Jo would never begin with Harry and his 2 friends at Godric's Hollow but I like how you set up the whole beginning. Nice work
A portrait of Sirious...a nice idea to think about.
This is something I would like Jo to answer in Deathly Hallows. WHY Dumbledore trusted Snape. Your writing skills are extraordinary and I admire you for being able to write so well.
wow... i'd give anything to see this fic finished! pretty please?!
I'm a littel confuzzled but what begining of a story isn't?it seems like a good begining though.
this is a really great story. i think its a great opening and i like that harry lupin and tonks found sirius' portrait. great idea
wow, what a creepy atmosphere - you captured it so well. i like the idea of godric's hollow being deserted, i don't think i've read a fic that presents it that way before. also like how you managed to capture the other little character details without going off the point. this is one of my most looked-forward to parts of book 7, so i'm drawn to your interpretation...though i'd like to read more. one criticism would have to be...what about the wedding?! it comes first!
lol, i liked the ending. how would narcissa get into the house though? i doubt the order would be dumb enough to leave a way open, and even if they did surely the secret keeper...oh wait, that was AD...does it end if he dies? that would make sense. if so, then the story is really good...but worrying i would say, if voldy knows!
oh my god, amazing. why? why? can we know too, please? excellent writing. the mcgonagall bit was a bit farfetched, considering she made it all the way to privet drive i'd expect her to do more than mumble as she left!!! you got alot in though, and the start was v funny. all in all, a great first chapter. a deserved win
r u sure ur not jk rowling cause u write like she does 2 bad its only a one shot
erm, right... it's good and all, but it's kinda, well... confusing! i understand it, and all, ut it's the way you describe the more main parts of the story... well, i feel that congradulations is one of the many thing i would like to tell you, although dont want to waste my breath. good luck on further stories! ~roze
oooooo, that's good stuff. can't wait for the rest.
omgosh, that's so amazing, it actually sounds like JK is writing it herself. please, write more soon.
omgosh, that's so amazing, it actually sounds like JK is writing it herself. please, write more soon.
oooooo, that's good stuff. can't wait for the rest.
this is well thought out and i love it. it's really good. i can't wait for more!
