I loved this first chapter, it's odd but no matter how many marauder fics i read theres never two alike. This was such a fresh approach, I like the fact that Remus warned Lily of James appointment to Head Boy so now she's not shocked or angry, just resigned to it. Also, I wasn't sure if Petunia and Lily were friends, thought perhaps Lily still loved her sister despite Petunia's treatment, but perhaps your way is nicer. I thought perhaps Petunia could start hating magic when it killed their parents in a death eater attack or something, I'll just have to wait and see when you post the next chapter, hint hint. please make it soon.
actually.... it was a mutual hate. but she rly hated her after their parents died, but great story
actually.... it was a mutual hate. but she rly hated her after their parents died, but great story
Great start, I hope to see more soon...*hint* You balance the dialogue and story/descriptive writing/other paragraphs (i really don't know what to call it) very well. :)
Please update soon! I love the thought of Lily's friends plotting.
Author's Response: hey there! thanks so much for your review! but...I have discontinued this version of the story. I'm sorry! however, I have rewritten it under the same name at the unknowable room. the third chapter of the new version should be up soon. thank you again!
I liked that but I don't really like the 'Lily' part with her friends.
Very nice, Remus is so sweet at knowing how Jamesie feels... Update soon!
I'm hear to say that I don't mind the incessant perkiness of girly girls at all (as I am one =P). Excellent beginning! I'm adding this story to my favourites list and I can't wait to read the next chapter. Lots of love and hugs Fairiesandcream P.S. I think I'm a bit hyper today don't you?
Author's Response: awww! thanks so much! I love signing in and finding reviews! It makes my day!
That's actually really good! I can't wait for an update.
Author's Response: thanks! chapters two and three are in queue!
Hi! It's looking really good! If you don't mind some constructive criticism, maybe you could tone down the girls', um...girly-ness. It's kind of tiring to have to read "oh my gosh!" at the beginning of every chapter with Lily and her friends in it. It's really great, though, I love it, don't get me wrong! Please don't hate me!
Author's Response: thanks for the review! and i LOVE constructive criticism. i'll tone it down, i promise.
Yeah, Bridget reminded me of the Bridge from the Sisterhood. Well, this is a really good fic so far! Update soon!
Author's Response: thanks for the review. ch. 2 is in queue, and ch.3 has been sent to my lovely beta!
Aw, that's really cute! Did you get inspiration for Brigit from the Sisterhood of the Traveling Pants Bridget? 'Cuz she was seriously reminding me of her, lol. Well, congrats on a good first chapter! 10 :)
Author's Response: Yeah, my Brigit did come from the Sisterhood's Bridget. However, I hope she'll be a little different. If she behaves herself. Thank you for the review!
