Reviews For Darkest Year Yet
Reviewer: Binka Fudge
Date: 05/13/08 18:14
Chapter: Halloween

Just thought i'd post a quick review before reading the remaining chapters. I loved the scene between Snape and Nicky during the first potions class, she was so funny. And it was hilarious in this chapter when the trio kept completing Malfoy's sentences. Can't wait to find out Nicky's secret.

Reviewer: Pirate Fanatic
Date: 02/26/07 9:31
Chapter: Back to Hogwarts

Dialogue is too bland and you use "asked" and "said" too often. Try to find other words to replace them. Also, the "fight" between Harry/Voldy is one of the lamest ones I've read. So sorry but that is SUPER OOC Voldy...same for Harry.

Reviewer: Pirate Fanatic
Date: 02/26/07 9:26
Chapter: Nightmares, friends, Owlís and Birthdays

Peter that RAT TRAITOR!!! I thought Sirius would have burned all the pictures with Peter by now!!! Also, it's Madame Pomfrey

Reviewer: Pirate Fanatic
Date: 02/26/07 9:20
Chapter: Meeting of four good old friends

Short chapter and the ending was took quick. Ginny, Ron, and Hermione didn't really express any emotion(s) about the prophecy and acted like it's no big deal.

Reviewer: Pirate Fanatic
Date: 02/26/07 9:18
Chapter: Alone

Excellent beginning! Just enough stuff to get a good story plot started.

Reviewer: BloodRayne
Date: 10/13/05 19:29
Chapter: Alone

Well...I think it's poorly written. Your tenses are mixed up and well, "a mean and cruel world"? come on... I don't really mean to be rude or horrible at all, I'm just giving my opinion. Feel free to ignore it.

Reviewer: usdragonflies
Date: 05/18/05 5:44
Chapter: Nightmares, friends, Owlís and Birthdays

i would have to agree that so far the story does seem very impersonal. it could be me, but it also seems as though your in a hurry to write your story. maybe if you'd slow down it woul turn out a little more...umm whats the word...cozy?

Author's Response: Okay! I'll keep that in mind as I write my next story. Thanks!

Reviewer: padfootprongs4eva
Date: 04/04/05 2:10
Chapter: A time for answers

great story. some things werent really realistic to me, but it was all good.

Author's Response: Hmm...I see what you mean. I'll try to make them more realistic. Thanks for the review.

Reviewer: StarryNight
Date: 01/21/05 17:57
Chapter: A time for answers

I will be looking for the sequel.

Author's Response: Good. It's coming soon. Thanks for the review.

Reviewer: lipiana
Date: 01/20/05 22:07
Chapter: A time for answers

that was a really crumby ending.. but thats just one girls opinion. If it were a bit more detailed and heart-touching, it would be a better ending^^ and also you said that the ending would explain Nikki or w/e her name was, and her deal. The ending just repeated stuff already said in the story, so it didnt really say much. It was still an okay story in the end though^^

Author's Response: Thank you. I'm sad that this is the end though. Maybe it was a tad bit crumby ending, oh well we learn from our mistakes. Thanks for the review.

Reviewer: School owl
Date: 01/20/05 8:53
Chapter: A death and a final battle

Wow. I've been really trying to get the last chapter out for you guys, but it's not easy. I try soon.

Author's Response: Once again. I'm still trying to get this next chapter into place. Oh, I made a mistake, I said 'I try soon' It's supposed to be 'I'll try soon'. So, I'm trying.

Reviewer: HarrysAunt
Date: 01/19/05 16:25
Chapter: Promises

I am confused: In Chapter 7, you said Nicky said her father was a muggle. In Chapter 9 during the section labeled FLASHBACK, you wrote that Nicky heard a Pop and ran inside. While she was talking to her father, he pulled out his wand. In reality, shouldn't she be a half-blood? Dang.. I sure hope she gets to do something about Malfoy. Doesn't he know that Voldemort is a Half-blood and not a Pureblood? Voldemort reminds me of Hitler. He hated Jews because his mother was one. Voldemort hated Muggles because his father was one. It would be cool if one of his precious Death Eaters or one of the other characters would confront him about that fact. Otherwise, you have a good story going.

Author's Response: Ha. Silly me, I must have made a mistake. Nicky's father was a wizard and Nicky's mother was a muggle. I guess I wasn't paying attention. She is half blooded. Malfoy is dumb, I doubt that he know's his own name much less that Voldemort is a half blood. Yes, I also think of Voldemort as a Hitler. They were both evil. I'm going to fix my errors now. Thanks for your review.

Reviewer: lipiana
Date: 01/17/05 0:49
Chapter: A death and a final battle

This story is not yet completed. It isnt?

Author's Response: No, it isn't done because I am having trouble submiting the final chapter. Thanks for the review.

Reviewer: School owl
Date: 01/15/05 17:08
Chapter: Halloween

Hey, this is me, school owl. Could you please give me a review? Thanks. You guys (and girls) rock!!

Author's Response: Hey, it's me. Again. How are you all doing? That's good. Well, could you maybe review? Thanks.

Reviewer: lipiana
Date: 01/13/05 18:00
Chapter: A death and a final battle

Moopie DOES have a point about the grammar.. but as I said, just because it doesn't match JKR's series too well, doesn't mean it isnt a good story. My main concerns is that you rush through the intense parts of the story, and don't add many details. But, it is a very creative story! I always have a hard time writing stories (Not fanfics).

Author's Response: I see what you all are saying. I may rush a bit and I may not have purfect grammer, but you get the point. Thanks for the review.

Reviewer: kneazle
Date: 01/13/05 12:36
Chapter: A death and a final battle

please bring nicky back she is such a good person i wanted to cry when YOU (lol) killed her

Author's Response: You have a point. How did you know? That's for the sequel. Opps. Don't listen to me. Thanks for the review.

Reviewer: Moopie
Date: 01/13/05 5:00
Chapter: A death and a final battle

First of all, Iíd like to make it clear that I was not offended in any way. The reason I reviewed and left constructive criticism was because I do think that you could be a very good writer and wanted to help. After reading your response, though, it sounds like that you didnít even really read or understand my review. There most certainly *are* errors in your fic - spelling, grammar and punctuation errors. Iíll send you an email with some examples. It sounds like youíre depending on spell check to catch them all, which is a very big mistake. The canon characters are all acting massively *out* of character. Thereís no way Severus Snape would *ever* tolerate a student speaking to him in a disrespectful manner, for example. Iím not even going to touch the portrayal of Voldemort, except to say that it *wasnít* Voldemort. Itís true that fanfic is about exploring the possibilities within the world that the original author has created, which means that characters may act in a different manner than in canon. However, if the canon characters are not acting at all like themselves, then what is the point of writing fanfic? You might as well write an original story. It sounds like you donít really understand what a Mary Sue is. Do an online search for the definition (itís a little long and would take up too much room to go into here). If you say that thereís an explanation for Nicole in the following chapter, though, then Iíll wait and read it before commenting further. You do need a beta reader to go over your work before posting it.

Author's Response: Okay. No comment. I know you want the next chapter, but mugglenet doesn't seem to be working. Relax. Maybe I do make some grammer errors and my characters are a little different, but I like it the way it is and I am glad that you don't take any of this personally. Thanks for the review.

Reviewer: lipiana
Date: 01/12/05 21:32
Chapter: Nightmares, friends, Owlís and Birthdays

I meant when Dumbledore said "Voldemort always wins!" It kinda scared me O.o He sounded like a little boy rather than and old man, but the story got better^^

Author's Response: Yes, the story got better, then it got worse. Thanks for the review.

Reviewer: Zetera
Date: 01/12/05 10:58
Chapter: A death and a final battle

I'm afraid I must agree completley with Moopie. Still, if you worked on the kinks in your story, you could have something truly amazing.

Author's Response: Thank you. I think that it's okay, but thank you so much.

Reviewer: Moopie
Date: 01/12/05 8:30
Chapter: A death and a final battle

o_O... Well, I don't know what happened to my paragraph breaks. My review has shown up as one big block of text, which is most annoying. Sorry about that!

Author's Response: That's okay. Thanks for reviewing.

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