Reviews For We Echo On
Reviewer: pottermagic
Date: 07/23/09 15:59
Chapter: We Echo On

It seems like he is giving up on him...back to the only world he knew.
I see you have another fic with Sirius mysteriously returning from beyond the veil...is that a sequel?

Reviewer: red haired mom
Date: 08/08/07 16:28
Chapter: We Echo On

I wish you would write a sequel to this. I know you want the readers to fill in the blank, but with you as the original author, it makes more sense for you to do it.
You’ve seen how many book seven fics there are here and other places on the net. I even have one myself. Please, oh, please write a sequel to this.
It was very well written, and as much as I love Sirius, I would love to read another story with him returning from behind the veil.

Reviewer: red haired mom
Date: 08/08/07 16:26
Chapter: We Echo On

I wish you would write a sequel to this. I know you want the readers to fill in the blank, but with you as the original author, it makes more sense for you to do it.
You’ve seen how many book seven fics there are here and other places on the net. I even have one myself. Please, oh, please write a sequel to this.
It was very well written, and as much as I love Sirius, I would love to read another story with him returning from behind the veil.

Reviewer: Moonysfullmoon
Date: 11/21/06 11:41
Chapter: We Echo On

Awsome!

Reviewer: crazy_purple_hp_freak
Date: 06/27/06 10:18
Chapter: We Echo On

Wow! This is really well written. I like the idea of the portrait; though does this mean that Sirius could come back, like in Fate? You should expand this!!!

Reviewer: lilyevans91
Date: 06/01/06 13:14
Chapter: We Echo On

WOW!!!! 11/10!!!

Reviewer: lilyevans91
Date: 06/01/06 13:13
Chapter: We Echo On

WOW!!!! 11/10!!!

Reviewer: Noldo
Date: 04/08/06 23:24
Chapter: We Echo On

First of all, I like the way you've set the mood of this fic; the descriptions are brief, and often sparse, but the feel is absolutely 'right' for the story's content. I also like your portrayal of emotion, especially in the first few paragraphs; the first line, with the deserted street, was excellent.

You do seem to have a couple of minor hiccups in punctuation and capitalisation; 'Muggle' is usually written that way, as a proper noun, and there's a bit of 'your/you're' confusion in the dialogue. Number 12 Grimmauld Place in the summary should really be Number 12, Grimmauld Place; similarly, 'number' in the body of the fic should be capitalised (although that's more of a stylistic thing).

The dialogue itself, apart from the little niggles, is wonderful, though; the pacing struck me as being particularly nice, and very appropriate for the conversation.

I'm also a little curious about Sirius; he's sixteen or so in the portrait, and I'd imagine Sirius at that age to be a little more volatile; your Sirius is quite calm and resigned, which is not what one expects from him.

In my personal opinion, this fic might benefit from being a touch longer; I realise that the apparent spare-ness is part of the story's charm, but at the important moments, a lack of detail can cause a story to fall flat; I'd suggest a little more insight into what Harry's thinking and doing and feeling and seeing, since different sensory impressions can leave an impact on the reader in different ways.

Overall, though, I enjoyed the read. (And loved the title.)

Reviewer: FanficWriterNikki
Date: 04/08/06 22:58
Chapter: We Echo On

This fic has a lot of unique qualities. I was really intrigued by that, and I also enjoyed the great balance between everything. The characterization of Harry and Sirius was okay, but could use some work. Sirius seemed a bit too calm and quiet. They both appeared to be a bit emotionless upon meeting each other. Harry was written very well in the beginning, but towards the end there was one major thing I was a little hesitant about: I don't think Harry would have left Sirius that quickly.

There were some things I thought were excellent in this fic. There was a wonderful variation in sentence structure. You made a lot of great choices with that. The sentence length really helps capture the mood of the fic. Dialogue was nicely spaced and written well. You knew just when it was needed and when it wasn't. Overall, this fic was enjoyable. Nice job!

Reviewer: HanilarLion
Date: 02/20/06 15:14
Chapter: We Echo On

Very good. I like the portrait of Sirius and the hope that the real Sirius is still alive somewhere, somewhen.

Reviewer: Madnessisme
Date: 02/05/06 2:00
Chapter: We Echo On

First off, I love the idea of Harry speaking to Sirius' younger portrait, as well as the idea of Sirius being in an alternate universe. Although it is a bit sad to think that poor Sirius is stuck there somehow.

There are a few spelling mistakes, however, which aren't a big deal. =)

Taping his wand against the mark -
'Taping should be 'tapping'.

His whiled his magic to work -
'His whiled' should be 'He willed'.

“You’re name, on the tapestry -"
Since that you're writing about Sirius' name, it should be 'Your name'. 'Your' would mean a possesion of the person you are talking to, while 'you're' is a simplified version of 'you are'.

“Don’t give up on my, Harry.”
The word 'my' should be 'me'.

Overall, a good read, quite enjoyable. I loved the ending, about how Harry is going back to teh only world he knows. That has to be my favourite line in this fic. =) Good work!

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