Author's Response: Yeah. A bit.
depressing but i liked it
Author's Response: i know it's somewhat depressing, but i was somewhat depressed at the time. thank you for the review, comewhatmay. and, just out of curiosity, is that a Moulin Rouge reference?
nice poem! the beginning was a bit hard to understand (dont ask me why, i might have been zoning out) but the rest was good!
Author's Response: YAY a fellow zoner AND a review!! this is my lucky day...
Speechless. Just...keep writing, i would love to read more of you. (PS-there're a few spelling errors in there, look out for them.)
Author's Response: I'll get to those ASAP, I promise. And don't worry, I'll be writing on here until I'm sick of the Potterverse (which will be never)
Oh wow, you brought tears to my eyes. It's funny, I didn't actually like the beginning. I'm not sure why, but it just seemed kind of boring. Then I got to the line "She saw the laughter leave his eyes never to return." That actually made me physically hurt. I loved the rest. I loved how it was about how death can affect someone in general- also the list of people who were "gone" was very effective. Very good choice of poetic style as well- free verse, short sentences, allowed us to see emotions very well, as well as her fragmented thoughts. I'm giving too many good reviews today, I must go find a story to hate...
Author's Response: well, seeing as you live in a world of candy, maybe it's hard for you to find a story you hate :) ha ha. Well, anyways, I'm glad it affected you in the way that I was going for. I'm not really sure why I wrote this poem, to tell the truth. I think I was having a random emo moment...
You really did a nice job with this poem. I love the way you showed Hermione's emotions. Great job!
Author's Response: glad you liked it :)