I loved this, and I'm so glad it showed up on the Story Of The Moment feature of the archives. It's a wonderful example of all the great stuff that has been published on this site over the years, stuff that now lingers in the archives, waiting to be rediscovered.
Were you a Slytherin?
I love The Raven and I love this poem. I don't know what else to say. *loves*
Just to let you know if you wanted to come down and read it, we will be discussing this poem a bit in terms of rhymind in Arithmancy class on the forums. :)
That's good! I'm learning about Edgar Allen Poe in school, and I have to say, I like this version as much as the regular one!
I’m not very into reading poetry, but this one was simply great, if I had to say in a word. Throughout the whole poem, I was on the edge of my seat, wanting to know what would happen next. You’ve captured the action scene of action superbly. In spite of the “poetic-ness” which is the last thing you want in an action filled scene while doing prose, I was actually amazed at how good poetry can be used to describe action. You’ve blended the ‘action’ ‘mystery’ and ‘poetic’ parts very well. Another thing you’ve used efficiently is repetition and rhyme. The rhyme gives a musical quality to a fic (I felt as though I was watching an opera or something lol) and the repetition is quite nice when you read it aloud.
Lines like these are those that stand out in my mind:
What has past I see tomorrow; - time is what I need to borrow
The first part of the line explains his confused state nicely. And the last part is worded well. Good job! Then with hand to head pressing, but no single thought progressing
This line was very articulate yet, retained the poetic quality. It’s almost as if his hand prevents his thoughts from progressing. Great job!
I’ll stop before I begin to quote the entire poem. All in all, I enjoyed this greatly. Excellent job! I wish I could give this more than 10 points!
Author's Response: Thank you for the great review. It was kind of difficult to blend all the action I had planned into a poetic form, and I'm glad you think I pulled it off. =)
That. Was. Brilliant! It truly was! Oooooh, I don’t thin I’ve ever been so thrilled when reading a poem in the Harry Potter universe! I’ve always loved The Raven, and you tackled it so well! The rhythms, the theme, the dialect—it all worked!
My favorite thing was your choice of words.
And the creaky, stern; congealing cracks of each inclosing ceiling Snatched me - trapped me in this chamber so much smaller than before; So that now, to pend the closure on my mind, I stood assure, ‘’Tis not an apparition I hear upon my study floor - Not a ghost my mind conjured I hear upon my study floor; - This it is and nothing more.’
I love it, I really do. That whole stanza.
And, just sneering at me coldly, peered straight into my minds core -Peered upon haunted remembrance stamped with flame on my minds core
I snatched this quote for two reasons: one, it’s absolutely brilliant. The “minds core” is such a powerful word choice…the second reason is simply that “minds core” needs to have an apostrophe before the S in minds, as it is a possessive noun. ;)
I really do think you’ve done a great job with this. If I hadn’t been paying attention to what the words actually meant, I might have thought it was The Raven because of the flow of the entire thing. Really great job.
It's long and beautiful ... you've capture the eerie dark suspense that is typical of Edgar Allan Poe.
I could read it straight and not notice the rhyme -- I know it's there as I read it but if flows so naturally that it fell like a narrative. I hope you do get What I mean.
Definitely my favourate poem in the whole of MNFF section ^_^
Author's Response: Wow, favourite poem, thank you very much, it means a lot coming froma distinguished rhymer such as yourself. I know what you mean about how it can read like a narrative, I spent a considerable amount of time trying to do justice to Poe's rhyme and rhythm and I'm glad you thought it worked well.
Really Good! :)
Author's Response: Thank you very much marvolo. :)
Amazing. I could feel the excitement and the anticipation while I was reading and it really was a much better action scene than most I've read. I loved the flow of the poem once again, and now I think I really need to go read The Raven...
once again an excellent poem, I'll be re-reading this one a few times as well...=)...
Author's Response: Always good reviews from you, MithrillQuill, who knows maybe soon you'll see a one-shot from me (if I'm not too lazy). :)
OMG! That was as good as The Raven! I'm a big Edgar Allen Poe fan, and The Raven is my favorite poem. I really liked this poem alot, it was great. Rating: 900,000/10 :)
Author's Response: Ohhh, 900,000/10, I'm not sure but I think you violated a few laws of physics with that one. Anyways I'm glad you enjoyed it and thanks for the review.