Reviewer: ImaGEENEation
Date: 02/11/14 12:06
Chapter: Confrontations

When will you update? It's been years!

Reviewer: H4rrynG1nnY
Date: 08/18/07 18:37
Chapter: Confrontations

Cute story to say the least. The first chapter was a litle choppy. You seemed to have changed Harry's character because I never saw Harry as the type that would seek revenge for Dean stealing his girl. I'll be waiting for the next chapter!!!!!!!

Reviewer: Hp_4_eva
Date: 08/26/06 12:23
Chapter: Confrontations

First and formost, you'r making Ginny into a bitch, so please cut it out!! I mean, the idea that she is already taken is good, but she is supposed to be head-over-heels in love with Harry and nobody else, no matter who she dates. make her that way.

Reviewer: Gryffindorgirl54321
Date: 07/19/06 22:20
Chapter: Confrontations

I hope they get together soon please

Reviewer: ginny_babe92
Date: 06/22/06 23:25
Chapter: Changes

I like it. I like most things to do with Harry and Ginny :D But I had a few little problems with it. First of all, they found him three days after he killed voldemort? He was just lying there, alive, for three days? How could no one notice? How could no one see the damage and see what had caused it?
Also, You’re what!” Harry yelled. “No, no, you’re not seeing someone else. You can’t. How could you do that to me? How could you leave me? I love you, Ginny, how could you break my heart?” Don't you think that he's acting a little over the top? I couldn't see Harry acting like that. And lastly, you left out alot of question marks. Other than that I really like the idea and look forward to seeing where it's heading :)
~ginnybabe-92

Reviewer: eaglebird
Date: 04/26/06 17:46
Chapter: Confrontations

Cute story. And Ginny is really making Harry work for it. Where is Dean anyway ....... has he graduated?

Reviewer: eaglebird
Date: 04/26/06 17:45
Chapter: Confrontations

Cute story. And Ginny is really making Harry work for it. Where is Dean anyway ....... has he graduated?

Reviewer: kikigurl1993
Date: 02/19/06 12:08
Chapter: Confrontations

It's allright, not too realalistic.....Ron wouldn't use those long dicribing words in the 1st chapter. Not very good.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. Sorry you didn't like it.

Reviewer: Cheshlin
Date: 02/17/06 13:13
Chapter: Confrontations

I don't see Ginny being so hard on Harry. I wouldn't think she would totally dump Dean either, but Harry has held her heart since 2nd year. I hope we get to see who you have as Dark Arts teacher, and if there are other people around to give Harry a support group as he trys to move on with his life. McGonagal shouldn't be leaning towards Gryffindor anymore, she is head of the school, not Gryffindor, unless you have her unable to find a different head of house. I look forward to reading the next chapter

Reviewer: honeydukeschoclate
Date: 02/13/06 19:58
Chapter: Changes

I am really interested in this plot, and a little angry, but deep breaths...ok, I'm good. Update soon, I want to hear about Harry and Dean's talk. Ginny was a bit harsh, understandably, but she could have shown a little bit of sympathy, don't you think? As I said, update, it's really original and great. A lot of people make it so that as soon as it's all over they run into each other's arms, and what you did with this plot is very nice. 10/10

Author's Response: Sorry, no talk yet i'm afraid. Sorry if i dissapoint you. Let's say Harry just gets caught up in, um, other things. The chp. is a little short just to warn you, but it's all apart of the plot, I promise. But yes, you will see Harry's talk with Dean in the third chapter. Sorry once again, But thanks for the review. ha Chp. 2 is in queue by the way

Author's Response: The second chapter is a little short. That's what i meant to say. Sorry if i confused you. Just read it and i got confused ha.

Reviewer: Hp FAN FICS ROCK
Date: 02/13/06 18:24
Chapter: Changes

Very Good Writing, The SPACES between the paragraphs are a Little Awkward, I am starting to get your plot. The Overall Storyline is Good. The only thing else I can say is, Smooth it out a little. Before it gets too Bumpy, Other then that Great Story. No need to thank me for reviewing, You Need to be thanked for writing the story. Thanks, T.S. Plot 10 Smoothness-9.0 Characteristics of Charecters- 9.5 = Ginny- 9.0 Two Much Nastiness Harry- 9.5 Very good but Harry is not so Expressive which is O.K. Though Ron & Hermione- 9.0- A little too... Expressive at first. Other Traits and Parts of the Story- 9.5 --------------------------------------------- Never Give up it is as bad as Treason. T.S. 2/13/06 6:17 PM Have a great day...

Author's Response: I still have to say thanks for the review.Yea, it's my first fanfic and i still have problems with the paragraph coding and spaces. I'm trying to figure it out and my beta is helping sooo hopefully i won't confuse you in the second chapter. But, if I am please let me know and I will try even harder to fix it. Thanks again.

Reviewer: ariya
Date: 02/13/06 18:19
Chapter: Changes

i like this story quite a bit and im looking foreward to the next chapter. i can see where Ginnys coming from. I think i would be a little fed up, and Ron is a little OOC. but other than that its very good.

Author's Response: Thanks, appreciate the review. Yea, I changed ginny because it was very OOC of how she was treating Harry. But, people will still think she is still OOC, but I will live. Yea, I definetly see how ron would be. OOC, but I always see Ron as having a sensitive side that no one ever sees. And by having that scene I think it helps strenghthen his and Harry's friendship. But that doesn't mean he is always going to be open like that. I think it happens once out of every 1000 times. lol. But, once again thanks for the review. chp 2 is in queue!!!!

Reviewer: mrscedricdiggory
Date: 02/12/06 22:43
Chapter: Changes

Nice start I am interested in hearint the rest of the story. I like it so far but i don't think Ginny would be so mad at Harry. Keep It UP

Author's Response: Thanks, chapter 2 is in queue!!!!

Reviewer: littleWoNdErFuL
Date: 02/12/06 20:29
Chapter: Changes

Good writing, but I think Ron and Ginny are both OOC. Ron seemed a little too feminine at some points, like where he admitted to "breaking down" and openly crying. I can definitely see Ron crying, but we all know how he tries to be all "masculine-but-not-really," so I think he might have really tried to cover up the fact that he was really emotional. Hermione, on the other hand, would be sobbing all over the place. And Ginny, well, I cannot see her at all moving on from Harry after seven years of waiting for him, especially if he was on the brink of death. She knows Harry's reasons for not being able to be with her, so that gives me reason to believe that she would wait until after he defeated Voldemort to come back to him. She wouldn't give up on Harry so quickly; she loves him far too much. I don't think that would be a demonstration of her "fiery" personality at all, just lack of feeling. It also seems kind of unsesitive of her. She knows Harry loves her, and I really don't think that while he was in a coma, almost dying, she would go off with Dean again. She would be by his bedside praying for his health. She's so strong like that, and that's why I don't think it fits. But that's just my opinion. I've got a very set image of Ginny's persona, and it takes a lot for me to sway from it O.o But here's the good thing: Your writing is very good. You have talent to work off of, so some characters being OOC isn't that big of deal. If anything, fixing them will make you a better writer (believe me, it took me forever to get Harry down, and he's not even the main character in my fic, but learning as much as I could really helped me in the parts that featured him). So keep writing, and nice start!

Author's Response: Ok, first thanks for reviewing. I appreciate it. Second, yes Ginny has been waiting for seven years. But that doesn't mean that the girl isn't going to get fed up. Yes, she said she understood his reasons at the funeral. Actually, she just said that it was for some noble cause. But, that doesn't mean that she completely accepted it. She's not going to sit back and let him make this decision on his own. She is to determined to let that happen. Yes, I see how going to Dean is OOC but it was my first time trying to write fanfic. But no excuses, i'll try and fix it.

Reviewer: Zoltan42
Date: 02/12/06 15:12
Chapter: Changes

Sorry, I have to agree with the prior review. Her actions are contrary to what she said at the funeral of expecting him to do what he did. Also, her relation with Dean is based on her rambling "on and on about how Harry might not take her back and how it scared the shit out of her," os o course SHE's the one who doesn't take the other one back. It just doesn't work for me.

Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing. Yes, I have had other people tell me that also. I plan to go back and switch it up, because I guess i'm obviously not getting out what I want to. I guess when you're the author, you assume other people get the idea that you are trying to convey. Sorry about the confusion and the O/C. I plan to fix it when I get time.

Reviewer: Hot48cricket
Date: 01/29/06 22:24
Chapter: Changes

You have a very good story going, but Ginny is very O/C. I don't think she would do that to Harry.

Author's Response: Well, first off I would like to say thank you for reviewing. It means alot to hear that you like my story. I can understand how you may see how Ginny wouldn't do that to Harry. But he did leave without talking to her and she thought he was going to die. With Ginny's fiery, independent personality I percieve it as her not waiting for him technically. But she might come back, you never know. lol

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