Reviews For Inside the Minds
Reviewer: Luna_dreamer
Date: 05/22/08 16:30
Chapter: At the Quidditch World Cup

I love this story. It's just a quick story.

Reviewer: seeker_123
Date: 11/29/07 16:23
Chapter: At the Quidditch World Cup

teriffic

Reviewer: seeker_123
Date: 11/29/07 16:23
Chapter: At the Quidditch World Cup

teriffic

Reviewer: Aurum Dormio
Date: 04/17/07 18:07
Chapter: At the Quidditch World Cup

lol, very good. but i dont think it should be a one shot. change the scene in the forest a bit, where ron goes off for a bit and leaves harry and hermione alone...

Author's Response: brilliant idea... oh dear, if I ever get around to writing it... I'm sorry I haven't updated since posting, but... oh who am I kidding? I'm a lazy litle bum, forgive me?

Reviewer: darmy
Date: 03/31/07 5:39
Chapter: At the Quidditch World Cup

quite odd but i cant say much i argue with meself like that a lot

Reviewer: Ron x Hermione
Date: 03/28/07 19:48
Chapter: At the Quidditch World Cup

This was a cute third/fourth year one-shot. It's nice how you've incorporated in this missing moment into a fan fiction.

I feel that you could have had quite a bit more description, though. Even if you had described the campsite, and Ginny and Hermione's surroundings a bit more, it would have made the reader much more aware of what time period this was, where they were exactly, and quite a few other things. In this sentence:

A blurry green firework streaked across the canvas surface.

-you've really incorporated description here, and I really loved this sentence because I could actually see Ginny and Hermione looking up at their tent and seeing a green firework shadowing across their tent. Great work on that!

The word no flashed through my subconscious before the rest of me could catch up.

I think that you need to have quotations around the "no" in this sentence. Or, you could have meant "word now". Either way, it would have fit.

I feel that the way you've portrayed Hermione's emotions in the last part was quite childish, just as you had described earlier. I was a bit confused as to if she were fighting with Ginny in her mind, or just fighting with an odd voice in the back of her head, telling her that Harry was better for her rather than Ginny. It was kind of *thinks up word* different seeing as how you've portrayed Hermione as someone who is "fighting" with Ginny in her mind over a boy. I sure hope that that doesn't destroy their friendship in later chapters.

So back off, Gin, he’s mine.

Ha ha, I thought that this was a great sentence. It shows the conflict between the two over Harry, though, Ginny doesn’t really know if Hermione likes him or not. It’s quite comical how you’ve written that last part. Even though you used “Gin” (I feel that this is an awkward nickname), it still was a wonderful addition to your story.

I do really like how they are conflicting over Harry. You’ve got a great plot here! Great work, and I do hope to see more from you.

~ Lindsey

Reviewer: weasley_is_my_king8
Date: 07/23/06 13:32
Chapter: At the Quidditch World Cup

lol wow that was really cool how u did that! i honestly think ginny should just give up on Harry and let Hermione have a go! lol i'm rambling a bit but who cares? lol keep it up and awesome story!

WIMK8
Abbey

Reviewer: mavry
Date: 07/11/06 23:02
Chapter: At the Quidditch World Cup

aww good job, its really cute but funny too

Reviewer: mystiquefire
Date: 05/29/06 12:18
Chapter: At the Quidditch World Cup

that was really cute and funny. and i completely agree with EVERYTHING you said about HBP. Harry, Ron, and Hermione all all seem so out of character in book 6.

Reviewer: KoolGirl
Date: 01/31/06 22:08
Chapter: At the Quidditch World Cup

that was kool. I can picture Hermione talking to herself like that. I like your stories! Continue writing!

Reviewer: lilyevans91
Date: 01/27/06 13:22
Chapter: At the Quidditch World Cup

ha! i loved the ending, i loved the whole thing! i'm pretty much a shipper for everybody, i guess (except slash...*shudder*) and this was very original. good job!

Author's Response: thanks- it's good to know someone besides H/Hr shippers like this story!

Reviewer: HPAndHG4ever
Date: 01/23/06 23:31
Chapter: At the Quidditch World Cup

Please update soon!! I really like both of your stories. I would think about making your other one longer, because I know it would be great. And I'm sure people will love it. But if you can't it's o.k. zjust update this one soon! P.S. I thought HPB was way too short. People would have totally read a longer version.

Author's Response: IT WILL BE AT LEAST A FEW WEEKS BEFORE I UPDATE. Sorry, it's just my *grr* geometry teacher piles on homework like no tomorrow. Yes, it's like, "JO! GET THIS THROUGH YOUR FREAKING HEAD! WE LIKE WHAT YOU WRITE!!! OR WE DID, BEFORE *EVILEVILEVIL* GINNY GOT A FREAKING BARBIE MAKEOVER AND SET A MOSTER LOOSE IN HARRY'S CHEST!!!!"

Reviewer: Hokey
Date: 01/22/06 16:18
Chapter: At the Quidditch World Cup

Oh, how sweet! =) I can totally see Hermione arguing with herself like that...actually, I find myself in that situation quite often. That's what's so brilliant with this fic, you portray Hermione as a completely regular girl! Anyways, I thought it was really cute, though I was kind of sad that it was so short and one-shot. I hope you decide to continue with it! Yay for H/Hr! =D

Author's Response: I agree with you- two people fighting inside me... *bangs head on wall* GETOUTGETOUTGETOUT! *glances around* Yes, I took my medication... jk, people. I'm starting to work on the rest of the story- but it'll be a while... stay tuned... and thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: Waddiwasi chik
Date: 01/21/06 20:36
Chapter: At the Quidditch World Cup

Loved this fic, too bad it couldn't go on into something more. You characterized hermione really well, something that I can't completely figure out. Dont give up hope - I used to hate HBP... but do you really think that JKR sat down and thought "Hey, Hermione loves Ron, and I'm going to proove it by showing her attacking him with birds!" (R/Hr shippers are sure that attacking people with birds is the deepest sign of affection) JKR knows what she's doing... she's getting them comfortable (R/Hr shippers) and then she's going to surprise us all... I personally cant wait. JKR understands people, it's not like she wrote the first five books, then suddenly forgot! But don't give up hope! I'm keeping my fingers crossed!

Author's Response: *thank you form the bottom of my heart* You give me hope, chicky! *hug* ...and I might continue on this story- but it would be a LOOONG while (months) before I would finish it and send it in. Thank you for reviewing, making me laugh, and giving me hope!

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