This was very disturbing to read.
I love the emotions you carry in this poem, but it truly horrifies me. Not so much the abuse - I mean, that's terrible - but you have no reasoning behind it. It's mindless cruelty, simply for the sake of writing something.
To me, each abuse-related story should cover the subject with great care, to the point where background as to WHY the abuser is doing this - proof that they have psychological issues and that's why they're doing this - is almost necessary.
While I know it's hard to incorporate such details into poems, it can be done and I urge you to do so. This poem sent chills down my spine - but I don't think it was developed enough to deal with the issue of abuse very sensitively.
Positively haunting. Lovely, lovely job with your emotions. *shudders* Scary.
sad, but very well written.
that was amazing!!! your very good at writing poetry!!!!! 10/10 pleeeeeeez continue! ~Sara
DAMN GOOD! Well, one things sure, you are a much better poet than I am or will ever be! Well, one things really bad with this site, you can't give a 12!