I only have one thing to comment on in this chapter because it makes me feel so bad for Ariel.
That night I went to bed thinking I had lost my best friend.
The WORST feeling in the whole world.
I guess I should add that the chapter was great... just because it's a reaview and because it's true, but I'm starting to feel like I'm being a bit redundant saying that in every review.
Author's Response: You can say that you like the story in every review, I don't mind! Really... It kind of id the worst feeling in the world when you feel you're loosing your best friend/ Thanks for the review!
Oh no! Poor Ariel! What a boob Chrstian was. Yes, 'don't judge him just yet' but c'mon! He told IVY about Ariel's confession! Why not just announce it over a loud speaker. *is becoming attached to Ariel* Is it wrong to feel sad for a written character?? I s'pose that's a mighty big compliment to you. If the character is real enough to have the readers feel bad for him...
Author's Response: Wow that's huge. It really means a lot to me when the readers say that they fell for Ariel, because that means they see him real enough to conect with them. Christian is a boob! hahaha, that;s the funniest thing I've heard in a while. Thanks for the review!
What was Ariel thinking??! Oh... personal experience... *shuts mouth* just saying... randomly confessing your undying love to someone is usually quite scary... for the person you confess to... I can sort of connect to this story... though I always seem to be the person on the outside. Turning a guy gay... *even though I swear it wasn't me* having someone randomly confess a love for you... way to write about my life... oh yes... AWESOME CHAPTER!
Author's Response: That's the thing, Ariel wasn't thinking! At least not straight! Lol (interesting choice of words) I'm glad you always were the person on the outside because I'm always the other person and it's very ugly. Maybe I'm sying on you and adapting your life to my story?? hehehe
Well, I was planning on reading the whole story and then commenting on the last chapter, but this chapter had way too many things worth commenting on.
“Maybe she was flushed,” Ahahaha... love that line. Creative and simply funny. nothing complicated about it, yet it made me laugh.
“I love your shoes!” I cried.
“I’M GAY!” YESSSSSS!!!! That's so good. You have a knack for writing in little bits that fit perfectly and they lighten the mood of the story. love it.
'She didn’t want to be known as the girl that turned her boyfriend gay. According to Nessa it was every girl’s worst fear.'
Ain't that the truth. It wasn't my fault... I swear... I hope...
The story is wonderful so far. I love it, but I'm sure that's no surprise.
Author's Response: I'm happy you decided to comment on the chapter. I came up with the line about being when flushed when I read somewhere that sometimes, Moaning Myrtle was flushed Lol. All the girls that I went to school with always said that the worst thing that could happen to them was that their boyfriend turned out gay, so that's why I put that in. Thanks fort the reviews!
oooh such a good chapter! and sorry i didn't review earlier... i can't wait to see what happens between Ariel and Bahir. is it a date though? or is that just what Ariel wants to believe? because it didn't sound as if Bahir was asking him out...
anyways.. Ornella IS Hermione's daughter.....she has to be. no one else loves elves and is concerned about their rights. i don't remember though...did you tell us her last name? cuz she could be Ron's daughter too. i mean..you did say that she was tall and redheaded.
i like the fact that Ivy and Verona laughed at Berenice when the soup exploded in her face... because i dont think real friends would do that... or at least be the first ones to do it. it was very mean on their part.
oh..i also like the quote, "life being what it is, one dreams of revenge". kind of the synopsis for this chapter, eh?
sry.i don't have anything constructive to say...i never do, really...just um..keep updating!
Author's Response: Lol, don't worry. Your review was lovely. I don't want to answer anything anout Ariel and Bahir, you'll find out soon enough. Ornella is Hermione's daughter? Hmmm, maybe. You're right, I haven't said what's Ornella's last name. Ivy and Verona had to laugh at Berenice because they're not real friends! I'm glad you liked the quote. Thanks for the lovely review!
Hi! I don't read a lot of slash fics, but this one is quite good, and I eagerly await the next chapter. What I have noticed about your reviewers is that many of them have affection for Ariel Sachs. I love Ariel too!! His voice is part of what makes your fic special, as it is articulate and amusing. I've gotten attached to him already! I do have a question though. If you can, please tell me how many brothers and/or sisters Ornella has, because she is one of my favorites. Nessa is too.
Author's Response: I'm happy you decided to give my story a chance even though you didn't like slash. Oh Ariel is building quite a fanbase! yay!! Ornella has a fan too!! She's jumping up and down now. Ornella has two siblings, one sister in 4th year and a brother in 2nd year, They're both in Gryffindor. Thanks for the review!
*huggles Ariel* I love him! And this story! I must be one of the worst reviewers on the planet, since you have left me incapable of writing any constructive criticism.
I'm so glad that Ariel finally got a date with Bahir! He so deserves it, he's been so badly treated in the past few chapters.
This chapter is amazingly funny and deep. I love the line, "Oh no, would it kill it if she drank it?" It made me laugh out loud!
Nessa is great as well. I love how well rounded she is, with the arrogance and everything.
Oh, and I finally figured out that Ornella is Ron's and Hermione's daughter! Am I right?
I heart this story!
Author's Response: Hey Nora! You're not the wort reviwer in the world!! Believe me, I've seen many worse. Ornella is Ron and Hermione's daughter?? Maybe, who knows....we'll see. The story hearts you back!!
Aw, Ariel's got a date!! *squees for Ariel* Okay, back to doing things in sequence! Oh, I laughed out loud at Nessa's "Here comes crazy." Ooh, I was getting quite excited about what was going to be in the paper too, I really liked how you built it up, so eventually Nessa couldn't even read it! I have to say I agree with John in it sounding a little arrogant - though I have to say he showed his Gryffindor qualities saying that to Nessa! (Although I disagree where it says that nobody wanted to see one of Nessa's famous rage attacks - I think that would be quite interesting!)
Ooh, I like the sound of Bahir! He sounds so sweet - and perfect for Ariel! A little mysterious though... Gosh - that is strange about there being no mention of Durmstrang - what's that all about? I'm betting it's not just a typo by the Prophet! 'Ariela' gosh, isn't Ivy full of wit *rolls eyes* I hope he gets his revenge! "He didn’t only have disgusting manners; he was uncomfortable with sharing a bathroom with me." That made me giggle - great line! I did feel sorry for Ariel - there was no right for those people to behave that way.
Wait - who is Ornella's mother? I immediately thought of Hermione when I heard of her mother's passionate battle for house-elf liberation! "She had very high moral standards. Nessa and I didn’t. " Oh, that made me laugh too! I absolutely loved that! I thought Nessa's remark was really harsh about him not being a true Gryffindor, though. Why was Taylor over at the Slytherin table, just out of interest? Did she know what was going on? I also thought it was really nice of Ariel to have a conscience about it happening to Bernice - but is he still going to try and get his revenge on Ivy?
*Lol* Smooth, Ariel, having a coughing fit when he's being asked out! Smoking is bad for you in so many ways! But at least he got the date! Ooh, does this mean we're going to find out more about the elusive Bahir? I hope so! (Update soon so we can find out!!) Another great chapter, one of my favourites so far, well done!
Author's Response: I have been waiting for your review! Lol, It was worth the wait. Yes, John showed his Gryffindor qualities by making that comment. One of this days he's going to pay for one of those comments. Not because he shouldn't be saying them, but because he doesn't take Nessa's temper seriously. No, you're right Durmstrang not being in the paper wasn't a typo! Hermione? Ornella's mother?? hmmmm, maybe...who knows. Yes, Nessa was harsh on Ariel. Sometimes she's harsh and hurts people feelings and doesn't notice it. Didn't you see the irony, that Nessa is calling Ariel a coward when she couldn't even read the article on the paper? Ariel won't need to take a revenge on Ivy, karma will take care of that. Yes, we're going to find out more about Bahir on the next chap, stay tuned!! Thanks for the review!
I feel so sorry for Bernice... Poor thing. It's not her fault she's stupid.
The Bahir moment at the end was brilliant. Ariel is so cute when he's in love! Have I mentioned I love his character? But, oh my, I wonder how Christian would react if something were to happen between Ariel and Bahir? You don't know what you've got till it's gone, they say, and I doubt you introduced his character if there wasn't more to it...
Can't wait for the next chapter and the "date". Till then!
Author's Response: "Poor thing. It's not her fault she's stupid" LOL, you have no idea how much that made me laugh. Ariel in love? Who says so? hehe, and you're right about Christian, I didn't just introduce him. The next chapter is going to be a good one, promised. Thanks for the review!!
I feel so sorry for Bernice... Poor thing. It'
Author's Response: hehe
Just curious, but isn't this fic on AFF too? I thought maybe I saw it there. Well, I'll have to check this one out. I haven't yet, shame on me, but I'm sure it's really great!
Author's Response: AFF?? I don't think so, it was up on HPFF and a couple of chapters on FF.net.
This was a very good story, keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Thank you, I will!
I love your story. I can't wait to see what happens next chapter.
Author's Response: Hopefully that'll ve soon. Thank you!
my favee chappp so far! i wish the dungbomb went right though
Author's Response: Hahahaha, me too. Thanks for the review!
"Hate cannot drive out hate, only love can do that." -Dr. Martin Luther King.
Mabey since Ariel relized that, his karma kicked in and he got a date with Bahir. I'm sorry Ariel got teased by his homophobic colegues. I don't see why people have a problem with other's sexuality. As long as something dosen't physically or emotionally hurt you, it should not bother you. And about 75-80 percent of homophobic men are most likely to be gay or bisexual as well. (Have we reached hypocritical mass yet?)
But hate is the tree grown from the root of fear. So mabey if they claim "to be afraid of being hit on by a fag" they are really afraid of getting what they want.
My personal story behind that rant was getting to know a guy (I sort of liked) and heard him talking about "how nasty those faggots are." Not only did that turn me off and offend me, (because I have numerous friend who are gay and bi. )But bigoty of any kind makes me uncomterable. Anyways, after the gay-bashed he started paying more attension to the "the guys" then me. (I'd like to add that he gave them very physical attension like, shoving and wrestling.) And later, a friend ( outside the group) told me the statisticI just used.
I know I probubly sound hypocritical to be ranting about gay bashing, but I'm am okay with other poeple's opinons as long as( if they hurt other people) they keep them to themselfs.
Thanks for reading my super-long review, and please update soon.
Author's Response: Wow, that was a really well thoughout review. I feel the same way about the issue. It really sucks there are homophobes out there, but if you respect my opinion then I'll respect yours. Because last time I checked we all had the right to speak our minds. Thank you for the lovely review!
Author's Response: Thanks!
Yeah! You updated!!! Lovin' the story!!!
Author's Response: Thank you! I'll keep updating as soon as posible.
You've done a great job with this story so far,keep it up.I really can't wait for the next chapter,it'll give you a chance to come up with your own part of the wizarding world and I wanna see what you can do.
Author's Response: First revew of this chapter!!! *jumps up and down* I wanna see what I can do with my part of the wizarding world too! *giggle* Thanks for the review!
Hi! Great story! I've only read a couple slash stories, and this is, by far, great! I love how you incorporate humor, and how all the OCs seem real! Can't wait for more!
Author's Response: Well, for me it's ver important to incorporate humor, especially if it's a long story like this one. Thanks for the review! Chapter 9 won't take long, I promise.
Lovely! Very "catchy" beginning...I thought this was about a girl named Ariel at first, :). I was pleasantly surprised, however, when I discovered that Ariel was actually a boy. This made much more sense when he was comparing his (relatively identical) body to his mother's.
Author's Response: Well, in the summary it says that he's a boy and the story is under same-sex pairing so.... Thanks for the review!