Still and will always be one of my favourites. I can't tell you how many times I've read this.
Yours,
2SiriusB
Very good first chapter. Your writing style, I can tell is set to match the tone of this story and therefore it comes across as deep and slightly poetic.
Every once in awhile I'll read stories where authors try and use the same technique of writing, but often it is overdone and ends up seeming too forced and therefore becomes tiring. So it's a compliment indeed when I say that you portray it very well, and defanitly don't overdo it.
The dialogue at times can seem a bit boring and pointless, as though the characters would have been better off saying nothing, but since words exchanged are far more scarce than words describing, I can be too picky or absolute in my judgement in that area quite yet.
All in all, though, it flowed wonderfully, was very entertaining, a proper leangth, and I am especially impressed on how well you managed to fill us in on what happened to Lily so that we don't feel utterly confused, but left out what happened to James and any other small details. Very nice indeed, and now I am off to read Chapter 2. Hopefully it will be just as fufilling as this one.
-Beauty Fades
A wonderfully moving piece of fiction, sensationally stirring and beautifully written. Both idea and style are well thought out, your choice of words and phrasing bring such clarity to the story and the imagery is astounding. Truely fantastic.
it was kinda hard to understand but other than that it was good.
In your bio it said you were from Ecuador, Ive been to Ecuador. Its really cool!
Oh, wow. That's all I have to say. Definitely one of the most powerful and moving stories I have ever read. And I've read a lot, mind you. :] You have a great talent.
Beautiful. Wow. There's really nothing more I can say.
awesome kinda depressing bt well written none the less
This is one of my favourites!! Please write another just like this one! PLEASE! It's one of the best I've ever read! Ever consider becoming an author?
I luv it! It was well written, and you made me cry a couple of times. 11/10! ;)
this is the most beautiful story i think ive ever read! hell i cant think of anything to say! 10/10!!!
You have got to be the best writer ever! I loved your story! I could not take my eyes off of it! The way you desribed lily's pain made me cry and the memories at the end were amazing! The end was so satisfying! Please never stop writing!
That was absolutely, amazingly, supercalifragilistically wonderful! You have such a unique writing style! It's a really good, don't worry! This was a great story, and it really could apply to anyone whose gone through hard times, not only Lily. Great job! :-)
