Reviewer: illovelupinforever
Date: 01/15/11 8:40
Chapter: Betraying Alarm and Alarming Betrayal

i read this a couple of years ago and iv just reread it. this is AMAZING!! I love it. you should write more you're really good and id love to find out what happens x

Reviewer: Jake_freakz
Date: 08/18/08 2:32
Chapter: Betraying Alarm and Alarming Betrayal

this is one of the most interesting story abt lily and james..............plz post the nect chapter soon.........

Reviewer: Seer_Witch
Date: 06/19/08 21:42
Chapter: Betraying Alarm and Alarming Betrayal

I just re-read the entire thing (it took me an hour) because I haven't read it in FOREVER! I just remembered the existence of my account. Anyways, I'm slightly annoyed that I last read this about half a year to a year ago, and still nothing has changed. No chapter has been added. Don't get me wrong, this is a.m.a.z.i.n.g. as hell and I love it to death!!!

Reviewer: Chris_04
Date: 06/08/08 23:01
Chapter: Betraying Alarm and Alarming Betrayal

Aaaw, everyone's attacking you for not updating. I'm sorry for adding to it! I'm sure you must be busy. (But, um... I'd love an update on this:)

Reviewer: Chris_04
Date: 06/08/08 22:59
Chapter: Betraying Alarm and Alarming Betrayal

Oh, you wrote this three years ago. Aaw, it's a shame you abandoned it; I wouldn't have started reading it in the first place had I realised that :(

Reviewer: Chris_04
Date: 06/08/08 22:57
Chapter: Betraying Alarm and Alarming Betrayal

Aw, I hate Peter so much, but I feel so bad for him! You must be a great writer to make me fell both ways at once :)
What did you mean by "She supposed Sirius didn’t let from the red rash on James’ face afterwards."?
Aaaw, where's Jamesie?? Is he okay? Update as fast as you can!!

Reviewer: Chris_04
Date: 06/08/08 22:44
Chapter: Even with Hexington

Aaw, poor Lily. Wow, summertime is sure making me a night-owl. Oh well. I liked the way you portrayed the chic-fight- those are hard to write. I liked the way you captured Lily being backed into a corner. I've been there, not fun.
I loved James's reaction to Lily's asking him to "stop being tall." Being five foot, two inches, I've used these words many times before, and I appreciate it when people slouch a little for me without making fun. (It IS uncomfortable to talk to someone much taller than you when you're short. I have a friend who's exactly a foot taller than me and he has to steer me through the halls at school when we talk.) Thanks for portraying JAmes in a way that makes me absolutly fall in love with him.

Reviewer: Chris_04
Date: 06/08/08 22:05
Chapter: Unspoken Wisdom

“Fine… Then you’d better not loose next week’s match against Ravenclaw...." You mean lose?
The idea of that chapter was kinda weird, but you pulled the details off wonderfully.

Reviewer: Chris_04
Date: 06/08/08 21:59
Chapter: Griffindor Troubles

Aw, I love little glimses of Alice Longbottom. I dunno why since we never really saw her in the series, but I;m really attatched to her, probably because Neville was s oattatched to her :)
"Slytherins aren’t the only ones I should he careful of." I liked this line. It showed me that Lily's still reaaally cautious about jumping into a relationship. It's like hugging someone who's just been in an accident- love hurts.

Reviewer: Chris_04
Date: 06/08/08 21:54
Chapter: Never forget, never forgive?

Aaw, I love how the boys are scared to leave Lily by herself. It reminds me of my guy friends and how much they like to think that they'll always be able to protect me. :) I;ve said this before, but I love how you show the relationships between the characters!!

Reviewer: Chris_04
Date: 06/08/08 21:48
Chapter: Unicorn Fountain

Hmm, Lily is sure taking for granted how much James is in love with her...
Haha!!! I loved your tying in the trick step here :)

Reviewer: Chris_04
Date: 06/07/08 23:50
Chapter: Chaser Try-Outs, Part Two

:p I love James and Lily. You've written them well. Hope you're not annoyed by all of these reviews. Crap. It's almost one in the morning and I have to get up early tomorrow then play trumpet for Graduation...
Thanks for distracting me from freaking out over my friend who was in a 4-wheeler accident and is moving to Washington (I'm in Ohio) this month and I've just realized that... Um never mind. Goodnight :)

Reviewer: Chris_04
Date: 06/07/08 23:44
Chapter: Chaser Try-Outs, Part One

"...Stay balanced unless yo want to get your head cracked open..." Juli cracks me up :) I'm glad this is getting lighter, though I'm sure it won't last :)
Aaaw, this was a sweet idea for a chapter. :)

Reviewer: Chris_04
Date: 06/07/08 23:38
Chapter: Burning Spells, Dangerous Warnings, and Blazing Fire

Aw, I really liked how Sirius stepped in to defend Lily, then Maya. It makes him easier to respect. That was a great way to show that he cares that much about the people around him, even though he's so light and casual with them most of the time.
"'Holy smokes!' Sirius shouted." Haha. That boy...
“'My God, James. Are you O.K.' Remus bent down next to Lily." Try writing out "okay." It tends to flow better.
I loved Dumbledore's "Next time, I would recommended valuing your life about a piece of wood, Mr. Potter."
I miss Remus, he hasn't been around much :)

Reviewer: Chris_04
Date: 06/07/08 23:28
Chapter: Professor Madres, Part Two

Hey hey hey. Back off on Snape. I've grown to love his character even though I absolutly hate everything about him.

Well written chapter. You're really good at capturing the characters' personalities. I really love to see how you have them react to one another and everything around them. I like how protective you have James being of Lily. It's very sweet.
And I liked how Sirius is counting the number of times that James has asked Lily out. That made me smile. :)

Reviewer: Chris_04
Date: 06/07/08 23:21
Chapter: Meeting Professor Madres, Part One

James was being pretty harsh with Peter consitering that he and Lily totally trusted him with their lives later...
Professor Madres is pretty creepy... I don't really understand the stereotype of Potions teachers being creepu and Slytherins. :P

Reviewer: Chris_04
Date: 06/07/08 23:13
Chapter: Full Moon, Part Two

It's sad to see how cold Lily is with Snape here (since the DH came out). :( It's always a shame to see friendships go so terribly.

Reviewer: Chris_04
Date: 06/07/08 23:11
Chapter: Full Moon, Part One

I like the way you've had Peter get gradually more and more annoying... Because I really hate him. Nice chapter :)

Reviewer: Chris_04
Date: 06/07/08 23:08
Chapter: Divination Proposal

Aaaw, I've always loved Remus, and it's tough to see him with someone besides Tonks, but I'm happy with the way you're doing it :)

Reviewer: Chris_04
Date: 06/07/08 14:01
Chapter: The Word and Picture

You've done a great job with James and Lily growing closer gradually. A lot of people struggle with that.
You've been sealing with Peter really well still. Awesome job :)

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