Reviewer: slayerslat
Date: 03/22/07 17:15
Chapter: Even with Hexington

Its not The Eldest but Eldest and its the sequal to Eragon a great book

Reviewer: Potterx love4e
Date: 03/19/07 15:52
Chapter: Betraying Alarm and Alarming Betrayal

I love cliff hangers!
they are really good.
the only comment i have is
how long your taking to post the next chapter!
I've had the story in my favorites and i
check everyday to see if the story has
been updated but it hasnt =(!
please post a new chapter!!


Reviewer: Marauder_Luver2
Date: 03/02/07 12:08
Chapter: Betraying Alarm and Alarming Betrayal

i need to know whats going to happen i love the story update soon please!!!!!!

Reviewer: izzyblue24
Date: 02/14/07 19:47
Chapter: Betraying Alarm and Alarming Betrayal


Reviewer: LexiGirl
Date: 01/13/07 15:40
Chapter: Divination Proposal

I thought Diggory was in Hufflepuff? Oh, but 10/10 GREAT story!!!

Reviewer: Splatteh
Date: 01/07/07 2:50
Chapter: Betraying Alarm and Alarming Betrayal

sorry bout reviewing twice.. please update!!

Reviewer: Splatteh
Date: 01/07/07 2:43
Chapter: Even with Hexington

Loved this chappie! Die, Hexington! By the way, I've read 'Eldest' and it's so cool ;) have you seen the newest eragon movie?

Reviewer: SnufflesRox
Date: 01/07/07 2:02
Chapter: Betraying Alarm and Alarming Betrayal

please please please please please please write more!!!!! And quckly!!! This story is one of the best I have ever read!!!

Reviewer: Gin iz kool
Date: 12/30/06 23:30
Chapter: Even with Hexington

Oh my gosh!!! i love your story and dont you think eldest is good? i absolutly LOVE it

Reviewer: NeLLyRaE
Date: 12/23/06 2:04
Chapter: Betraying Alarm and Alarming Betrayal

How dare you end there!!!!!!!!! Update quickly!!!! PPLLEEEEEEAAAAAASSEEE!!!!

Reviewer: NeLLyRaE
Date: 12/22/06 16:24
Chapter: Never forget, never forgive?

Fun chapter. My symapthies to the ants.

Reviewer: NeLLyRaE
Date: 12/22/06 16:20
Chapter: Unicorn Fountain

I really like yor story! I like how you had james start the trick stair.

Reviewer: gin_an_potter
Date: 12/14/06 16:45
Chapter: Betraying Alarm and Alarming Betrayal

More!!!!!! I am new to your fic and absolutly love it!! I think you are a great writer, really! So plz up-date soon!

Reviewer: loony_lily
Date: 12/10/06 20:56
Chapter: Betraying Alarm and Alarming Betrayal


Reviewer: spike312
Date: 11/23/06 17:01
Chapter: The Platform 9 3/4 Fall

Really great fic!! Is it done or are you going to update it? Please make one more chapter!!

Reviewer: Lily_James_luvinSirius
Date: 10/18/06 17:43
Chapter: Betraying Alarm and Alarming Betrayal

This is the best story ever and I love it. I adore your style of writing. your really talented.

Reviewer: Chaser47
Date: 10/08/06 16:25
Chapter: The Platform 9 3/4 Fall

I was looking through your author's page, and I realized that this is the only fic of yours that I haven't reviewed! So here is my payment for the amazing banenr that you made for me. Sorry it took so long! Anyways, thanks again and here you go:

“Yes, mum,” Lily answered...
"Mum" in this sentance should be capitalized.

She turned around, leaned to the side, and shouted, “Good-bye Petunia!”
There should be a comma after "good-bye".

A large stone dropped in her stomach with astonishment when she saw James Potter staring down at her.
I think this sentance would be a bit better if you said that it felt like a large stone had dropped into her stomach. ;)

“You know,” he said in semi-bossy voice...
There's an "a" missing before semi-bossy.

Okay, /nitpicks.

I really liked the beginning of your story, a very classic James/Lily. I know this was your first fanfiction, so there are some common errors to be expected. I know I made about five hundred in my first couple of chapters when I wrote my first fic. But it's nice to see your progression as an author from this first chapter to your most recent one-shots.

If I had to say one thing that I think you could do better, I would say that you might want to work on improving your descriptions. This chapter was a bit dry; it would have been nice to know a bit more about what the characters were seeing and feeling at the time.

I think you ended the chapter really well; a nice cliffhanger always keeps readers coming back for more.

Brilliant job on both your story and my banner!

Reviewer: RavenClawHufflePuff
Date: 10/01/06 16:53
Chapter: Betraying Alarm and Alarming Betrayal

The Suspense The drama all so perfect! Keep writing I beg of you!

Reviewer: ginnyp_harryp
Date: 08/03/06 19:12
Chapter: Betraying Alarm and Alarming Betrayal

not james!
*crys out mournfully*

Reviewer: ginnyp_harryp
Date: 08/03/06 18:42
Chapter: Never forget, never forgive?

i loved this chap!

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