it was an intresting chap. and that huffelpuff joke; i loved it. please, PLEASE, write more.....please!
AWESOME! WELL WRITTEN! UPDATE!
* Sorry for CAPS abuse =) *
Author's Response: I like caps, they make you seem enthusiastic. Thanks for the input!
EVANgeline..... haha nice.... it has evan in it. i think she should add more anticipation to ur story, so tat the readers wont get bored n jus quit. but its a great start
Author's Response: Haha, I noticed more that it has "angel" in it. Thanks for the comment. I will try to make it more exciting whenever I get around to writing the next chapter.
i do like this but...maybe you should lighten up on james' idiocy...you know he should be able to tell lily isnt telling him the truth...maybe put in a part where lily sees him and evangewhatsit kissing and runs away crying and he follows her or evangewhatsherface decides that lily is nice and doesnt want to go out with james anymore...
Author's Response: Thanks for the suggestions! While I am considering your points, I have some to make of my own. Firstly, even if James suspects that Lily is not being completely honest with him about her feelings, she has shown no indication over the numerous years that he has been chasing her that she will ever act on them. James has made his feelings clear to Lily and has pursued her openly for years. She, in turn, has been nice to him enough times to count on one hand. James is exasperated, and does not want to wish his entire teenagehood pining over one girl. I think that it is actually healthy for him to try to pursue another relationship (even though the candidate for said relationship may not be the best choice). Secondly, I do not actually think that evangewhatsit would care one ounce whether Lily is nice or not. Would you break up with your boyfriend/girlfriend just because you suspected that someone nice might like them? Also, evangewhatsherface is neither a considerate, nor a compassionate person, and would hardly do something so selfless for someone she is hardly acquainted with.
Author's Response: It's been a really long time since I wrote that response, and rereading it now, I see that it seems a wee bit defensive. I really did appreciate your criticism, sorry if it came off a little hostile. I was just trying to respond to your points. :)
I like it. The plot isn't very original, but I still enjoy reading it because you've definitely made it your own. I'm looking forward to more!
Author's Response: Thanks very much for your comment!Unfortunately, it doesn't look as if more will be coming. I wrote this story mostly just to amuse my younger sister, and I don't think I'll continue. I hope no one is too disappointed. I truly do appreciate all of the kind comments!
I love it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! WRITE MORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Author's Response: Hey, thanks a lot. The next chapter is done and just needs to be fixed up a bit. It should be up soon.
Hoorah, I new chapter. I really love it. I'm glad you showed James' POV this time, it's cool, because you really see why he changed his mind about Lily and how he was kind of reluctant to do it. What else can I say? 11/10!
Author's Response: Merci beaucoup! I'll try to go back and forth between their POVs, although it is a lot easier for me to write Lily's. I'm glad you thought James' turned out ok! =)
Heyy, don't change Sarah's name.. it is Potterish enough.. Sarah is a very popular name in Britain... I'm hurt.. *cries* No please don't change it.. I was so happy that someone finally gave a character my name.. and you are on my favorites list.. and I gave you another 10/10... please!!!! Anyway, another great chapter.. I can't wait to read the next one.. fantastic writing.. keep it up!!
Author's Response: LOL, aww I love the name Sarah, that's why I gave it to her! Anyway it will really come down to what most people prefer. If it makes little difference to the majority, then I won't change it. Maybe I'll just give her a weird middle name or something ;). Thanks so much for the nice review. I can't believe I'm on someone's favourites... =D That's awesome.
Great to see the next chapter up! This is one of my fave stories-I'm definitely looking forward to the next chapter. I don't think changing Sarah's name would be too confusing, maybe it would help if you changed it to something similar like Sadie, Saranna, Sariah, Sarina, Sally. But if you don't like any of those, there's others like Almira and Talulla, which have similar meanings. I guess it just depends on what goes with Weston. :-)
Author's Response: Thanks a lot! Hmm yeah I really don't know what to change it to. Sarah is a really pretty name... but it's just not right for the whole Potter world. I'll have to keep thinking on this one. =)
Sorry for commenting again. I was just wondering when the next chapter is coming, I really can't wait. After looking through more Lily/James fics, I can definitely say this is my favourite, by far. The characters are so realistic. Great job (again). :)
Author's Response: Haha, yeah I have no problem with double comments!! Thanks so much for the complements *blushes*. I just hope I can keep it up with the next few chapters! Chapter 2 has been in queue for awhile now, so hopefullyyyy it should be accepted soon!
I'm really excited! This is a great story so far-it has lots of potential! You wrote the chapter really well, I hope the next chapter is accepted soon!
Author's Response: Thanks! I really hope everyone likes the next chapter. When I wrote it there was no pressure because no one was commenting on my first chapter at all! But now... well I'm going to have to step up to the task. Thanks so much for the review!! =)
Ooh! I'm excited! This story looks promising! Great job on the first chapter, which is usually really hard. It flowed smoothly and the ending was *perfect!* Update soon!
Author's Response: Thank you so much, I hope I'm able to keep it up. =)
Roles Reversed I like the name but that last sentence James has a girlfriend I almost screamed! But I still like it
Author's Response: Haha that made me laugh. If it makes you feel any better, he still does have feelings for Lily! They obviously end up together in the end. Thanks for the review!
Great job! I've read other ones that are somewhat similar to this where James decides that he won't chase after Lily anymore, but then it's Lily who realizes that she has feelings for him. I love it!! Can't wait for the next chapter! I gave it a 10.
Author's Response: Yeah, it is hard to come up with a completely new approach. There will always be some that are similar, but I hope that this still feels original. Thanks so much. Chapter 2 should *hopefully* be up soon! =)
Cool... new approach and stuff, I likey, I wonder gow long it will take her to openly admit it... I really like this story, you write really well, can't wait for chapter two! Sarah xx
Author's Response: Yeah, you'll definitely see Lily struggling with all of this in the next few chapters. Thanks a lot! =)
Ooo! Very exciting! James has a girlfriend! Shit! Poor Lily. Can't wait for the next chapter. Wicked beginning. P.S. Haha. So cool. There's a person who's reviewed called peachesandcream. Awesome.
Author's Response: =) Thanks, the next chapter should be up soon! You ___andcream are the coolest, I must say ;).
Hi! Great story i totally like the not following the usuall plot line, where James still likes Lily.... although, you might try a split POV. Keep Writing! I Love It!
Author's Response: Thanks so much! Yeah, the next chapter is in James' POV. You'll get to find out how he feels about the whole situation.
This is a great original start and I find it a lot more believable than many others! I really liked the way you took your time developing the characters.. oo and poor Lily really took a shot to the heart. Now lets see how she handles it, some advice from Remus Lupin in the future perhaps? Well done I will definetly be sticking around to see how this goes!
Author's Response: Thanks a lot! I really tried to flesh out the characters. Hmm you'll see how Lily starts to handle her feelings in the next chapter. A whole different side to her is coming out. ;)
*gasp!* OMG! James has a gf! This a great new spin on their relationship! Usually you read the "james loves lily, chases her, she gets flustered then relizes he loves him, blah blah blah" But yea I am so lovin this story! Can't wait for more! xoxo PG15
Author's Response: *blushes* Glad you liked it so much!