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Name: Heiress_of_Insanity_ (Signed) · Date: 09/10/07 20:39 · For: First Day of School
Oh, poor Taylor! I almost feel sorry for her...=p Almost because she technically didn't make Ariel gay, and it therefore isn't her fault. 10/10!~


Author's Response: hehe, No, it wasn't her fault. He was born that way. Thanks for the review.

Name: Heiress_of_Insanity_ (Signed) · Date: 09/10/07 20:32 · For: The Beginning of a wonderful Year
And what exactly does this 'odd feeling' mean???? *shifty eyes*

I liked this chapter a lot too, especially this part:

He was perfect in every way. He had a beautiful body, a face from heaven with a perfect jaw, sweet brown eyes, dark brown hair and a cute mawl to the left side of his mouth that made him look so incredibly sexy. On top of that, he was the captain of the Ravenclaw Quidditch team, a prefect and came from a wealthy family.

Of course, he can't be perfect in every way (but when you have a crush on someone you do think that they haven't any flaws) but he still sounds mighty fine. 10/10!~


Author's Response: And he is mighty fine. Not perfect, but still mighty fine. Thanks for the review.

Name: Heiress_of_Insanity_ (Signed) · Date: 09/10/07 20:25 · For: September Morning
Well, I can already see why this was nominated for a Quickie! It was very well-written and everything flowed nicely. I'll get back to reading it when I can; I like it a lot (and it's my first slash fic)!~


Author's Response: Welcome to slashdome then. And thanks for the review.

Name: Shadow_girl08 (Signed) · Date: 08/29/07 17:26 · For: On a Night like this...
.....That was soo HOT!!! I just started reading this today, and let me say, it has been great so far! 5/5 stars!

Author's Response: Wow, thank you. That means a lot.

Name: superlixc (Signed) · Date: 08/01/07 6:58 · For: On a Night like this...
keep it up :D

Author's Response: >.> Thanks for the review!

Name: indijo (Signed) · Date: 07/31/07 17:55 · For: On a Night like this...
That's an awful cliffe you can't leave it like that post the next chapter soon please!!

Author's Response: >.> I'll try. Thanks for the review.

Name: rowharp (Signed) · Date: 07/19/07 14:36 · For: On a Night like this...
PLease update, some of us are having serious Ariel withdrawals!! I miss him so bad.

Author's Response: I will update. Don't worry. Just give me some time. You must be thinking "More time that the one you've got?" I know, I know, I'm a horrible writer and I'm sorry for letting you guys down, but Ariel will be back. I promise.

Name: galileogurl (Signed) · Date: 06/22/07 20:08 · For: September Morning
i love this story

i need more... please?

ariel is awesome... and yeah
i love the way you wrote it in first person, the characters are very well developed. anyway, keep writing!!!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review. Maybe I'll start working on it again, but that's a big maybe. Thanks again for the review.

Name: MaiaMadness (Signed) · Date: 06/20/07 19:13 · For: On a Night like this...
I can't believe I still hadn't read this chapter... I just reread the whole story in one sitting, actually.

Yay! Action! I've kind of fallen away from fanfictioin lately, mostly because of school. But I've been reading a whole lot of yaoi manga, and then I realised I hadn't checked up on this story in quite a while. So, yes.

A kiss! Wonderful! I loves it!

I'm sorry I have nothing more constructive to say. It's been a really long day and it's 2 am. I'm going to bed...

But great chapter! I particularly loved the ending. And Jacqueline's closet. And the comment about the closet. And the perfume drawer. The bit with Jacqueline was generally good.

So, is Bahir and Sahlah siblings or something?

About the squirrel-egg comment a few chapters ago, btw. True, funny story:

Someone I talked to on the web told me about an ex-girlfriend of his. They were staying in the country on this farm and were having breakfast. She was taking butter and milk out of the fridge, looked at the butter, looked out the window at the cows that were grazing outside, and looked at the butter again before saying to her boyfriend, utterly seriously, "So, if milk comes from cows... Where does butter come from? Like... a duck?"

He replied, "What, you mean, like a duck's egg?"

"Yeah," she said, clearly thinking she was onto something. He started laughing, and the next day she dumped him. Something about him not respecting her feelings.

Author's Response: Yay! Maia! I'm very happy you liked this chapter. And yay for yaoi manga! I have a small collection myself. Oh my god, that story about the butter. It's just too funny. You have no idea how much it made me laugh, heck I'm still laughing. It's something Berenice would say. Thank you so much for the review!

Name: MollyRae (Signed) · Date: 06/04/07 14:17 · For: On a Night like this...
I have to say.
I love the story Its very mysterious and sexy.
And I have been waiting for this moment the entire story.
Please continue writing it.

Author's Response: I'm so glad you like it, which makes it harder for me. Because I'm afraid this story is on hiatus. I'm not denying the possibility of updating, but it seems very unlikely at the moment. Still, thanks for the review!

Name: loliminoz (Signed) · Date: 05/06/07 23:33 · For: On a Night like this...
i really like this story and i check every weekend to check if it has been updated i love the story line its just so good please update soon

Author's Response: I don't know if I'll be updating anytime soon. Sorry, I'm a bit busy at the moment, but it's great to know there are people out there who want to keep reading. Thanks for the review!

Name: WinterDragon (Signed) · Date: 04/27/07 13:13 · For: On a Night like this...
ok...I know I've reviewed on this story several times, but it never gets old! I'm in class right now and someone behind me is listening to that one song by Areosmith that played at the end of Armagedon...can't think of the name at the moment, but anyway, I was reading the part when Ariel and Bahir kiss, and it fit perfectly...perfect mental image, it was great!!! Absolutly beautiful...so I had to reveiw again to tell you that ^_^ Still waiting for you to update and I don't mind if I have to wait forever in order to read the rest of this story! ^_^

Author's Response: I actually had in mind the song "Linger" by The Cranberries for that song, but I guess "I don't wanna miss a Thing" works too. Thank you so much for your reviews!

Name: Cori_Black (Signed) · Date: 04/27/07 10:23 · For: September Morning
PERFECT!! Just, perfect!! I'LL

Author's Response: Nothing is perfect, but thanks. You make me blush.

Name: WinterDragon (Signed) · Date: 03/28/07 13:06 · For: On a Night like this...
gah! i swear, every time i read it, this scene gets better! i absolutely love it!! I cant wait till you update!!!

Author's Response: You've read it several times? Wow, thank you. It doesn't get boring? lol *kidding* I'm flattered. Thanks for the review!

Name: Disappearance_26 (Signed) · Date: 03/19/07 13:41 · For: On a Night like this...
I'm speechless! Amazing, awesome, breathtaking and stunning are just not good enough! Honest, you are beyond talented!!! Your characters are astonishingly fleshed-out, your descriptions poetic and the whole plot is magnificent!!
I must say that I'm in love with Ariel and I think Nessa is the best :D
The whole Jaqueline scene and the "pimple" issue were hilarious! I love how you use this sofisticated humour touches!
The end of the chapter was so perfect that it even made me sigh! You're awesome! (and I think i've already said that around 3 times in this review, but I wont get tired of telling you what a great author you are)
Thanks for writing this, really! Can't wait for the next chapter!
Your fan,

Author's Response: Oh, wow. What a lovely review. I certainly wasn't expecting this. Thank you so much for the lovely words. There's nothing like a review like yours to boost up morale. I'm really glad you like the characters, I like them too. :) Again, thanks for the review.

Name: WinterDragon (Signed) · Date: 03/15/07 11:58 · For: On a Night like this...
wow...how romantic! i love this story and i cant wait until you update it!!
~Winter ^_^

Author's Response: Thank you so much. I was aiming for romantic. :) Sadly, I don't know when I'll be updating again.

Name: DarkPrincess0206 (Signed) · Date: 02/27/07 13:42 · For: On a Night like this...
I check my mail all of the time just to see if you've updated. You've drawn the suspense out long enough! Where's that update?

Author's Response: I'm so sorry. I know I've been awful to my readers. It's just that I'm going through some family issues right now and I don't have the slightest will to write. But believe me when I say that I think about you guys constantly and that I will update. When? I really can't say. I would love it to be as soon as possible, but I really can't make any promises. Again, I'm sorry and I appreciate you guys so much.

Name: Greenelfhpfan (Signed) · Date: 02/25/07 16:38 · For: On a Night like this...

Author's Response: Sorry

Name: muggle34 (Signed) · Date: 01/18/07 15:39 · For: On a Night like this...
FINALLY! Ariel's first kiss with a guy! Or am I wrong?

Author's Response: I can't answer that just yet...

Name: sayiansirius (Signed) · Date: 01/14/07 16:00 · For: Spider Hunt
LOL!!! John has to be the funniest character Iíve ever read!! He is always there to add some type of comic relief which is brilliant. The whole note passing thing was a very nice touch. Like Iíve said numerous times (and you probably get tired of hearing this), itís something that happens in real life and itís natural. I love the way your incorporated those things into your fic. I do like that Ariel actually stood up for himself in the note passing and they names they started signing in is hilarious.

Ok first of all, is Nessa completely out of her mind? How could she forget her wand when going into the Forbidden Forest. For all we know, there may very well be another dark lord drinking unicorn bloodÖas unlikely as it may be. But the point is that it was very foolish of her. Maybe she is too stressed out. Second, I hope that Ariel is NOT thinking he can get back together with Christian. I hope he is happy just because their relationship is doomed. I hope he doesnít go back to wanting him. *glares at Ariel* I do like that he is becoming braver though. Itís a bit odd for the scared Ariel to be wandering into the Forbidden Forest just to give Nessa her wand. Yay for brave Ariel.

I was about to turn around and wish mentally Nessa good luck,

This sentence seems a bit worded oddly. I had to read it a few times to understand what you meant. Try something along the lines of ďI was about to turn around and mentally wish Nessa good luck.Ē It flows much better. :)

Your description of settings in your chapters, especially this one, is brilliant. You write in a way that we can actually see where the character is and what is happening. It was a dark starless night, the mist rested over the grounds, and the cold breeze brushed my face. That line is just beautiful and the reader can feel just how cold it is *thinks back to earlier today*. Itís a very nice way of writing and only few people have mastered imagery! Good job.

Arielís and Nessaís relationship remind me a bit of Harry and Ronís. Even though they might fight, they will still stand up for each other. They have a very nice friendship. I actually started to like Jacqueline but she seems a bit nasty at times. She reminds me of Fleur a bit! Did you think of her while writing Jacquelineís character?

*scratches head* Is Borislav okay? Heís in the middle of the forest, barking like a madman! I donít think heís aware of just how many different creatures live there is he? I think its unlikely that Nessa would let herself be silenced without her doing something back to Jackie (thatís my nickname for Jacqueline Ė hope you donít mind). I thought she would hex her back, actually. I ask againÖis Borislav feeling well? Heís weird!!

We looked up once again and this time I almost had a heart failure.
LOL. Ariel has the right timing for everything, doesnít he? Funny line in the midst of all the ruckus Ė nice addition..

HE DID IT! Iím so proud of Ariel. I was getting a bit irritated that all he did was run and not hit even one spider but Iím proud that he asked the big question!! I would have never expected it from him yet and Iím so happy he wasnít turned down and Bahir didnít take it the wrong way. Maybe they both have a chance now! *squees for Ariel*

*gasp* What did Nessa do?! Right when theyíre relationship was getting better, she does something stupid that may spoil it again! Way to go, Nessa. I really love to hate your cliffhangers, Harald! I canít wait for the next chapter!! Iím really interested in finding out what happens!

Best chapter yet!!

Author's Response: Hey, KC!!! I'm sorry it took me so long to answer this, it's just that I've been a bit lurty lately (you might have noticed). About John, he's a lot of fun to write, and he is, as you out it, the comic relief. I want all of the characters to do some comedy at one point or the other, but there some that are just more natural with it. Like John. He's going to get a bit more drama in the future, though. Nessa is mad! It took you a while to realize that. hehe. She just tends to forget and ignore things because she's rash and self-centered, but deep down she means well. Yes, and Ariel is getting braver. Kudoes to you for noticing it, I think you were the only one who mentioned it. Thanks for the help with that sentence. I think it's a bit odd that you say you like my setting because that is the part I have most trouble with. I got in that sentence in the last minute because I didn't have enough setting and it was a hit! So yay, for last minute additions. I would lie If I told you that I didn't have Fleur in mind when I created Jacqueline's character, but the more I work with her the more different she becomes from Fleur. As for calling her Jackie, well I'll let her adress that issue in the future. Borislav is not well either, but I won't say anything about him. There are some things that are better to keep in the dark. Thank you so much for this wonderful review, KC!!!

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