Reviews For If I Ask You To
Reviewer: Shelly Wonder
Date: 02/20/06 18:21
Chapter: Parts III & IV

Aww, this was so sweet! =) I loved it. I was wondering where the heck James was in the first Chapter, but the second Chapter made perfect sense.
Also. I love the way you portrayed Lily, even though that's a bit too cold, even for her. But you made it so real... I just loved it! =) 100/10!

Author's Response: Hehe, I think you hit the submit button more than once? Anyway, thank you so much for your response. I love reviews. ^_^ I know Lily's characterization is a bit tough to read, but I feel that this is how she would be after so much trauma in her life. It really is too much to deal with - as you'll see in the following chapter. Wow, 100?! I only hope the next chapter is half as good!

Reviewer: Hallia
Date: 02/15/06 16:36
Chapter: Parts III & IV

really enjoyed this chapter...i was wondring where James was in the first chapter and here he is..YAY! 10 again.

Author's Response: Thank you! Haha, James sneaks up on you...I wonder what you'll think of him in the next chapter (which is already in queue)?

Reviewer: Hallia
Date: 02/15/06 16:36
Chapter: Parts I & II

extremely well written. it's different too, than many of the other fics. it takes place later, when they're more mature, which, in your case seems to intesify everything completely... very good. 10.

Author's Response: Thank you very much. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Yes, as we grow older we experience everything so much more powerfully than when we're younger. And since Lily's distraught, she experiences everything twice over...

Reviewer: hpfanforlife
Date: 02/12/06 15:30
Chapter: Parts III & IV

Mmmm - I loved it! You really do have a way with words; it's amazing! Keep up good work =) (10/10)

Author's Response: Thanks so much - again! I love writing, but I love it even more when people appreciate my work. Thank you for taking the time to respond!

Reviewer: hpforlife
Date: 02/12/06 12:44
Chapter: Parts III & IV

That was excellent, I must say. You really do capture Lily's emotions so well. And you created such an intense scene with Lily and James, it was so much fun to read. Please update soon! 10/10 of course.

Author's Response: Thanks very much. I'm touched! I absolutely love writing from Lily's POV. As for James...I admit I have a soft spot for him since a lot of people think (INCORRECTLY, hehe) that's he's an arrogant jerk. But he's not! I'm glad I'm making this fun - it'd be boring if it sucked, LOL.

Reviewer: Griffy Girl
Date: 02/11/06 23:11
Chapter: Parts III & IV

omigosh.....u r sooooo good!! keep it up! 10!

Author's Response: Wow, thank you!

Reviewer: KoolGirl
Date: 02/09/06 14:04
Chapter: Parts I & II

i loved your story. i have never ead anything like it before. yay!

Author's Response: Aww, thanks! Hehe, it's always good to be unique. :)

Reviewer: greeneyes
Date: 02/07/06 17:55
Chapter: Parts I & II

I really like this story. It flows so well. I can barely get my story going, and I can never seem to stick with one for long enough. I just started my third James/Lily story because I'm not happy with any of my other ones. Anyway, enough about me. I really like your story. It's mysterious, because it's not like everybody's elses, when James and Lily are at school. It takes a brilliant imagination to write as well as you do, and also to come up with the story line. Please continue

Author's Response: Thank you very much, I'm flattered. I love writing about James and Lily, but I thought their story could take a different twist with Lily's character...anyway, about your stories: don't feel pressured. You can brainstorm and make outlines for your story before you write/publish them...then you might have an idea of where they're going. That's what I do with my writing. Hope your stories work out!

Reviewer: Susan05
Date: 02/07/06 9:17
Chapter: Parts I & II

Your story's wonderful! I'd say that everything was perfect, but the word "everything" sounds too general now, after reading it... Definitely my favorite here.

Author's Response: Thank you so much! LOL, got you thinking about words, eh? I've accomplished my goal then! I'm honored that this is your favorite. I only hope that I can keep up with all of my readers' expectations once the story goes on.

Reviewer: hpforlife
Date: 02/06/06 21:07
Chapter: Parts I & II

Oh, wow. That was excellent. It was perfection. You're such an excellent writer! Lily's thoughts...I'm not sure I can explain what I think about them. I guess they seem so real, and it really does take a great writer to capture something like that with such skill. I think this is one of the best fanfics I've ever read (though a bit sad). This is most definitely going on my favorites list. Keep up the amazing work! I can't wait for an update. 10/10

Author's Response: Perfection? *shocked* I've never written anything perfect. But I thank you for the compliment just the same. I'm very flattered with each word you wrote. You actually made me blush! This story is the only story out of the dozen or so I've written and completed that I can say I wouldn't change. Not that it's perfect (lol) but I'm pleased with the way it turns out. It's more than just a love story, as you'll see. I know it's sad at first, but I promise there's a reason for the sadness. Once the next chapter is approved, you'll find out!

Reviewer: Griffy Girl
Date: 02/06/06 17:49
Chapter: Parts I & II

..whoa...i just started a story of my own and i wish it were half as good as yours! your use of metaphors and similes is amazing! I felt like i was there! i'm actually sad now cuz it felt so real.....jeez thanks a it up!!! 10/10

Author's Response: Thanks very much! Aww, don't begin to compare your writing. Each piece of writing is as individual as the person who wrote it. I'm glad you caught the similies and metaphors. ;) I was wondering if anyone would. LOL, sorry to make you sad. But the story isn't all has its highlights, as you'll see.

Reviewer: BerthaJorkins
Date: 02/06/06 16:38
Chapter: Parts I & II

Amazing. I love your writing style, I love everything about this story. It's so real, and you made the reader feel as if they were part of the story, part of the plot. I absolutely loved it, you are a fantastic writer.

Author's Response: Wow, thank you so much. I'm happy you're enjoying this. That was exactly my intent: to make Lily's fears come alive for the reader, since she's very much living in a world conquered by her fears. Again, thank you!

Reviewer: hpfanforlife
Date: 02/01/06 18:54
Chapter: Parts I & II

That was amazing!!! I don't think I've ever read anything quite like your chapter before. The flow was perfect; Lily's mourning seemed real & not too forced or anything. Your writing skills are wayyyy better than most of the writers on here; you deserve 2378283890 reviews!! Keep up the great work. =)

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading. Wow, I'm extremely flattered! Yes, Lily is definitely mourning - but also for something that's happened to her. You'll find out the reason in the next chapter. I wish I could get that number of reviews, LOL. Look for the update soon. ;)

Reviewer: loonymoony8
Date: 01/31/06 17:37
Chapter: Parts I & II

I haven't been here in awhile, only catching up now. So why and how did Lily and James split? Good story so far! Keep it up!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! The reason for their splitting up is explained in the next chapter, which I'll probably post tonight. Look for it then, and I hope you enjoy it!

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