Author's Response: Thank you!~rog :)
Great chapter again! I liked the fight between Lily and Tami. That makes their friendship seem very realistic. I also thought Sirius' mum was in character. I felt so bad for Sirius!
I thought it was a bit strange having the Slytherins trying to make Sirius' life miserable. That just seemed like a little too much.
Also, you need to capitalize words like 'Muggle' and 'Sugar Quill'. That's a common mistake that can be easily fixed.
Not your best chapter, but still really good. 8/10
Author's Response: Thank you!
I don't think all Slytherins are bad. You'll see what I mean in their second year, but till then...Sirius' mum preferred Slytherin, though she could've found bullies in any House that would be happy to bother Sirius. She just didn't think anyone from another House was WORTHY-in her twisted opinion-of abusing Sirius.Thanks for the spelling tip. I've finally gotten a beta, so hopefully I will be able to avoid mistakes like that in the future.~rog :D
Sorry I haven't reviewed this sooner. I've been a bit busy.
Once again, the characters were fantastic! Tami and Dani are wonderful OCs. I liked how you mentioned how Tami was trying to hide her feelings about her mom. That sounds like something she would do. Dani was also great. I liked the way she acted towards her brother. And Petunia's character was so well written! The best I've seen, which is saying something.
I thought Sirius's parents were a bit too mean. I think that they would argue with Sirius a lot, but I don't think they would abuse him so much. They reminded me of the Dursleys.
This is probably one of your best chapters. I see lots of improvement, and this fanfic keeps getting better. 9/10
Author's Response: Ooh, you're back! I always like your reviews, they're so well-rounded.
Judging by the screaming portrait in Grimmauld Place, I would say that Sirius' mum did a little more than 'argue,' but then, that's my opinion.~rog :D
I've been waiting with bated breath for this chapter to come through. Excellent standard, as usual.
Now correct me if I'm wrong, but is Dani's friend Scott going to play a bigger part than just their homework-aide? I hope so, because I like his character, and I think he'd make an interesting addition to the mix.
You handled the issue of Sirius' punishment brilliantly. It is very characteristic that his mother would want to punish him in the most humiliating way possible. And she certainly did that. And the idea that secretly Sirius did care what she thought intrigued me.
I can't wait to see how the Marauders deal with that Slytherin, so I'll look forward to the next chapter. Until next time, and happy writing!
Author's Response: Hello to you too!
Ah, Scott...I really like him, so I don't think I'll be able to just let him sit in the sidelines. The homework part was just my way of introducing him.
Initially, I wasn't going to show Sirius getting punished, but I decided it was important because I feel it's an integral part of the teenager and adult he eventually becomes. And it's hard for a child to hate his mother, though she might abuse him.The next chapter is a totally FUN one, see you there!~rog :D
the story, that is
Author's Response: Lol. I didn't think you were talking about James...or Sirius...or Lily! Were you?~rog ;)
I don't like. I love
Author's Response: That makes me extremely happy...~rog :)
That was great- Make sure we see that prank- get the filthy bugger!!! That was reed great though, I liked it-sweet, cute and all the rest. I am guessing Scott and Dani may be an item in future? 10000/10
Author's Response: Ooh. You WILL get to see the prank very soon...oh! Scott and Dani? Hmm...isn't that sort of cliche`? But hey, you never know.~rog ;D
i loved this chapter! the part about sirius and his mum was so real and descriptive too! i think it was one of the best chapters yet!
Author's Response: Yay, I'm happy you think so. I personally really liked this chapter as well.~rog :D
that was so good! you wrote everyone's home life exactly how i would have imagined it! (i'd also love a brownie!)haha!
Author's Response: Ooh, a brownie request! I thought I'd get to keep the last few all to myself...but what don't I do for a good reviewer...here you go!~rog :D
i loved it so much!!! i think it's great how sirius is so happy, and how he and james connected so well! also, you did an amazing job portraying how he hated his parents so much. keep writing!
Author's Response: Wow, I'm glad you like it! Sirius doesn't really hate his parents yet, though his resentment and anger are definitely starting to build up.~rog :D
I like! it gave us more insight on the background of the characters...very good! update soon please
Author's Response: Thank you! I'll try to update as soon as possible...chapter eight is written already, but it wants a bit of editing.~rog :)
this chapter definitely made me smile! the characters are so cute and you write about them exactly how I imagne jkr would!
Author's Response: Yay, I'm glad you like it! Lovely reviews like yours make ME smile!~rog :D
awwww poor Sirius, but we all new his family sux. Great Job, keep it up!
Author's Response: Yeah, Sirius' family was horrible...unlike your reviews-they're wonderful!~rog :)
Author's Response: Haha, I'm glad you think so...I think the same about your reviews...~rog ;D
Great Chapter!! It was nicely done! Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: I'll do my best! Thank you!~rog :D
I luv this chapter it was sooo good!!! Keep them coming!!
Author's Response: It is reviewer's encouragement that prevents me from getting writer's block...thank you!~rog :)
I liked this chapter, it was kind of boring but thats because its reallly just getting started. It made me think of my best friend and how she absolutely LOVES horses.
Author's Response: Yes, exactly-I'm glad you understand that I have to introduce everybody and everything before the story can really start rolling. I love horses too!~rog :D
That was great good job!!
Author's Response: Thank you! It's always nice to know my work is appreciated...~rog :)
I've just finished reading the story so far, and I'm really enjoying it. There aren't many stories that go through James and Lily's story from the very beginning, so I really like that aspect of it. My favourite chapters are 'The Sparkle of Friendship' and 'Flickering Destinies' because they made me laugh. The relationships between the characters are extremely well thought out and written, and the idea that Lily had a friend who knew about the wizarding world all along makes the story seem even more believable. One thing I'd like to see more of, though, is interaction between Lily and James. So hopefully there'll be some soon.
Anyway, if I promise to keep reading (which I will do anyway), and review each chapter from now on, could I have one of those delicious brownies? *drools* :P
Author's Response: Ooh, you have no idea how happy you've just made me. I was hoping some parts of the story would make readers laugh, but I had no way of knowing if they would. By the time I finish editing a chappie for the millionth time, I'm dead bored and decide the story is absolute rubbish. I don't know how I would survive without reviews, especially lovely ones like yours.
Anyway, about Lily and James...their relationship won't start for a while, but yeah, you CAN look forward to an interaction very soon. *smirks to self*
Now, let's see. *peers into oven* You can have your brownies with melted fudge and choose from five different flavors of ice cream! Thank you so much for reviewing!~roggy :D
wow, i just started reading this story and i really like it. you have a great writing style and the words just seem to flow...do you get what i mean? i like the descriptions you have of the charecters and i like how they act. it is exactly how i imagined they would be. there is only one thing i would change in this chapter...
"She had said that Tami could be the first to read the new novel Lily had gotten for Christmas...if she could build a castle out of Exploding Snap cards without the castle exploding before she was done. As if that were possible."
this part was just a little confusing. i did figure it out, but if you could make this part more clear it would help. anyway, i love this story! it is going on my favorites list right now. update soon!
Author's Response: Yay, what a wonderful review! I'm glad you like it. I'm going to go have a look at that bit you pointed out, and rephrase it. Thank you! If there's one thing better than a good review, it's a nice, constructive review.~rog :D Oh, and you can help yourself to my chocolate frog stash. ;)