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Name: Gonz (Signed) · Date: 05/15/06 13:02 · For: The Tale of Amelia Weasley, Quidditch Extraodinaire
I really liked the imagery in the first paragragh, it really helps set the mood for your story.

One question I was left with from your story was, how did she get so good? You said her father let her play, but her brothers didn't. So did she do a Ginny Weasley and sneak into the broom shed, or what?

"Over the years, I tried and failed to play the sacred game." This sentence confused me, because when I read it I got the impression she has tried many times to play, but you list only one time she tried.

"He was Goliath, I was David, and the Snitch was going to be the stone that changed the course of history." Nice use of metaphor. I liked how you described the race for the snitch that way, you truly have a gift for description.

Overall, I'd say this is a really good story. It was a very creative idea that was well written.


Name: HermyRox12 (Signed) · Date: 05/06/06 16:26 · For: The Tale of Amelia Weasley, Quidditch Extraodinaire
I really liked this. I'm not to big into sports, but who can say no to Quidditch? This is a very nice piece. I like the names you chose. Didn't Madame Pomfrey say that she could mend bones in no time? Why would Amelia then be in a wheelchair? The school hospital wing is probably less-up to date than the Wizarding Hospitols, so couldn't they mend bones? Unless it was really bad. I just think that Wizards would be able to mend bones, even that far back in time.
HermyRox12


Name: Atarwyn (Anonymous) · Date: 02/07/06 16:18 · For: The Tale of Amelia Weasley, Quidditch Extraodinaire
You're most very welcome! Thank you for that note, I love to read your work ^.^ I hope you win and I'll be looking in to see if you do! Great job!!!

Author's Response: Thank you very much for reviewing. I am sooo glad you liked it.


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