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Name: XxTheGreyLadyxX (Signed) · Date: 10/29/06 15:38 · For: Spider Hunt
OMG! OMG! OMG! WHAT DID SHE DO???????? *dies* UPDATE SOON PLEEEEEEEEAAAAAASSSSSSSEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Author's Response: I'll try and update as soon as podible. Thanks for the review!

Name: aintcrazy4you (Signed) · Date: 10/28/06 20:47 · For: Spider Hunt
What the heck did she do? I want to know! You better update soon! I love the story!

Author's Response: Wuahahaha, I'm not going to tell you! Thanks for the revies, and I'll try to update as soon as posible.

Name: MaiaMadness (Signed) · Date: 10/28/06 10:17 · For: Spider Hunt
Argh, suspense! Why do you do this to us?

The story is really picking up. I liked the little conversation with Bahir at the end there. Very cute!

Nessa is acting like such a bitch. What has she done now, I wonder? I need to know, damn it!

And Ivy and Christian broke up, huh? And why did she glare at Ariel like that? Is Christian perhaps not as heterosexual as we were led to believe...? And if that is the case, what about Bahir?

Can't wait to read more. darling, this is absolutely wonderfully exciting!

Author's Response: Because I'm evil, Wuahahahaha. You have many many questions and none of which I can answer, I'm afraid. Otherwise I'd ruin the whole thing. Thank you so much for the review!!!

Name: BeautyInTheBreakdown (Signed) · Date: 10/28/06 8:27 · For: Spider Hunt
*sigh* Shall we try this again?

EEEEEE!!! It's been updated!!!! YAY!!! :( Georgia ruined the end of the chapter for me AND stole first review from me... see if I ever tell her when this story is updated again... AatTC is like Christmas for me... and G opened all the presents for me... thanks...

Ahem... anyway. I LOOOOOOOVVEEE! This chapter. A lot... Like a serious amount of serious love for this chapter. Aww Poor Ornella... trying to make things better and makes things worse accidentally. The note was a good idea though. I love it. I Love John. He's my hero. It's so perfect, his one line in there : ) Poor Nessa, with a name litke that... No wonder she turns into Enraged Bitch : D.

*le gasp!!* How could anyone hate Ariel? I never liked Ivy anyway. Whonder why she hates him! Oh, I hope it's something cool like Christian finally realized that he likes Ariel too. Oh! Then there'd be a Christian/Bahir WWF smackdown over who gets Ariel!!!! *squee!* *now who do I want to win?* I am sooooooooo happy that Christian and Ivy broke up. They were rocky from the beginning... it was never going to last. The only reason Christian started dating Ivy was to cover up his mad love for Ariel. Y'all know it.

*this is the part of the story where I took a short break from reading to check out the hot grocery delivery guy *arrowthree* just thought I'd mention that : )*

*facepalm* Nessa, How in the world do you forget your wand when going into the forest?!?!?!? I would be checking to make sure I had it ALL the way down to the forest. Forgetting your wand is something only a girl with a name like Esther could do.

She was on the right track when she gave Borislav attitude when he asked Ariel why he was there... bnut then lost it all when she gave him attitude too... *sigh* give it up, Nessa.

'Stay close to me... it's too dangerous!' Psssh... ya right... what he really means is, ' stay close to me... I want you and the closer we stand, the better my chances of snoging you are!' *teehee* Ariel/Bahir for life : ) It's cute... Bahir being the hero and all. : ) *le sigh* I love this story... did I mention that already? I don't recall...

Borislav, you dumb-butt!!! What the heck!! Are you trying to get killed?!?!?! Go be drunk and/or insane somewhere where Ariel and Bahir AREN't standing close together!

Thank goodness Bahir kows how to kick some spider ass. He saved Ariel's life!!! Ariel owes him... : )

Awww... they're holding hands : ) That's cute. Sure, it's because they're running from spiders, but it's still cute. *arrowthree*

lol... 'ow, my leg... are you gay?' : ) Way to be blunt, Ariel. ARIEL/BAHIR!!! WOOTWOOT! *sigh* I love this chapter... This chapter is better than his date!!! Near-death experiences are always a good place to start a romance : D

'for no reason'?!?!?!??!!! *facepalm* Geeze, Ariel... why not just write 'I love you' all over your face in pen...

'way to ruin the moment' AHAHA... that line is perfect. You have a talent for putting in the perfect lines in the middle of your chapters. And it makes the whole story more amazing.

OOH! Nessa has a secret! How could she do that to Ariel!! Sure, I don't know what she did, but if Ariel is going to hate her, then it's something bad... Maybe she's dating Christian? No... that's not how it sounds... I think she's snogged Bahir. Or maybe she's just snogged Christian... and that's why Ivy is all pissed...? Gah!! Way to leave it as a cliffie!!! Cliffies stink... you seriously need to post the next chapter like... tonight... just because now I need to know what happened.

I love love love this chapter. Like a lot. I think I've said that. This is like Ariel/Bahir chapter to the max... or maybe it just seems that way because Ariel/Bahir is my ship. Can I be their official cheer leader?!?!?! PLEEEAAASE!!!

I hope I didn't forget to put anything that I had last night... I think I have it all though. : D Update soon please, so I don't die of lack-of AatTC.

*prints out* *puts in school bag* *can't wait to read it during Algebra* What better way to tune out the teacher than reading some good Ariel and the Triwizard Cup?

-This has been a review by Gabby-

Author's Response: *hugs gabby* This is such a wonderful review! I think that you and Kiara have started a "who writes the longest review competition" and I love it. *chuckles* *hits Georgia for ruining the ending to Gabby* John is someone hero! I'll let him know that, his selfesteem has been pretty low these days. "I never liked Ivy anyway." geez, I wonder why? She's so nice. "Then there'd be a Christian/Bahir WWF smackdown over who gets Ariel!!!!" ROTFL. I really can't make any comments on that. "Forgetting your wand is something only a girl with a name like Esther could do." *dies laughing* I'm loving this review!!! It was the fact that she was reminded she had an ugly second name that made her forget her wand. Ariel does owe Bahir after that. That's going to play a role later. Everyone keeps asking me about Nessa, but I really can't say anything >.> You can be Ariel/Bahir's ofitial cheerleader. I give you permission :D Thank you so much for the MAGNIFICENT review! *hugs*

Name: Oppungo (Signed) · Date: 10/28/06 8:14 · For: Spider Hunt
My first thought is how can you do this to us? But I'll get to that later. Another excellent chapter - the note passing at the beginning was very funny! I think my favourite was: "She wants to see you try… Please, don’t do it. Have mercy! I’m sitting next to her!" It was a good way to start the chapter - I felt sorry for Ornella, it reminded me a bit of Harry when Ron and Hermione were fighting (all those times! But especially in HBP). I wonder if that's because Ornella is Ron and Hermione's daughter?! (Yes - I'm still trying to coax that information out of you!) Oh, and John's note really made me laugh! "This looks like fun! What are you guys talking about?" He's quite sweet, really. Gosh - how could anyone (except maybe Ivy) describe the note-war as looking like fun?

Whoa - there are so many mysteries in this chapter! What happened between Ivy and Christian? I really would laugh if Ivy had been the one to turn her boyfriend gay - for her own worst enemy! I really liked that paragraph, especially your use of short sentences - "It was hate." - so the impact of it hits as short and sharp, like it did Ariel.

I loved "the avoidance dance" what a great metaphor! Especially as they both did it "gracefully"! Aw, bless Ariel - not being able to hide his happiness that Ivy and Christian broke up! But does he still have feelings for Christian? And it was really sweet that he immediately wanted to tell Nessa, and that he went to return her wand, even though it was dangerous in the Forbidden Forest and he was officially mad at her - I thought that was really nice. I mean, he could have used it to crow over her, embarrass her that she was stranded in the Forbidden Forest without her wand - but he went to help her, even though he didn't have to. I seriously thought that was so sweet.

One of my favourite lines from the whole chapter is "It was a dark starless night, the mist rested over the grounds, and the cold breeze brushed my face." That was just really great description, brilliant at scene setting and a great use of the senses. I really liked that line! I also loved the little anecdotes about Ariel's other trips to the Forest, they were really good - especially, "How were we supposed to know they didn’t like people to pull their tails?"

Oh my gosh - I actually love Ariel and Nessa's friendship! "“Hey! He is my friend. You can’t talk to him like that,” reprimanded Nessa. She turned her head to face me instead and asked, “What are you doing here?”" Okay - that is my favourite line! I actually laughed out loud at that! *giggles* Great cover up, Nessa! "I left it on purpose" Has she been taking lessons from Roonil Wazlib (Harry's nickname!), by any chance?!

Ooh, Jacqueline is catty! Is she friends with Ivy, by any chance? But seriously - all she seems to be able to make are snide comments! (The rivalry between her and Nessa is funny though!) The exchange of glances between Ariel and Bahir were very cute - "That night was very cold, but I started to feel warm inside." That was especially nice! Bless! I really hope that Ariel doesn't get his heart stomped on by Bahir too though....

I am totally intrigued by Bahir - what is his story? He seems to be able to nice to everyone, and incredibly wise - and so mysterious! In fact, I've only read him say something mean once - and that's when I misread Borislav for Bahir - so that doesn't even count! Are we going to be learning more about Bahir soon?

"With its front legs, the spider was pushing what used to be a bird into its mouth" What what used to be a bird - you know, I'm with Ariel on this one - I've suddenly lost my appetite very rapidly... Seriously - is Borislav drunk?! Or just a tad mentally unstable? It did make me laugh that Nessa and Jacqueline stopped bickering to gang up together against Borislav, though!

"My pants, my cloak, my shirt…" I'm going to take a guess that you mean trousers when you say pants instead of underwear - so I'd suggest you change that, unless you want it to be taken a completely different way! Unless you did mean it in that way?!

Urgh - when Borislav said how many he'd killed in that proud way - well, I nearly felt as sick as when that spider ate what used to be a bird. I mean, sure, somethings you have to do - but to be proud of it? "I don’t think the French princess can kill anything other than my appetite" Oh, that made me giggle! But was it because she couldn't or wouldn't?

Oh no - I thought things were going to be sorted between Nessa and Ariel when she offered to help him up - but then he refused. I mean, I know it was nothing against Nessa - but will she see it that way? I know if I was Nessa, I'd probably see it as my attempt at friendship being shoved back in my face.

I thought it was really brave of Ariel to ask Bahir outright whether he was gay or not - definitely his Gryffindor qualities shining through. "He had en expressionless face." You know, that directly reminded me of something that happened only seconds before - "“Fine,” she said with an unreadable expression." Coincidence?

And that ending! I am so intrigued! What were they talking about? Can you at least give us a hint? It either has something to do with Bahir, Christian (which, if you remember, I thought that there might be something between Nessa and Christian in one of the first chapters) or something completely unexpected! But which one is it? None of the above? You'll have to update soon so that we can find out!

Author's Response: *hugs* Have I ever told you how much I love your reviews? Because I do! I knew I wanted to have a 'note" scene somewhere in the fic, because I always did that in school, heck, I'm still doing it. "I wonder if that's because Ornella is Ron and Hermione's daughter?!" You would really like to know, don't you? I'll be evil!author once again and leave you hanging. hehe. "But does he still have feelings for Christian?" This is a hard question to answer, I think you'll find out in the following chapters. "It was a dark starless night, the mist rested over the grounds, and the cold breeze brushed my face." It's weird that you liked that line because it was a ladt minute add. I didn't have much setting, so I put it in there. Jacqueline can be catty, but she's no where near Ivy's level, and they are not friends. You'll see later why. You'll be learning more about Bahir, don't you worry. He'll be uncovered. I always forget to use trousers instead of pants. I have to keep that in mind. And no, I didn't mean the underwear. Nessa would've been offended by Ariel rejecting her help to stand up, in normal sircumstances, but she already felt guilty for what she had done earlier.....Bahir's and Nessa's expression were a coincidence, I wouldn't read to much into it. I'll try to update as soon as posible. Thank you soooo much for this review!!!!

Name: DreamingOfRon (Signed) · Date: 10/28/06 0:02 · For: Spider Hunt
*huge gasp*
nessa totally hooked up with cristian, didn't she!!! omg i can't wait!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Author's Response: >.> I'm not telling.

Name: DreamingOfRon (Signed) · Date: 10/27/06 23:59 · For: Spider Hunt
*I'M* dying with suspense!!!!!!!

what are they talking about!!!!

Author's Response: *sighs* I wished I knew too.

Name: 90glassslippers (Signed) · Date: 10/27/06 22:35 · For: Spider Hunt
Oh No! Did Nessa hook up with Bahir... or Christian?

Author's Response: LOL, she snogged with Ivy!

Name: BeautyInTheBreakdown (Signed) · Date: 10/27/06 22:05 · For: Spider Hunt
NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!! I typed an amazingly good and long review and since I put a little heart with an arrow it all got deleted!!! *cries* I'll retype it later when it's not 11:04 at night. : ( *cries again* I spent an hour typing that review... *le sigh*

Author's Response: *hugs gabby* I've been there. I know it's very furstrating, but hang in there. I'll wait for your review :)

Name: BeautyInTheBreakdown (Signed) · Date: 10/27/06 22:02 · For: Spider Hunt
EEEEEE!!! It's been updated!!!! YAY!!! :( Georgia ruined the end of the chapter for me AND stole first review from me... see if I ever tell her when this story is updated again... AatTC is like Christmas for me... and G opened all the presents for me... thanks...

Ahem... anyway. I LOOOOOOOVVEEE! This chapter. A lot... Like a serious amount of serious love for this chapter. Aww Poor Ornella... trying to make things better and makes things worse accidentally. The note was a good idea though. I love it. I

Author's Response: The beginning og it was really good! Don't do <3 because that breaks the review for some reason.

Name: dancergirl117 (Signed) · Date: 10/27/06 20:58 · For: Spider Hunt
oooohh!! PLEASE CONTINUE WITH THIS STORY!! I can't get it out of my head.

Poor Ornella, getting caught in the middle...I sympathize..

Author's Response: No, I'm going to leave it here with the cliffhanger. Wuahahha. *kidding* I love writing this story, of course I'll keep it up.

Name: pookie_pie (Signed) · Date: 10/27/06 20:50 · For: Spider Hunt
Harald! You're genius! But damn you and your stupid cliffhangers! Agh! I wanna read more... :'( I'm going to start all over again now, because it's so good. Poor Ornella, getting stuck in the middle. Poor Ariel, for getting the bad end of Nessa. Poor Nessa, having a name like Esther... it's a cruel world...

You can't leave when you finish AatTC! We'd miss you too much!
Keep up the good work, and tell your beta they're soooo lucky!
--Georgia (this is my alternative name)

Author's Response: Wow, I didn't know you liked it so much. *is happy* I'll put more effort into the chapters from now on. "Poor Nessa, having a name like Esther..." That made me laugh so much! Thanks for the review!

Name: BeautyInTheBreakdown (Signed) · Date: 10/20/06 18:23 · For: The First Task
Love the chapter, of course. That's hardly worth saying anymore because you should know by now. But simply because I know every author likes to hear it, I'm in love with this story. : D It's amazing and all that jazz like that. The only bad thing about it is that you take so long to update!!

I think I'm siding with Ariel on this one. I can totally see both sides. Nessa has a valid reason to be mad too. But if I went on a date, it wouldn't matter how busy my friends are, they're going to hear about it immediately. Not a week later.

OMG... the third person-ness... If I knew someone who constantly spoke in third person, I think I'd kill them...

Awww... poor Ariel... He's trying so hard to make up with Nessa... and he just fails miserably with the sign. At least he tried... It's just a silly letter...

AHAHAHAHA... squirrels! And Eggs?? HAHAHAHAHA... people... honestly... Of course they lay eggs!!! *kidding*

Awww... I have faith in Bahir... he's not lying about not knowing about the Troll thing... I hope... If he was just trying to throw her off... then Ariel/Bahir is so through in my book!!!

Hmmm... well that was my review. I jumped around a bit... hope it makes at east a little bit of sense. This story is amazing and you'd have to have mushed bananas for brains not to like it. That is ll for now. Oh ya, and UPDATE SOON!!! Tell Lys to hurry it up :D


~This has been a review by Gabby~

Author's Response: LOL, I like your reviews XD They're funny. And you're right an author likes when people say they love his/her story. So, you're siding with Ariel? He's very glad that you're doing so. hehehe, I think I'd kill Mr. Wimund if he was real too. He's just too annoying. Well, of course squirrels lay eggs! That's the point of the joke! You jumped around, but I liked it anyways. I love the fact that you printed the chapter and took it to school. XD I'll try and update as fast as I can. Thanks for the fab review!!!

Name: Oppungo (Signed) · Date: 10/18/06 12:26 · For: The First Task
First of all, I'm sorry it's taken me so long to review this chapter! I loved it though, and I'll try to be quicker with the next one! Ooh - lots of confrontation in this one - lovely! Yes, I'm mean - but it's fun!

My one nitpick would be: "She looked beat " as you refer to 'beat' as in being tired. I would consider that an Americanism, as I don't think I've ever heard anyone say that around where I live - it's certainly not an expression me or my friends would use. However, it may be different in different places, but I'd suggest you change it.

I also found it a bit repetitive in those few lines, as Nessa basically reiterates what Ariel was thinking, about her being 'beat' and in need of a good sleep. I'd recommend you rephrase that so that it's not as repetitive, but that's just me being nitpicky!

I found myself completely torn on the issue between Ariel and Nessa - it's like being the person in the middle, you can see both sides. I did think Nessa was a bit harsh with Ariel's "queer-drama" as she put it - but then he hadn't been very supportive of her. Again - I can see both sides!

"Each word slapped me in the face." I loved that sentence, it was brilliant imagery and a great line. The use of short sentences at that point were great at showing how Ariel felt at the time - overwhelmed and upset at everything. Bless!

I loved how you worked in a little anecdote about John catching the Snitch - thinking it was a bird! That gave us some more insight which was definitely interesting, as we don't know too much about John.

It was great to see Mr. Wimund again - more Ariel, after the "innumerable annoying comments from John" he has to put up with the third person references of his ex-girlfriend's father! It really wasn't his day, was it? And then Christian and Ivy appear! I bet Ariel really wished he could Disapperate - and that you could Disapperate on Hogwarts grounds, of course!

*Actually laughs out loud* - “Do squirrels lay eggs?” Oh. My. Gosh. And you actually had someone say that to you?! Although I once had someone ask me if London was the capital city of England. Yes, I live in England. Yes, I only live about 2 or 3 hours away from London. Yes, the person in question was in one of my classes at school. Yes, it was really funny!

Ornella fancies Borislav? Do I sense history repeating itself? (Hermione and Viktor, Ornella and Borislav?! Which would mean Ornella is Hermione and Ron's daughter - which is a hint for you to tell us, yes!) Oh dear, poor Ariel - his attempts to make up with Nessa (the sign) only made things worse! I can sympathise with Nessa, though, I get annoyed when people spell my name wrong too!

*Giggles* I like Ariel's translation of French - probably tres precis aussi! I also liked how Nessa went to help Jacqueline when she fell in the lake, very Gryffindorish of her - and how Jacqueline was faking - very Triwizard Tournamentish of her! Gosh - Bahir was impressive! I loved how you wrote that scene, I really felt like I was there watching in the stands too.

(There is also more use of 'beat' when describing how Nessa and Jacqueline got back from the task) Aww, I can't believe Nessa came last! That probably isn't going to help matters between her and Ariel. I'm also quite intrigued by Jacqueline now, and am really keen to learn more about her!

"I had followed Nessa and was going to try and stop her, until I realized that anything that touched her in that moment would suffer a very painful death." Ooh, that made me giggle! And was very accurate I can assume too! But oh no - Ariel has to choose between his best friend and his (nearly?) boyfriend - what on earth is he going to do? Although it sounds like he's already make his decision, I'm guessing it won't be as easy to put it into practise.

I loved the last line, it was very effective and definitely leaves me longing for the next chapter, I hope it's up soon! Great job!

Author's Response: Yay!!!! A Kiara review!!! *squeeee* I don't mind if you take long to review, as long as you do *innocent eyes* Sorry about the "beat" thing, I didn't know it was an americanism. I thought everyone used it. I'll go fix it. I love that a british reads my story that way I know f there is something that shouldn't belong there. I'm haooy that you see Nessa's side of things. I thought people wouldn't do it because she was being so extremist and because everyone likes Ariel so much. I like John's anecdote a lot too, it shows a lot of his personality. He's going to be more included in future chapters. “Do squirrels lay eggs?” Yes, someone did ask me that. Believe it or not. I almost had a heart attack when they did. It happened a long time ago, but then I remembered it and I thought that it was something that Berenice would ask. And I can't believe someone made you that London question. Who said Ornella is Ron and Hermione's daughter? You'll learn more about Jacqueline in the future. Hmmm, I don't want to spoil things for you, but the situation between Ariel, Bahir, and Nessa will be very complicated. Chapter 12, is with Lys (my lovely beta) so it shouldn't take long before it's out. Tanks for the FANTASTIC review! I believe this is the longest one you've made. XD

Name: 90glassslippers (Signed) · Date: 10/15/06 1:17 · For: The First Task
Wow! Nessa is being selfish and immature! Friend are supossed to be ther for each other and cummunicate. OMG Mr. Wimud is phsyco! Why DOES he talk like that! He is annoying and very entertaining! Bahir...I still don't trust him.

Author's Response: Yes, Nessa is being selfish, but she's going to realize what she's doing. Mr. Wymund is not a psyco...he's just a little strange... Thanks for the review!

Name: XxTheGreyLadyxX (Signed) · Date: 10/07/06 13:54 · For: The First Task
I'd just like to say how totally in love with this story I am. I can't WAIT for chapter 12!

Author's Response: Thank you! It is really nice to know what people think. I'll try to have chapter 12 up as soon as posible.

Name: Gemma Hawk (Signed) · Date: 10/03/06 10:38 · For: The First Task
oooh... another wonderful chapter! I loved this one, so much! I sympathize with all your characters, even Ivy. The line: "Do squirrels lay eggs?" will seriously stay with me till my days end. This is just awesome!

I absolutely love how everything just gets worse and worse for Ariel! First Mr. Wimund, then Ivy+Christian, then Taylor, then Nessa wants to kill him... I feel sorry for him!

I love this story so much! Keep writing!


Author's Response: Nora!! *huggles* you're not supposed to feel sorry for Ivy!!! She's the villain!! Kidding, you can sympathize with whomever you want. I'm glad you liked thw squirrels line, it actually happened in real lif >.> I'll keep writing. Thank you so much for the review!

Name: arbee (Signed) · Date: 10/01/06 10:34 · For: The First Task
he spelled her name wrong?! i would be mad too.

Author's Response: He was nervous, is understandable! Thanks for the review

Name: aintcrazy4you (Signed) · Date: 09/30/06 14:06 · For: The First Task
Poor Ariel. Poor Nessa. *snicker* Though it was funny that she studied Trolls for the whole week and she didn't have to. *silently giggles* And when Ariel thought Oops.... I couldn't stop laughing! That was just to hilarious! Now Bahir....he seems like a nice guy but Idk....he's to mysteries but I still love him! Keep up the good work! And let's conga for your great chapter and story! *congas*

Author's Response: *does the conga* I'm happy you found the Trolls part funny, it was suposed to make people laugh. It seems that everyone is interested in Bahir. I won't say anything. Thanks for the review! *conga*

Name: tc015 (Signed) · Date: 09/30/06 13:32 · For: The First Task
Wow. I loved it. Poor Ariel, though. I'm a little curious about Bahir. Another great chapter.

Author's Response: We're all curious about Bahir >.> Thanks for the review!

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