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Name: Isebas (Signed) · Date: 02/23/07 17:41 · For: Chapter 18 Dirty Laundry
Well this was definately an interesting chapter.I never would have thought ron would give her love potion, but I digress some people do stupid things when they are in love lol. It's getting very interesting I'll give you that...a little slow moving at times but I have high hopes for the future.

Author's Response: Hi Isebas, Watching the row of dominoes fall over is a lot more exciting than watching them get set up. In chapter 23 there's this sequence of about events that takes about ninety seconds, in which there are two horcruxes destroyed and four character deaths. The good news is that it ends with Harry holding Hermione.

Name: Isebas (Signed) · Date: 02/23/07 13:37 · For: Chapter 7 Medals, Mathematics and Meetings
I dont see harry and hermione's relationship getting any deeper...thought this was a harry/hermione "love story"Oh well I'll have to wait and see I guess...

Author's Response: Hi Isebas, Thanks for the review. The problem with Harry having a relationship with Hermione (or Ginny, for that mattter) is Voldemort. Everyone Harry cares about gets murdered. Harry can't have a romantic relationship with someone he loves without putting that person in danger.

Name: SimplyCharmed (Signed) · Date: 02/04/07 14:08 · For: Chapter 19 Over the Cliff
I think I know whose Hocrux it is! I think it's Harry's! His mother must've made it for him so he wouldn't die! Am I right?

Author's Response: Hi SimplyCharmed. Read on. Hermione explains the mystery of Ravenclaw's Enumerator in chapter 24. The soul fragment in the Horcrux belongs to a murderer, not to a good guy.

Name: Pottergirl (Signed) · Date: 02/02/07 18:27 · For: Chapter 26 The Adventure Continues
It had taken months of planning, but the moment had arrived. A guard escorted Lucius Malfoy from the prison hospital back to his cell. The pain he had suffered when he cut open his foot, the indignity of using Mugglish slight of hand to make it appear to have been an accident, the clandestine inoculation of the wound with filth, the fever from the festering infection, the knowledge that his pure blood was tainted with germs, it would all be worthwhile in a moment.

As Malfoy and the guard passed Jurgsonís cell, that Death Eater launched into a spasm of coughing. He had been feigning illness for two weeks, but this was his best performance by far. Jurgson coughed, wheezed, gagged and spit out blood. Finally he collapsed to the floor.

The guard was distracted for a few critical seconds. Dolohov passed Malfoy a crude club through the bars of his cell door. One quick blow and the guard was unconscious. Lucius Malfoy had a wand.

*sniff-sniff* I smell a sequal!!! Or is that my dinner? *shrugs* 10/10

Author's Response: Hi Pottergirl! I've noticed that Harry and Hermione are very good at bouncing ideas off each other. They both are good problem solvers and they both have the initiative to take action independently of any blessing of authority figures. I think they'd make an interesting pair of detectives.

Name: Sweetpal (Signed) · Date: 01/31/07 22:11 · For: Chapter 26 The Adventure Continues
AWSOME! What a great ending

Author's Response: Hi Sweetpal! Thanks for the nice review! It's easy to imagine a happy ending if it involves Harry surviving and finally recognizing that Hermione loves him. I can't wait until July 21st and the release of book 7, when we learn how JKR finishes it up. I've been looking through SS and I've discovered something interesting. The only reason we have to believe that Snape helped to protect Harry at the first Quidditch match is because Quirrell said so. Quite frankly, I'm not so sure I believe everything said by a guy with Lord Voldemort's face sticking out of the back of his head. Maybe Voldemort lied to protect Snape's cover. Maybe Hermione had it right when she set a fire under Snape to save Harry. When Snape volunteered to referee the second Quidditch match, he might have been doing it to protect his own cover, rather than to protect Harry. Maybe the guy that murdered Dumbledore is a bad guy! Wouldn't that upset some fans.

Name: Hermy_Is_A_Witch (Signed) · Date: 01/26/07 16:07 · For: Chapter 26 The Adventure Continues
Wow! i loved it.... Good suspence and everything LOL!! keep up the good work ;)

Author's Response: Hi Hermy_Is_A_Witch! Thanks for the nice review! As you may well guess, I think Harry and Hermione make a good couple. Not a perfect couple but an interesting combination of action-oriented heroic bravery and talented mastery of magical knowledge. I am working on a post-Voldemort story that involves Harry and Hermione as private detectives.

Name: mrCONSTANTvigilance (Signed) · Date: 01/25/07 10:29 · For: Chapter 26 The Adventure Continues
sorry i did not review through out the whole story. it is because i sat down and once i started i did not stop. i need to tell you that before i actually read this story i was against the whole idea of harry getting together whith hermione. yeah well i really liked HP and the needed one. the Fifth hurcrux was even better. my view on harry/hermione stories have changed since i read your story. oh and the love potion was genius. i hope you keep writting. i enjoyed it.

Author's Response: Hi mrCONSTANTvigilance! Thank you for the great review! I wrote HP and the Needed One to illustrate that Hermione has skills that Harry needs and it would not be of any help at all to Harry for her and Ron to be a couple. But there is that interview. R/Hr shippers always point to that because there is not one thing in any of the six books that would indicate that Hermione is interested in a romance with Ron. So how could a R/Hr happen? Barring some strange epiphany that changes Ron and/or Hermione in some dramatic and unpredictable way, the only way Ron will get to snog Hermione is if he gives her a love potion. He has the means, he can just nick a bottle from Fred and George. What would be Ron's motive? Is Ron so stupid that he wants a partner who disagrees with him on almost everything, doesn't laugh at his jokes and is able to kick his sorry ass when it comes to magical talent? My thesis was that Ron cares enough about Hermione that he would try to draw her away from Harry if it became obvious that allowing her to be close to Harry would put her in mortal danger.

Name: HPKING92 (Signed) · Date: 01/10/07 17:04 · For: Chapter 26 The Adventure Continues
Great end to the story! Not to mention an awesome cliff hanger! Please write another story

Author's Response: Hi HPKING92! Thanks for the great review! There were two purposes to the cliff-hanger. 1) The escape of the Death Eaters just illustrates that Harry and Hermione will both have problems even if Voldemort is destroyed. Harry needs a talented partner and Hermione needs a strong wizard like Harry to protect her. Ron could never provide for Hermione the way Harry can. Harry has gold in the bank and a house. Ron isn't half as brave or talented as Harry. Ron takes himself too seriously, he's too self-centered and tempermental to be able to tolerate Hermione's quirks. (She's not perfect, you know.) Harry is more willing to laugh at himself. I think he'd fight less with Hermione. 2) Harry and Hermione are both problem solvers. Together they'd make a great pair of adventurers. This is a good starting point for sequels. Hermione and Ron would just go live at the Burrow with his parents. Ron would try to get a 9-5 job and Hermione would put her academic honors in a drawer and have babies. Harry and Ginny aren't a bad couple. Ginny is clearly adventuresome and a good Quidditch player, but there is no evidence that she's as bright as Hermione. Ginny was never made a Prefect. Hermione has skills in Arithmancy. Runes, Potions, History of Magic etc. that complement Harry's more action-oriented skills.

Name: thatsthequestion (Signed) · Date: 01/07/07 22:00 · For: Chapter 26 The Adventure Continues
I think there shuold be less sexual content

Author's Response: Hi thatsthequestion, I've started outlining a sequel in which Harry and Hermione are married. That should reduce the sex a lot.

Name: hermionesahottie (Signed) · Date: 01/03/07 11:38 · For: Chapter 26 The Adventure Continues
cliff hanger gahhhhhhhhh

Author's Response: Hi hermionesahottie! Thanks for the nice review! I plead "Guilty as charged." You see, I think Harry and Hermione make an interesting couple, and "They lived happily ever after." would be an inappropriate as well as lame way to end the story. The destruction of Voldemort would remove a huge threat to Harry and the people he loves, but it wouldn't be all smooth sailing afterwards. How could it be? If Harry survives the confrontation with Voldemort, then all of the wizards that support the Dark Lord's pure-blood fanaticism will be disappointed. Harry will have both dedicated supporters and dangerous enemies for as long as he lives. Hermione has enemies too. And so, the story goes on...

Name: crazyhpgirl (Signed) · Date: 01/01/07 22:32 · For: Chapter 26 The Adventure Continues
Please, please tell me you're doing a sequel!

Author's Response: Hi crazyhpgirl! Thanks for the nice review! At the moment, the further adventures of Harry and Hermione, Magical Detectives, is just a collection of discontinuous ideas. The search for Cho Chang's cousin is a very complicated issue or Mo Doh Chang would do it himself. I will be writing several chapters before submitting the first, so it will probably be mid-March before anything gets posted.

Name: Shibby14 (Signed) · Date: 12/31/06 21:54 · For: Chapter 1 - A Depressing Chore for Dumbledore
one of the best stories I have ever read. Please write more, I really want to find out about how Harry and Hermione are doing in China

Author's Response: Hi Shibby14! Thank you! You're very kind. Harry and Hermione work together very well as a team. We saw this in PoA when they went back in time to save Buckbeak and Sirius. We saw them pitch tents at the Quidditch World Cup campsite and we saw her help Harry to prepare to face the Dragon in GoF. In OotP, we saw Hermione found and Harry run the DA, while Ron really didn't do much. We saw Harry and Hermione fight together in the DoM when Ron ran the wrong way. And throughout HBP, Harry bounced ideas off Hermione. The point is that Harry and Hermione are a well matched pair. I don't have a storyline developed for the "Potter's Detective Agency and the Case of the Chinese Doll". (Just a few vague ideas about reincarnation, time travel, an eternal love between two souls that transcends the boundaries life itself, that sort of stuff.)

Name: debs (Signed) · Date: 12/30/06 18:55 · For: Chapter 26 The Adventure Continues
gasp....is that it?....that was AWESOME, the end was so good!!!, but wait a minute, theres still more????i hope you write a sequel...your creativity is great and the way how you put it all together is just amazing. 10/10

Author's Response: Hi debs! Thanks for the nice review, I really appreciate it. The goals of this story were: get Voldemort's soul fragment out of Harry without killing him, kill Voldemort, and get Harry and Hermione together for a lifetime of adventure. I'd be happy to write a series of sequels about the further adventures of Harry and Hermione, Magical Detectives, but I'd want a license from JKR so it could be published.

Name: HermioneJPotter (Signed) · Date: 12/30/06 12:32 · For: Chapter 26 The Adventure Continues
Oh my gosh!!!! I cabn't belive this... So Lucius escapes??!!! Wow... awesome chapter.. Absuletly loved it!!!! Does this mean theres a sequel comming up soon?? Please write more... I just can't wait to read what happens to Harry and Hermione in China...

Author's Response: Hi HermioneJPotter! Thanks for the nice review! I've had a lot of fun writing this story. I did sort of set things up for a sequel, but I don't have a complete story line figured out. The real point is that Harry and Hermione work well together and could make a great detective team. That would probably not happen with Harry and Ginny and certainly not with Ron and Hermione.

Name: clvmtsoccergirl88 (Signed) · Date: 12/30/06 11:45 · For: Chapter 26 The Adventure Continues
No! It can't be over! What happens with Lucius? Do they ever find Cho Chang's cousin? What was that special item she was given? Why must it end? It was one of the really good, well written stories on mugglenet. Anyways, good job, it kept me anxious for every chapter update.

Author's Response: Hi clvmtsoccergirl88! Thanks for the nice review! Lucius Malfoy will hate Harry Potter forever. If he escapes from prison he'd try to hunt Harry down and would probably never accept that the Dark Lord isn't coming back. I think Harry and Hermione can help each other to survive in a dangerous world. They're a good matching set, both are very competent and very brave and they work well together.

Name: peopel (Signed) · Date: 12/29/06 23:19 · For: Chapter 26 The Adventure Continues
Wow! I don't know what else to say. Usually I'd give you a long explination of how well the chapter was, but this time all I can say is that you did a great job. The whole story was fantastic and I will miss it greatly.One question though, will you write another one?

Author's Response: Hi peopel! Thanks for the kind review! It feels good to get to the end of the story. I started writing Harry Potter and the Needed One more than a year and a half ago with the intention of writing a short story that illustrated the point that Hermione has skills Harry will need in his search for Horcruxes. I ended that story with no intention of continuing, but then I had an idea about Harry being a Horcrux and I had to write a 101 thousand word sequel. I have no plans to write a sequel, but H/Hr is such a good pair that it's a natural for a series. We can see in GoF, OotP and HBP that H/Hr work together as a team even if Harry doesn't want to admit it.

Name: sudeshna2kool4u (Signed) · Date: 12/20/06 5:15 · For: Chapter 1 - A Depressing Chore for Dumbledore
u know what?

this is total rubbish! ur story sucks. it really does, and believe me, i have heard of no other story that stinks soooooooooo badly! actually, the couple harry/hermione in itself is the most horrible one i have ever thought of. You are a horrible person, to think hermione likes harry, and not ron! how stupid of you! idiot!

Author's Response: Oh No! I am overwhelmed by your intellect. I feel like Iíve been given the Care Bear Stare. I am a horrible, stupid, idiotic person. Boo Hoo! Boo Hoo! I must change my ways and write a Ron + Hermione story. "Once upon a time Ron married Hermione and we never heard from that bitch again. Ginny bravely sacrificed herself in the final battle so Harry could live and win. Heartbroken, Harry flew off into the sunset, hoping to find love with a Muggle girl like you. The End" Does that make you happy now?

Name: kaisha1992 (Signed) · Date: 12/06/06 21:36 · For: Chapter 25 The Second Battle of the Bathroom
was that the last chapter??? Cos i wanna know what happens!!!!
that was awsome keep it up!

Author's Response: Hi kaisha1992! Thanks for the nice review! I'm working on the last chapter, but can't tie up loose ends without a couples of twists.

Name: heirof_slytherin_09 (Signed) · Date: 12/04/06 18:05 · For: Chapter 25 The Second Battle of the Bathroom
YAYYY your back!!! for a while there i was pretty nervous...another well done chapter as always and i love how you keep throwing in all these little twists...most stories would probably get boring after the destruction of voldemort yet your story is still full of energy...1000/10

Author's Response: Hi heirof_slytherin_09! Thanks for the nice review! The destruction of Voldemort sure does change things! Not so much for Harry and Hermione, they still have a ton of problems to face. Lots of powerful wizards hate them and lots of others idolize them. They still have to deal with danger and get on with life. But for me, the changes are enormous. Most of my efforts have been narrowly focused on how to get Harry to and through the critical moments when he meets Voldemort. Now I have to figure out how to get to a good story ending in an efficient fashion.

Name: Eve (Signed) · Date: 12/03/06 14:57 · For: Chapter 25 The Second Battle of the Bathroom
gosh i thought this one would be the end but i'm glad it's not! Keep writing. I love this story.

Author's Response: Hi Eve, Thanks for the nice review! I've still got a few loose ends to tie up. Just because Voldemort's dead it doesn't mean it's all going to be smooth sailing. Harry and Hermione need each other.

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