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Name: HermioneJPotter (Signed) · Date: 04/14/06 21:30 · For: Chapter 8 Into the Forest
Wow...That was awesome.. lol Hogwarts having a T.V... thats soo cool... too bad its not true... Man your questions and hard...they realy make a person think... great update... i can't wait to read more......

Author's Response: Hi HJP! Thanks for the nice review. The magical community has Wizarding Wireless, why shouldn't they have a magical TV? It's progress. I introduced magic mirror TV for three reasons: 1) highlight Hermione's skills when she is selected to charm the big mirror, 2) show that Ginny is a very attractive girl and now that she's had a fling with Harry, she'll be able to move on, 3) show that Harry is putting things like sports and girls behind him as he becomes more and more obsessed with destroying Voldemort.

Name: JeWb (Anonymous) · Date: 04/14/06 5:03 · For: Chapter 8 Into the Forest
Lol yeah, they tend to ignore that very well. Hermione leaving Ron who has a broken leg to follow Harry into a swarm of dementors with a convicted murderer. But meh, R/H is so blah.... I like this setup better too now. I'm sure the 'update chapter' button will pop-up soon enough. Do me a favor... Try and read chapter 8 of your story, without loggin onto your account. I want to know if someone else can read it too. Because now it says 'access denied'. Though I've obviously read it.... -_-

Author's Response: I can't access chapter 8 either, unless I log in. If I'm logged in, I can read it but I can't make any changes. The Mods seem to have some problem with the chapter summary. But I don't understand what it is. They said they didn't want html commands in the summaries, but I don't think I had any in that summary. I expect the confusion to abate in a few days, but right now I can't do anything to correct problems.

Name: JeWb (Anonymous) · Date: 04/13/06 12:54 · For: Chapter 8 Into the Forest
LOL. Chapter 8 isn't up again.... Im a tad confused. I actually have chapter 8 printed in my hands right now. ( I print your story and read it during school, for something to do ^_^.) The site said it hasnt been approved or something, but I still got my hands on it :P. OK, on to the review. I agree, though they are girls, they should be taught how to defend themselves. The Death Eaters wouldn't hesitate to attack them just because they are girls and they should be able to defend themselves. Harry is always so self-dependant, which is a good and bad thing. He needs to accept the fact that he has two great friends willing to die for him. The next chapter is going to be action packed from the begining I bet. Harry in the middle of the Forbiden Forest with Hermione sitting on his lap with nothing but a night shirt on, surrounded by centaurs. Cant wait to see what happens, update asap,


Author's Response: Thanks for the review! In my view Harry cannot win alone, but he is a fiercely independent tough guy. He does not want his friends to be in danger. I

Name: JeWb (Anonymous) · Date: 04/12/06 20:15 · For: Chapter 8 Into the Forest
Nm, I got it there now.... Ima read this tomorrow in school then properly review.... Sorry to crowd this -_-.

Author's Response: Sorry, my response to the review above got cut short when I had to deal with a problem. Chapter 9 has a lot of action, much of it for laughs. Unfortunately I haven't figured out how to submit a new chapter yet. Maybe the "add a chapter" button will reappear tomorrow. The Mods seem to have some trouble with a few of my chapter summaries. I don't know how to change those either. So many new things to learn. Still I like the new look. The Dragon is much cooler than Harry fending off the dementors. There was a missing character in that scene in the movie. A certain girl had to choose between staying with Ron or following Harry into a swarm of dementors to rescue an outlaw. In the book she followed right behind Harry. The R/Hr shippers like to ignore that.

Name: JeWb (Anonymous) · Date: 04/12/06 20:13 · For: Chapter 8 Into the Forest
I can review for chapter 8 but theres no chapter up....... explain? Lol.

Author's Response: I used one of my favorite minor characters in chapter 8, Crookshanks. He's a very intelligent cat. I think he picks up on Hermione's moods and relays subtle signals to discerning the reader. Who does Crookshanks like more? Harry or Ron? I think it matters. In my story, Crookshanks woke up Hermione when Harry went out into the forest alone. He would of course notice that Hermione grabbed a quill instead of her wand by mistake. However, Crookshanks' adventure in the forest isn't a part of my story because it's told from Harry's perspective.

Name: JeWb (Anonymous) · Date: 04/12/06 20:10 · For: Chapter 1 - A Depressing Chore for Dumbledore
Well, I think that Dumbledore would be planning to do that. Like he just took Harry on an excersion to get a horcrux. Who he told NO ONE else about. So I think that he was planning to tell Harry about a possible 'plan' that could happen, if the situation arises. And that plan would obviously be the need of his death if it would help the greater cause. Which if Snape is actually good, Dumbledores death really does help. Though he his truly a great wizard, the wounded hand is proof of his old age. Perhaps in death he would do more help then he could have in life. For now the Order has the best possible spy they could wish for. Which could essentialy lead to Voldemorts downfall from within. This isn't exactly what I believe, just a possible scenero. And truthfully, just from what JKR has written in her books, I hate Snape with a passion. But there has to be some good in him, like there is in Draco. We'll see how it turns out in book 7 though. And hoplefully Harry and Hermione will be matched up.

Author's Response: Chapter 8 is in the queue, but with all of the changes they are making, it may take a few days to get posted. I have to change the summary for this story but I can't submit it until they open up submissions. I hate Snape because he gives teachers a bad name. He is unprofessional. Dumbledore was 150 years old and the Philosopher's stone had been destroyed, so he may have been willing to sacrifice his life. This is actually an important plot point in my story.

Name: JeWb (Anonymous) · Date: 04/12/06 15:18 · For: Chapter 1 - A Depressing Chore for Dumbledore
Totally agree, they're all cowards. Hence who they are working for. They all want power, but are unable to atain it by themselves, so they become the lackys of someone with power. But I think Voldemort has a better plan in store for Harry. I agree, I think that Voldemort expected Draco to fail miserably. But I've thought a lot about Snape, and I wouldn't be too surprised if he was actually good. You should read this story called In the Eyes of Others. It's by Vindictus Viridian. It's an insight on Snapes life pre HP series, and swayed my thinking about Snape,


Author's Response: Yeah, they're all cowards. When Harry called Snape a coward in HBP, Snape really got angry. I think it's because the insult hurt and it hurt because there's an element of truth to it. If you call someone fat, it doesn't really hurt, unless they have some issue with their weight, then it's very cruel. I think it's unlikely for Snape to be good because I think it's unlikely for Dumbledore to allow Harry to suffer more grief without warning him. If Snape does turn out to be good, I think Dumbledore would leave some way of telling Harry the truth, just for Harry's sake, and that would come out very early in Book 7. In my story Snape's bad, but JKR might do it differently.

Name: JeWb (Anonymous) · Date: 04/12/06 10:37 · For: Chapter 7 Medals, Mathematics and Meetings
You asked why the Death Eaters didn't kill Harry that night. Well likme you said, on Voldemort's orders, and no one would dare disobey a direct order from him. I think that Voldemort wants to end Harry personally. He's very cocky and wants to finish what he started, simply put. Why he didn't show up at Hogwarts is beyond me though. Probally the same reason he was absent from the Ministry at first. Fear. Voldemort is a coward. When should I expect the update?


Author's Response: Chapter 8 is in the queue and chapter 9 is written. Chapter 10 is a mess. I think you're right about Voldemort, he wants to kill Harry personally, his pride is on the line. And he was afraid of Dumbledore. He wouldn't enter Hogwarts until he was sure Dumbledore was dead and he probably didn't have any faith in Draco Malfoy. The Death Eaters surely screwed up big time by not capturing Harry on the night Dumbledore died. I expect The Death Eaters failed to take Harry because Voldemort didn't tell them to capture Harry, and they are too afraid of the boss to take the initiative on their own.

Name: JeWb (Anonymous) · Date: 04/08/06 14:01 · For: Chapter 1 - A Depressing Chore for Dumbledore
You somewhat dodged the real purpose of the second question. Basically what I was asking, is one of Voldemorts horcruxes another living person? Like Harry maybe? I'm kinda sensing something like that cause of HErmiones reaction... And yea, I did like your humor about the codpiece. I actually knew what one was before this for some reason... Read it in a book somewhere,


Author's Response: I didn't dodge your second question totally. When I answered your multiple choice question I tried to say that if A is true then C is true. The story is written from Harry's perspective, and he's clueless. Dumbledore guessed. Voldemort suspects. Hermione knows. She can't tell him. He might commit suicide.

Name: JeWb (Anonymous) · Date: 04/08/06 8:59 · For: Chapter 7 Medals, Mathematics and Meetings
OK, I have a few parts of the story I'd like to ask questions about...

“Voldemort was working on a theme when his plans got messed up,” Hermione said. “He wanted to make four horcruxes using four items from the four founders of Hogwarts, but he failed to kill you…” Does this mean, A) Harry is related to Godric Gryffindor??? or B) Harry is actually a horcrux or C) Both

Question 2 “Does the idea of killing the snake bother you?” Harry asked gently. “There might be another way of removing a soul-fragment from a living horcrux,” Hermione said without turning around to face him, “but it’s never been tried.” Is Hermiones reluctence of wanting to kill the snake showing that someone she cares for is truly an inhabitant of Voldemorts soul?

And finally “We should use the most reliable method,” Harry concluded. “The snake has to die.” “Alright, kill the snake,” she agreed, without looking at him. “It’s late. I’m tired. I’m going to bed.” She walked quickly towards the exit, opening the door with a wave of her wand as she moved. She stopped only when she had stepped out into the cold night air. There was a heavy fog and she paused for a moment. “Hermione…” Harry began. She ran back to him and hugged him. Then she dashed out into the night. Perhaps Harry wanting to kill the snake as the 'most reliable method' makes he think hell be willing to give his life if he is indead a hrocrux, or be willing to take another's life... But I'm leaning more on the fact Harry is a horcurx. How she left, hugged him, then ran.

Well, great chapter, a lot of new information. will there be any action in the next chapter? What class of merline did NEville and Harry recieve? And something JUST hit me.... Was voldemort possibly kidnapping his horcrux that day at hogwarts? Or attempting to anyway..? W/e, Great chapter, update ASAP. 10/10,


Author's Response: Hi John, Lots good of questions. Hermione doesn't care a bit about the snake's life. I don't know if Harry is related to Godric Gryffindor, for the purpose of my story it doesn't matter. Gryffindor lived a thousand years ago and may or may not have had children. If he had heirs, probably about half of all pure-blood wizards would be somewhat related to him. So "C" might be correct. Neville got an Order of Merlin second class, the tree really killed Renee Day. Harry got an OoM first class, because he got three Death Eaters. (Even though Frank Day really killed himself. It's politics you know, Scrimgeour is sucking up to Harry.) I wonder why Harry got such a free ride in HBP. The Death Eaters that attacked Hogwarts on the night Dumbledore died had opportunities to kill Harry. Snape actually stopped them from harming Harry, and said it was Voldemort's orders. Why? There is action in chapters 8 and 9. Harry is a man of action. But as for me, I'm the kind of guy who likes slapstick humor involving scantily clad leading ladies.

Name: HermioneJPotter (Signed) · Date: 04/07/06 13:53 · For: Chapter 7 Medals, Mathematics and Meetings
Awesome update... i loved it.. I realy wonder which of those could be the Horcrux... hmm... I also wonder if that necklace Hermione has is inportand... Please update soon...I can't wait to read more...

Author's Response: Hi HermioneJPotter! Thanks for the nice review! The question can be written in a multiple choice format such as: Which one of the following items is most likely to be the fifth horcrux. A) Gryffindor's goshawk, B) the red hat, C) Ravenclaw's reamer, D) none of the above. The technical term for an incorrect answer in a multiple choice question is "a distractor". If the answer to the above question is "D", then you can see that all of the other items on the list are distractors. In other words, the purpose of the list may be to distract someone away from the truth. By the end of chapter 7 you should be able to figure out what Hermione's necklace is and who it belonged to. In the bizzare conversation between the three main characters about hunting for the horcruxes, some of the most important communication consists of non-verbal signals between Ron and Hermione.

Name: jeanv (Signed) · Date: 04/06/06 18:32 · For: Chapter 7 Medals, Mathematics and Meetings
so if Nagini is a horcrux,does that make Harry one too?

Author's Response: Hi jeanv! In my little story here, Nagini is a horcrux. This explains the connection between Voldemort and the snake. Nagini must die.

Name: johnyt23 (Signed) · Date: 04/06/06 14:48 · For: Chapter 7 Medals, Mathematics and Meetings
YAY!!! as soon as i saw you finally updated i got sooooo excited awsome chapterbut um...wtf is a codpiece?? can't wait for the next chaper...awsome as always

Author's Response: Hi johnyt23! Thanks for the nice review! The moderators must be working overtime because they got chapter 7 posted pretty quickly. "wtf is a codpiece?" I thought that word might send some of you to the dictionary. It covers a part of the body you would not want to have cut off. But then again most pieces of armor do cover parts of the body you don't want to have cut off, so I suppose that's not a very good clue. You are on the right track with the "wtf" phrase, especially the "f" part. And like Ron said, it can be impressive if it's big enough.

Name: lil_beaner (Signed) · Date: 04/06/06 0:25 · For: Chapter 6 Notching the Wand
That was awesome...wild...no other words i can say that can explain this ff. It's great..i can't wait 2 read the next chapter...keep up the good work...

Author's Response: Hi lil_beaner, Thank you for the nice review! They've just posted chapter 7 so I guess I should send in chapter 8. I don't have chapter 9 done yet but it's coming along. Chapter 8 is called "Into the Forest".

Name: Sarahkool (Signed) · Date: 04/01/06 21:22 · For: Chapter 6 Notching the Wand
Wow that was really good! Can't wait 2 read the next chapter! 10

Author's Response: Hi Sarahkool, Thanks for the nice review! Chapter 7 is entitled: Medals, Mathematics and Meetings. There's not much action in chapter 7. Life at Hogwarts will settle down for a few days in the aftermath of the attack of the five flying death eaters. But there are clues leaking out.

Name: crazy4fred (Signed) · Date: 04/01/06 21:21 · For: Chapter 6 Notching the Wand
Awesome!!!!!!!!!! 10+++++++++++

Author's Response: Hi crazy4fred, Thanks for the nice review! I had a lot of fun writing chapter 6 because of the aerial combat sequences. The security breech at Hogwarts will is a newsworthy event and the Ministry of Magic will of course be investigating.

Name: johnyt23 (Signed) · Date: 04/01/06 15:26 · For: Chapter 6 Notching the Wand
Once again your writing is amazing...i cant wait for the next one awsome job!!!

Author's Response: Hi johnyt23! Thanks for the nice review! I had a lot of fun with chapter 6. I liked writing the flying sequences and I had fun with Lavender. I set it up so she would be hanging around with Hermione a lot by sending Parvati away. I think that's a reasonable extrapolation of events in HBP based on comments about the Patils. Also I am of the opinion that Hermione was never jealous of R/L. R/L lasted for 5 months. I think Hermione's fight with Ron helped to prolong the R/L affair. When Hermione did forgive Ron after his poisoning, the R/L affair collapsed within a month, even though Ron didn't have the backbone to level with Lavender. Why would Hermione want to prolong the R/L affair? 1) Lavender was her roommate and she might want peace. 2) When Ron was wrapped around Lavender's luscious young body, Harry left Ron alone and studied in the library with Hermione. She got a payoff for prolonging the R/L affair by getting Harry to spend time with her alone. Harry spent the time reading the HBP's potion book and daydreaming about Ginny's hot body, but he did spend a lot of time with Hermione. I don't think Ron treated Lavender right. He used her and wasn't honest with her. I don't think Ron's "all growed up" at the end of HBP either.

Name: HermioneJPotter (Signed) · Date: 04/01/06 13:41 · For: Chapter 6 Notching the Wand
Wow...That was an awesome update... it's soo sad tho.. Please update soon...I just can't wait to read more... I love this story...awesome job 10++

Author's Response: Thanks! Chapter 7 is in the queue. I had fun writing the flying sequences in chapter 5 and 6. I really wish I had a flying broom like Harry's.

Name: johnyt23 (Signed) · Date: 03/31/06 20:43 · For: Chapter 5 Hermione’s Charms
WOW, that's all i have to say...actually its not...your are easily (in my hubble opinion) the best writer on here... your story is amazing please please please write more i wish i could give more than a 10/10

Author's Response: Thank you, you are very kind. Chapter 6 is in the queue, chapters 7 and 8 are written. I enjoy playing with the characters and environment that JKR has created.

Name: JeWb (Anonymous) · Date: 03/31/06 8:40 · For: Chapter 5 Hermione’s Charms
1) Isn't Hermione the fifth horcrux? I'm not sure... I hope neither Harry nor Hermione is... It would be sad =/. If it has to be anyone I'm hoping its Ron. No offense, but I'm starting to hate Ron more and more. Hes an annoying git whos selfish as hell. I hope JKR kills him off in book 7 and have H/Hr get together. 2) The necklace.... der. Lol.

Author's Response: Hi JeWb! Hermione is not a horcrux, but because she is Harry's close friend, one of only three people who know that Dumbledore was looking for horcruxes and the most brilliant student in her class, Dumbledore passed some information on to her about horcruxes that he could not tell Harry. Ron's a good guy. Yes he's immature, a bit selfish and prone to jealousy, but he cares about Harry and Hermione. At the end of HBP, Harry's thinking of hunting down the horcruxes and killing Voldemort alone. Neither Ron nor Hermione would want him to do that, but Harry does not want his friends to be in danger.

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