Reviews For Finally in Love
Reviewer: brokenhearted
Date: 05/17/06 12:29
Chapter: Finally in Love (one-shot)

Um, I don't know about this. I mean, she likes the one guy and hates James. Then suddenly (I mean the very minute she breaks up with the other guy) she loves James. Isn't that a little fast?

Author's Response: ya its fast, but i mostly write poetry so thats kinda more my thing. THANK YOU for reviewing!!!!!!!!!! youre awesome!!!!!!!!!!!!

Reviewer: WannaBeMrsRonWeasly
Date: 05/12/06 16:19
Chapter: Finally in Love (one-shot)

I don't know why people don't leave reviews for your story. It's a great one! I like the way Lily lightened up to James at the end, it made it very sweet. Good job!

Author's Response: Thank you sooooooo sooooo much!!!!!!!!! You just made my day! Thanks for reviewing!!!!!

Reviewer: TheFlashOfGreen
Date: 05/07/06 17:24
Chapter: Finally in Love (one-shot)

I liked it, but they got together too soon. It made it seem like she was having emotional problems and was looking for comfort from James. I still think its really good, though.

Author's Response: thanks! ya im still a little inexperienced at writing and sometmes i move too fast, so im trying to take my time on the stories im working on now. thanks so much for reviewing!!!!!!!!

Reviewer: Hermione Granger I
Date: 02/01/06 22:33
Chapter: Finally in Love (one-shot)

Hello there Hilly Willy. (cough wonka) I must say that I agree it was a little bit rushed. Next time try to get the story over a few chapters. Very good story plot. Nice work.

Author's Response: thank you shirley........whirly hehe ya i reread it and i agree with everyone, thx for reviewing!

Reviewer: jamesnlilyforever
Date: 01/29/06 19:37
Chapter: Finally in Love (one-shot)

Hmm, I agree with harry_potter_star... I think it was a bit rushed. But overall, it was a pretty good fic. I know that one-shots are generally short but maybe a little bit more detail would make it better. I hope to read more of your stories soon!

Author's Response: thank you!

Reviewer: jamesnlilyforever
Date: 01/29/06 19:37
Chapter: Finally in Love (one-shot)

Hmm, I agree with harry_potter_star... I think it was a bit rushed. But overall, it was a pretty good fic. I know that one-shots are generally short but maybe a little bit more detail would make it better. I hope to read more of your stories soon!

Author's Response: thank you!

Reviewer: harry_potter_star
Date: 01/28/06 20:19
Chapter: Finally in Love (one-shot)

Ok, time for some constructive critism lol Sorry, but it just seemed a little rushed, like one second she loves Craig, the next hes drunk and kisses another girl, Lily gets "heartbroken" and nicks off to kiss James Potter. It just, sort of, sounded like she was doing that to make herself feel better as opposed to actually being in love with him. Good writing style though. :)

Author's Response: ok thank you, i'll keep that in mind for my next one

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