I really like this take on Severus' childhood. I wanted to cry, hope thats what u wanted. You got the emotions through really well. I can't wait for that sequel. Keep up the amazing work.
Well done! I thought it gave us good glimpses at both children without just stating the obvious. I like the idea that Lily had seen him before. Nicely written!
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you liked it!
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you liked it!
Hi, Snarky! Nice to see MN didn’t give you the attitude of another site, which we can call unworthy-of-being-mentioned. O.k. so looking at this story again, I’m completely convinced that FA must be moderated by complete morons. I guess that’s why I like MN and SH! I’ve had a mod here misunderstand my story (God knows they probably read a ton of stories, so I can totally sympathize with an occasional misreading), but she was more than willing to review my submission when I pointed out the misunderstanding.Anyway, I do love this story and am glad you’re thinking sequel! As you know (and as FA should have known), Snape is completely and immediately recognizable. The image of him standing at the river, skipping stones really appeals to me; it’s no wonder the girl can’t help but return for another glimpse of this mysterious figure. He has that effect on the rest of us, too!
You present Lily with a bit more subtlety, of course, but I like that. When we do realize who she is later on, it makes it all the more effective. Here is the possibility for friendship, a possibility untainted by words such as “mudblood” and “pureblood,” one even untainted by names of any sort. It’s just an inquisitive, red-haired, green-eyed girl fascinated by a lonely, downtrodden, black-eyed boy. I think this moment of pure potential is simply lovely.
Author's Response: Thanks, Luna! I'm very impressed with this site so far and feel very welcome. I'm looking forward to exploring the potential of their friendship further - as you say, untainted by prejudices, for now. :P
