Reviewer: moony 4eva
Date: 06/24/08 13:58
Chapter: One-Shot

that was great! I had always imagined remus and lily together until james 'deflated his head a bit' as sirius put it! loved it! :)

Reviewer: tc015
Date: 06/17/07 16:45
Chapter: One-Shot

I adored this. I have never read Remus/Lily, but they are so cute in here!

I was surprised that Remus was left alone at Hogwarts. I thought that he would go with James and Sirius if it wasn't the full moon. Even though it is, I thought that at least one of them would stay. But then would ruin the plot of this story, which was really good apart from that part.

I thought that it was so sweet that Remus went to help Professor Kettleburn with the Salamanders just he so he could be with Lily. It sounds just like Remus to do something like that. Everything does he does for a reason, and it makes sense that he would do something like that. It also typical teenage boy who likes a girl; they'll do anything as long as they are with them. It's adorable!

I felt so sorry for Remus after he told Lily that he couldn't do Prefect duty. You can tell that Remus is so upset. It's a good sign that when you're reading, you want to come in and say something to the character. Here, I just wanted to give Remus a hug, and slap the full moon.

I really loved the ending. I thought that it was so sweet that Lily gave Remus a Christmas present. It's so nice that Lily cared that much about Remus. I loved the ending. It makes sense that Remus would give up Lily for James. Remus cares about others well-being above his own. Doing that is noble and self-sacrificing, both of which Remus definitely is.

I loved this. It was a wonderful little romance that was fluffy but not too fluffy that really warms a person's heart.

~ Teresa

Author's Response: Aw, Teresa, thank you so much for your lovely review! And, well, I needed Remus to be alone for the Christmas hols, so I figured I would make the other Marauders leave him at Hogwarts. I have this feeling that Remus and the rest of the Marauders sort of fell apart in their later years at Hogwarts or after leaving school because Sirius suspected Remus to be the one that betrayed the Potters. So I thought it would be okay if he would be alone at Hogwarts. Thanks once again for your review, dear! I'm glad you liked it. *huggles*

Reviewer: iluvkrum
Date: 05/23/07 23:17
Chapter: One-Shot

it was so sweet. it was perfect lupin. i just want the poor guy to be happy.

Author's Response: Thanks!

Reviewer: Lurid
Date: 02/19/07 2:06
Chapter: One-Shot

Yay! Congrats to you, fellow guilder, for attempting something that isn’t all that popularon MNFF> By saying this, I mean finding a story of this pairing is a rarity, and you’ve pulled it off. There wasn’t actually any physical contact… which actually added to the story :D it was purely thoughts, which says a lot about Remus’ character.

Not the finest time of the year, though, according to Remus Lupin, a Gryffindor Sixth Year. Should be either sixth-year or sixth year. Both are correct in the British versions.

“There won’t be much to do, as most of the students have gone home, but there are a few Second-Years you might want to keep an eye on.” Same again, except you’ve got a combination of both :) second year or second-year.

“Fine then, tell Miss Evans she has to do it with Snape,” The comma at the end, near the speech marks should be a period. And, attitude!

Alittle bit of criticism, and I won’t be too harsh as I know this is your first attempt at Romance, but I thought Lily’s character and interaction with Remus was a little off. Maybe this is me being bias after reading so many Lily fics, but I think that she was a missing something. Maybe a little spark. But, if it’s any consolation, I thought Remus’ characterization was very believable!

He stared into her green eyes, reminding him of a pool of water. She traced his cut on his forehead with her hand; this made his heart melt like snow. Adoring the imagery in this line like WOW. SO pretty! It really makes Lily seem … amazing like wow in the eyes of Remus. And Kudos to Remus for thinking such pretty thoughts!

A really cute fic, dearie!

Author's Response: Awww, thanks for the great review, Steph! Regarding Lily, well, when I wrote it, I couldn't put my finger on it either but honestly I didn't love her like I did Remus... I'll try and figure out what went wrong with her, though. And, I'll change the year issue :) Thanks again for reviewing, love!

Reviewer: JC_Cainstone
Date: 08/30/06 3:48
Chapter: One-Shot

Aww, that was sweet and sad! But really good,you should continue it, I'm sure people would appreciate that!

Author's Response: Thanks, Cainstone for your comments. :)But I don't think I will continue with it, sorry. It was originally written as a one shot for Astrid Skywalker as a Secret Santa last year in the forums and I'm gonna let it remain like that. Plus, it would stray into AU if I continued.

Reviewer: __drawtheline
Date: 04/10/06 13:45
Chapter: One-Shot

aw I love Remus. This really is great, the characterisation(sp?) is really well done and the thought processes seem really natural, if that makes anysense. You should turn this into a longer story that would be cool. :)

Author's Response: Thank you, draw the line, for taking time to review! I appreciate it a lot! I'll consider turning it into a longer story, but it might stray into AU.

Reviewer: electronicquillster
Date: 02/09/06 14:39
Chapter: One-Shot

(That was submliminal messaging that I think you should continue this 'one-shot'...)

Author's Response: I'm considering conituing the one-shot. Look out for an update sometime...

Reviewer: electronicquillster
Date: 02/09/06 14:38
Chapter: One-Shot

Can I just say that I'm very excited to read the rest of this story? I love the way that you've characterized Remus. He's so utterly loyal to his friends. I can't wait to read more. Should get very interresting.

Author's Response: Thanks for your review. Remus is probably one of the most interesting characters. I love writing him. Maybe I should think of continuing...

Reviewer: Sarakiel
Date: 01/27/06 9:21
Chapter: One-Shot

this is very well written. I like the small details you put in. A lot of good thought went into this. 10/10

Author's Response: Thank you for your comments!

Author's Response: Thank you for your comments!

Reviewer: lovinsirius
Date: 01/25/06 10:27
Chapter: One-Shot


Author's Response: Thanks again!

Reviewer: lovinsirius
Date: 01/25/06 10:27
Chapter: One-Shot


Author's Response: Thanks!

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