That was awesome. you went into just enough detail to make me say ew, you wrote that but not enough detail to make me stop reading! it just got me hooked. awesome!
please update soon great job :)
that was so passionate
soooooooooo sweet loved it so on my favs list!!
I LOVE IT! write more!!
sooo good really a great read PLEASE PLEASE UPDATE
That was really somthing.But i think you could have done better
I do like your story, do you plan to write more?
I like your story very much. I look forward to reading more!!!!
That was a fun and well written story. I look forward to see where it goes. Maybe ending with a little love and marriage?
spiffy!!!! i love the story, its so passionate! your a brilliant writer! so, i need to get the next bloody chapter!!!!!
awesome! can't wait for the next chapter
its very good. cant ait for the next chapter!
i really liked this story. hope you write the rest of the chapters soon xD.. i'll be waiting
This would make a great one-shot!! Can't wait to see whee you take this story.