Reviews For Memoriola
Reviewer: Stubby_Boardmen
Date: 10/11/06 14:07
Chapter: Chapter One

-applauds- That was brilliant poetry! Did you compose it or did someone else? Either way great poem!

Reviewer: Choggstar
Date: 06/14/06 7:45
Chapter: Chapter One

There's some really nice imagery here and I love the title. There seems to be some struggle within the poem though, as to whether you're talking about Harry Potter or real life war. So of your imagery suggests the former, some the latter and they don't fit particularily well with each other.
One again there's this problem of is the narrator a spectator or a soldier, at some points he/she looks at the wider picture, at other points they tackle the whole thing from a personal standpoint. I'd like to see you write a completely personally written poem written about the real grit of war and less of the bigger themes which leave the poem seeming confused and maybe less of the rhyming, because real raw emotion can very rarely be conveyed through rhyme. But that's just me.

Keep writing!

Buenos Noches!

Reviewer: HermioneTonks
Date: 06/03/06 22:19
Chapter: Chapter One

I really like your stuff! GREAT, FABOUSLE, AMAZING job! LOL! You have inspired my to write my own pomes... Thanks!

Author's Response: Thanks very much! I'm glad I inspired someone...^_^

Author's Response: Thanks very much! I'm glad I inspired someone...^_^

Reviewer: Lilypudding
Date: 03/06/06 20:40
Chapter: Chapter One

I really enjoyed reading this poem. It was very long, but still a joy to read. I can't tell you how much I enjoyed it. "Life will be a spiral staircase, a steep one with no rails." I really liked that metaphor, and found it really related to life. I found that poem beautiful. 10/10, definitely.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your wonderful review! I'm glad someone bothered to read it...sorry about the length...but I was recently reading some Time and National Review articles about the war in Israel and I said, "Hell, I can make good stuff out of this." Thanks once again for the review.

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