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Name: Emerald Fox (Signed) · Date: 07/09/10 21:43 · For: One Shot
This is very well developed for such a short story- excellent work!

Name: Harry_Potter4life (Signed) · Date: 02/07/10 15:43 · For: One Shot
Awwwwww....so cute!!!

Name: tomslovevishu (Signed) · Date: 06/03/08 2:48 · For: One Shot
cool one!!!! you knw u can continue wid dat..

Name: AmayaBlack (Signed) · Date: 05/01/08 10:11 · For: One Shot


Name: AntigoneScorned (Signed) · Date: 02/19/08 11:05 · For: One Shot
That was really cute! I hope you wrote a sequel, and if you haven't yet, you should!
Good job!

Name: AntigoneScorned (Signed) · Date: 02/19/08 11:05 · For: One Shot
That was really cute! I hope you wrote a sequel, and if you haven't yet, you should!
Good job!

Name: HermionePotter (Signed) · Date: 12/25/07 8:24 · For: One Shot
I liked this.... Im a huge Hermione/Snape fan... The [b]only[/b] problem I had was that Snape kept referring to harry as, well, Harry. Other than that, very well written. ^_^

Name: Pissenoffanis (Anonymous) · Date: 10/27/07 1:37 · For: One Shot
This is a great fic! It show the light and dark sdes of Severus, and his isolation and pain. I felt so sorry for him - he hates himself. And nobody should ever feel that way. Nice writing!

Name: KneazleWeazl (Signed) · Date: 09/17/07 19:13 · For: One Shot
Great one shot, although I think it would make a great longer story as well.

Name: Devere (Signed) · Date: 08/13/07 8:57 · For: One Shot
Ah lovely! You need to carry this on.

Name: the_evenstar (Signed) · Date: 04/28/07 11:09 · For: One Shot
What a great story! I loved the balance in Severus and Hermione's dialogue, how he explained the situation just enough to make sense. I mean, I like that he didn't just pour his heart out to her, because he is still a very guarded individual, but I liked that he was open enough to talk to her about things. Especially after Harry calling him a coward in HBP, I think that Severus would really want someone to understand his predicament.

But more than anything, I love your writing voice! This line was one of my favorites: "And there it was -- the truth! Hermione laid it out in front of him like a bloody corpse at a murder scene." Your style is so simple and honest, very easy to read! Great, great job! :D

Name: chemacool (Signed) · Date: 04/27/07 5:07 · For: One Shot
I love how this story is going!
It's gripping.
I'm looking forward to the next chapter so much.

Name: mvdz (Signed) · Date: 04/23/07 11:46 · For: One Shot
Wow, this was... intense. It was a real rollercoaster of emotions, something that is very rare in the presence of a character like Snape.
Overall, I thought it was a really good story. If anyone is bound to trust Snape, it's Hermione. After all, she's spent six years trying to defend him in front of Harry and Ron and she'll be more receptive to his side of the story than anyone (except maybe for Remus).

I really liked the way you characterised Hermione. It was like she was walking a thin line between respecting and fearing Snape as a professor like she did before, and trying to stand up against him. That clearly shows when she is brave enough to kiss him, but then blushes over calling him Severus.
Snape was also well written, although I think he gave in to her somewhat soon. Maybe it would have been better to save the kiss? I'm not sure. I can understand why you did it, the man is desperate for touch and recognition, but still, I'm not sure if he'd let his guard down that far. That doesn't mean, however, that I wasn't rooting for them anyway hehe.

I do have one small nitpick: in the beginning, just before Hermione confronts Severus with murdering Dumbledore, he calls both her and Harry by their first name. I think it would be more canon for him to call them by their surname, as he does in the books.

I will read more of your Snape soon, and for now, this is definitely going into my favourites!

Author's Response: Thank you! It's ages since I had such a thoughtful review so you certainly made me smile :-) I agree with you about the first names issue; it's something I probably didn't think about at the time. I am really pleased you enjoyed it, though. Laura x

Name: lilyflower113 (Signed) · Date: 03/19/07 2:15 · For: One Shot
Wow, I've never seen Snape portrayed so well in such a good light. I loved it!

Name: mrs_weasley (Signed) · Date: 02/17/07 8:29 · For: One Shot
awesome stuff, hope there's more!

Name: gryffindorphoenix (Signed) · Date: 02/14/07 12:52 · For: One Shot
Nice plot and idea...two beings that really have many things in common. Not very different from each other. Well, done.

Name: PuNkYLiZ87 (Signed) · Date: 02/06/07 18:38 · For: One Shot

Name: mrsdan (Signed) · Date: 12/31/06 10:10 · For: One Shot
OK! Where is the love?

Name: mrsdan (Signed) · Date: 12/31/06 10:09 · For: One Shot
OK! Where is the love?

Name: Augusta Wilfry (Signed) · Date: 11/03/06 20:20 · For: One Shot
well, i am still trying to get used to the snape/herrmione ships so for that, i think it is good, but i didn't get the reasons for hermione liking snape, i thought it was only because he had kissed her. anyways, i like it.

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