Cool - well done!
I really like this poem. It looks like it's been written by Jo herself!
w00t!! omg funny
Very good. I love the last line of it. It really ties it all togather. This poem really flows nicely. Good job! I think it would be interesting if you wrote a story about Harry in his seventh year or something and used this song in it. Just to see the first-years reaction. 10/10 HermyRox12
I can see why this won. It feels like someone's telling you a story yet you're surprise that it's a poem and it rhymes.
Just a few suggestions:
“It’s here!” they cried(.), “(T)that we shall build
The lake(;), the forest(;), the tower(;), your dorm!
“My lord!” they cry. “We will obey!”
Maybe italicise 'My lord" and "We will obey!"
*grin* okay enough with my nit-pickyness. I truly love how you started off with the founding of Hogwarts, then have the second part talk about Voldemort, and the final part talk about unity. Everything flows well. Great job Anna!
Author's Response: Thanks Nutty! I don't usually write poetry, so I was very surprised that it won! Thanks for the suggestions!