it was pretty short, a little confusin to me...randomly ginny's whole family is dead, her best freind is unconcious and possibly dying, harry is murdered by Voldemort, and the best thing she can do is hug malfoy? how about crying over harry or ron's dead bodies or trying to help Hermione instead of making out with the guy that so recently aimed a killing curse in your direction...er....not a bad write, but i do believe that it requires a prologue...7/10
Author's Response: really? Well, she did cry over Ron and Harry, you just didn't see it. Also, if you had a sixfoot tall deah eater standing over you, would you run to help your friend, or defend yourself. THIS is a ONE-SHOT. Not a novel. It popped into my head, and it shouldn't need explanations. You are prolly not old enough to understand some feelings that are just...there. Like when she decided to make out with Malfoy. Do I have to be completely accurate on what Ginny would do?
Good one....Keep it up!!!
Author's Response: thanks, and sirius is only hot in the books.
Not bad Capricorn. Not bad at all. It is a little rushed, but I'm sure that is just because its a one-shot. I see that you have a problem with no reveiws. My suggestion is to let them come to you, don't beg your friends to send them, and just wait for the little Draco/Ginny shippers, no matter how rare they are, to come zooming in...looking for a good story. Okay? Yes, I said it was a tad bit rushed, but it does seem to be like the characters...but Ginny is a lil wimpier than she should be, but her brother died, so I guess that makes sense. In your reveiws you say that the romance was there, just waiting to be awoken, in your story it doesn't seem like that. Wow, that was a pretty long reveiw. I'll give your story the rare ten. Deal?
Author's Response: Woah..that was pretty darn long. Yeah, I suppose you're right about the reveiws, and I know I should make the story a little more like the romance was there, but waiting to be unwoken. Thanks for the ten!
I like this onesy. A great ride for half the price, the ending was pretty cool too.
Author's Response: is that a good thing? Or are you saying that my story is just a flick?
that's still editing! come on peeps, review her story that i did EDIT!!!
Author's Response: thanks.
YAY! i, your good friend- well, it was emotional reading through the story that i edited. good job capricorn, good job. (wipe away tear)
Author's Response: YOU DIDN"T EDIT IT!! YOu added three commas!!!
I will send you a review, since no one else has. It was good. It seemed rushed but it was good. I have a question for you though. On this story, did Ginny and Draco already like each other or did they suddenly have a fling. Because to me, it sounded like they suddenly liked each other. I don't know if it's just me or not but thats what I caught on to. Well, the ending was sad (but rushed) when Harry died. Almost got a tear out of me, you sneaker. :) DDL 8
Author's Response: THANK YOU FOR YOUR REVEIW! Um...this was just a one-shot, so it wasn't very deep...but in this story, they suddenly had a fling, but the relationship was there...waiting to be unwoken. as my first reveiwer...you win....two pennies!!