response: Thank you, babekitty! I don't know if I'm actually going to include her reaction in a chapter, but she always abuses Sirius, so he figures, "How much worse can it get?"~rog :)
I really liked this chapter - I think it was one of my favourites of this story! I liked the way you set out the Black family - quite similar to the Malfoys. Well done!
Author's Response: Thank you, kaammini! I'm happy you liked it. :) Though I didn't intend the Blacks to end up sounding similar to the Malfoys, I see what you mean. Though I suppose all families that abuse their children would sound somewhat similar.~rog :D
this is really kool, and this is how i pictured the characters to be when they are young. with a few minor exceptions. GREAT JOB!!!! 10!!!
Author's Response: I'm glad you like it, Lee, and thank you for reviewing! It isn't really possible for everything to be the way you imagined it if I'm writing the story, because obviously my imagination belongs only to me! ;) But I'm really happy you mostly agree with me about the way the characters are behaving.~rog :D
I did like the chappie! Of all things, shoes?! Love it!
Author's Response: I'm happy you liked it, princess. :) Thank you for reviewing! And I dunno about anyone else, but I know I'm always ready to talk about shoes!~rog ;D
SMILE of course! Loving it Streams!
Author's Response: Princess! Thank you for reading! I'm really glad you're enjoying it!~rog :D
This was my favourite chapter so far. Well done :) I liked how you switched from each characters point of view. I also liked how you gave more background information, especially in regard to Sirius. All the best :) (and I like my brownies with strawberries ;) )
Author's Response: Thank you Songbird!! Teehee, it's my favorite chapter, too! It's like one a.m. and I'm totally hyper...I KNEW I shouldn't have eaten all the brownies!
But today must be your lucky day, because there is a fresh batch of brownies coming out of the oven in exactly five minutes. Help yourself to as many as you want-you've earned the right!~rog :D
Love the chapter!! Have to admit it is one of your best, even though they are all good. I love how you added some background to their lifestyles, it really makes me visualize the homes they come from :) brownies please :) haha - *rog's on a roll*
Author's Response: Thank you HPdiva!! I will have to admit I agree with you...this IS my best chapter so far...which is why it's my favorite, lol. I think my writing's getting better ;).
You forgot to say what you want on your brownies! You can have ice cream, whipped cream and I have some now with strawberries on them...take one of each, that was a wonderful review!!~rog :D
I LOVE BROWNIES!!!!!!!!! ok, im being serious now. i loved how you told about everyones holidays most fics ive read just say they went on holiday and thats it. i also liked how you described Regelus, its exactly right, and the other Blacks too. anyways, update soon!
Author's Response: Teehee, would you like yours with whipped cream? Or ice cream? Take your pick. I'm glad you like the story, thanks for reviewing!~rog :D
STREAMS! Good, good, very good story so far! *huggles*
Author's Response: Princess!! Thank you for reviewing! Love you...*huggles*
Author's Response: wait, I didn't sign this one...~ROG! lol *huggles*
Oo nice update! I liked your version of James' spoiled but sometimes lonely childhood and you did a good job with the Black family's issues. Nice work, though I thought it was a bit strange for Sirius's father to refer to his wife as mum, I always saw the Blacks as having their children call them Mother and Father. Just a little thing but everything flows perfectly regardless of which names you use. Well done!
Author's Response: Thank you, Kerian! Hmm...you're right about that bit where Sirius' father refers to his mother, but Sirius still calls her Mum...for some odd reason, she insists on it.~rog :D
That was a really clever chapter. I liked the subtle hints about Remus' fury little problem and other stuff. I think someone may have mentioned this but I would have liked this to be divided into two chapters with slightly more detail. The letter thing was really clever too - I hope you include more of that in later chapters! Sorry for not reviewing sooner! 9/10
Author's Response: Thank you! Okay, that clinches it, I guess. I WILL write more chapters in each year. Heh, when I reread the earlier chapters, I realized how much detail was missing, and I'm polishing them up now...I spent much more time with detail on chapter 6. I hope you like it!~rog :D
Another wonderful chappie! You're doing an awesome job, I love the way this fic is turning out. I liked James' parents' reaction to his letter, it was great! I agree with midnight_me, i would enjoy it if there were more chapters in each year, but i think the pace you're going at is fine if you don't want to write too many chapters for the earlier years. once again, thank you for this great chappie- your story is one that makes me enjoy reading fanfics! keep writing!
Author's Response: Thank you! What an awesome review! :D Okay, you've just seconded the motion-I WILL try to write more chapters in each year. I love writing this fic anyway, so that shouldn't be a problem...Thanks again!~rog :D
yeah great chappie cant wait for more
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you like the story so far, and I hope you like the next chapter!~rog :)
roses are red violets are blue the staory is great and so are you (well i don't personally know about the last line but it ryhmed , although i have no doubts your a great person) love the story so far
Author's Response: Thank you! I love everyone who reviews...you're a sweety! ;)~rog
Great chapter again! :D Tips...
You could try to write Peter in a bit more, even if he doesn't become friends with James, Sirius and Remus right away. In the first HP book, Hermione had a big part in the story before she became friends with Harry and Ron. Try to develop Peter's character a little more.
Your story is also a bit rushed. We go from the first day of classes to the middle of December all in one chapter. Try writing some more events in, so it doesn't seem rushed. The Halloween feast or a Quidditch match, for example.
I liked the letters at the end. One from each Lily, Tami and James. Very cute. ;)
Speaking of Tami, you've done a really great job with her character. I love her bright personality! But she can also be a little annoying and stuck up at times. This is a good thing! You've made a lovable charater that's not a Mary Sue. It's rare to see those kind of characters.
I'm giving you 8/10 for this chapter because I think your doing really great with your plot and OCs, but I think you can do a bit better. I'm sure you'll continue to improve, like you already have since the first chapter. Good luck!
Thanks, midnight! I really appreciate you taking the time to give me good advice, as this is my first fanfic/long story.
I don't know what to do about Peter, because it's sort of hard to include him if nobody's talking to him. I'll do my best. :)
I didn't realize it appeared rushed. Thanks for bringing that to my attention. Initially, I intended only to include chapters that showed Lily's or James' characters evolving in some way that would pertain to the ship later, because this story is, first and foremost, a romance.
However, as I began writing, more and more characters and details snuck their way in, and I soon realized it would be impossible to fly through their first few years.
I'm already writing much more than I intended to for their first year, and was starting to get worried that perhaps my readers were getting impatient. If more people feel the way you do, though, I'll definitely try to go at a slower pace.
I'm glad you like Tami, and thanks again for your advice and support!~rog :D