Reviewer: Rnea
Date: 07/17/07 17:28
Chapter: Truth

I loved this chapter, and I love that Sarah Dessen book!

Author's Response: I love Sarah Dessen!

Reviewer: Obsessed_Much
Date: 07/14/07 12:41
Chapter: Epilogue: The Motions of Normalcy

Great story, it kept mimentum fantastically. I love a good battle, and that was carnage!
Thankyou for an interesting couple of hours reading, I enjoyed it immensly.

Author's Response: I'm glad you took the time to read and review! I'm still not sure whether I really like the ending...It gets away from my original plan way too much in the last couple of chapters. No mention of Lily's prophecy, did you notice? My bad...

Reviewer: Mischief_managed01
Date: 07/03/07 9:47
Chapter: Epilogue: The Motions of Normalcy

Wow that was a good way to end it, i love it! Make sure u keep writing ur good.
No joke!!!!


Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm a little late getting back to reviews, oops. I'm glad you liked the ending. I remember that this chapter was one of the most fluid, easy to write of the series. Fun stuff.

Reviewer: jojo_dolphin2394
Date: 06/25/07 15:28
Chapter: Epilogue: The Motions of Normalcy

God. I ussually only review the last chapter of a stroy and so here comes your turn. :) . When I first read your summary, I thought your story might be a liitle AU, which I don't like, so I avoided reading it. However, I love it, and I found it wasn't AU at all. I like the way you made it unique, with the premier seer stuff, and the relationship with Sanpe, though in my opinion, I don't think Lily could ever go out with Sanpe. It was very emotionally and deltailedly spun, and I loved it!

Author's Response: I'm glad you decided to take the plunge! What made you decide to read the story? I personally don't really believe that Lily would ever go out with Snape, either. I do think that in canon she was friendly to him, because it was probably against her nature to be nasty to anyone (except James). Therefore, I believe that Snape loved Lily for her heart. His love wasn't mutual, of course. Anyway, thanks for the review! I was just trying to remember how I thought of the Seer stuff, but I really can't. I read the Japanese comic series, "Clover" by Clamp, which gave me the idea about Lily predicting her own death, and I guess the Seer bit just fell into place. Predictions and Seeing just go hand in hand, I guess. Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: elliejelliebean
Date: 06/16/07 22:31
Chapter: Epilogue: The Motions of Normalcy

I'll first say that I absolutely loved your story. It was written very well, and while not free of grammar mistakes, there were few errors (Sorry, I'm a grammar freak lol).

I really liked the way you portrayed all of the characters. I really enjoyed your Lily; she's a little different than the other Lily's I've seen in fictions, maybe a little less strong-headed and independent, but I liked her. I also enjoyed James; he seemed very real to me. Snape was interestingly portrayed. I'm not sure if I completely understood what he was all about; it would have been nice to hear a little more about what was going on with him.

I also greatly enjoyed your plot. I liked Lily's Secret and was absolutely on the edge of my seat when she was revealing herself to James. There was certainly a lot of complexity with the whole Lily/Snape situation, and while it somewhat added to the story, it could have been elaborated on further. The battles, Lily's parents dying, etc. were all nicely done. The story was action-packed and clearly well-thought-out and that made it enjoyable to read.

Random things I enjoyed:

1. Premiere (sp?) Seers--a thoroughly intriguing idea, worthy of JKR herself. True inspiration, there, my friend.

2. Lily/James--while too much fluff can be slightly sickening, I absolutely loved the interactions between these two. You found a great balance--not too much fluff, but not too little either. I was smiling at my computer as I read their interactions, not rolling my eyes. So loving, so real. Great job.

3. The Fact that Lily actually approved of Vernon--now THAT is what makes a great writer: not taking everything at face value. Vernon Dursley is NOT a completely horrible man, and is not portrayed so in the actual HP series, but many fanfics tend to make him out to be this horrible monster. I very much liked Lily's assesment of him.

One thing I didn't particularly love, however, was the ending. I felt as if it ended too abruptly; the topic of Lily's prophecy wasn't even touched upon in later chapters. While the final battle was exciting, I am one for closure and might have preferred a more emotional, finally-ish (great word I just made up, huh?) final chapter, maybe Lily's final thoughts on that time of her life just before her predicted (and, as we know, real) death day, or something. In fact, I would love to see Lily's thoughts when she gets married, discovers that she is pregnant, etc., knowing that she is probably condemned to an early death. Can you say SEQUEL???? :D

All in all, a very interesting idea that Lily predicted her own death. It made for a good story and an exciting read, and I'm glad I discovered this. It was nicely written as well. Great job!

Author's Response: Wow. I am speechless. What a wonderful review! Thank you so much! I LIVE for these kinds of reviews! Time for my response: 1. I am so flattered that you compared me to JKR, though I am nowhere near as brilliant as she. My life is complete now. 2. Yes, success! I have read so many stories that have me almost retching because of the fluff, so I really tried to avoid intense fluffyness in my own story. So thanks. 3. I worried over not mentioning Lily's prophecy as well. I'll work it into later chapters. Yes, there is definitely a sequel. The first three chapters have been written and edited by my beta reader. As soon as I touch up the mistakes that he's pointed out, then I'll be posting them asap. 4. I am definitely picky when it comes to grammar, too. I've had to go back to some of the earlier chapters for reference, and I have noticed quite a few errors that appeared during the posting, disappointingly. I'll have to fix those sometime. Thanks again for reviewing! I hope you stay with me through the end of the second half; I look forward to hearing your thoughts and opinions!

Reviewer: liveonluna
Date: 05/04/07 17:22
Chapter: Epilogue: The Motions of Normalcy

NOOO.... The story is over!!! NOOO... So sad... ;-(.... But it was such a good story! Ahhh! Amazing! Way to go! Excellent. I loved the ending... James+Lily=forever...=D

Author's Response: Thank you! But don't fear: there is another surprise in store for the story!

Reviewer: pottergurl92
Date: 05/03/07 18:53
Chapter: Musings james has a sister...not really...didn't u read the books?
But its all good...great story!!!!

Author's Response: Of COURSE I've read the books! I'm writing Harry Potter fanfiction, and I can't even count the number of times I have read the series, though I know that I have read HBP only twice. Anyway, I started writing my story before Jo said that James was an only child, I think. Either that, or I just completely disregarded the fact, so this story is quite possibly AU at this point. But whatever. I'm glad you like the story, at least! I've had an immensely fun time writing it, and you have no idea how much I appreciate the 170 or so reviews I have received. It's fantastic!

Reviewer: DaddiesGrl1919
Date: 05/01/07 18:02
Chapter: Epilogue: The Motions of Normalcy

Cute chapter, but a bit sad. UPDATE SOON!

Author's Response: Thank you! This is the last chapter for this story, I'm afraid. But I appreciate your faithful reviews; they mean more to me than you know!

Reviewer: wicked26
Date: 05/01/07 15:38
Chapter: Epilogue: The Motions of Normalcy

great story!!

Author's Response: Thank you! It's been great fun.

Reviewer: Prongsies_Girl_93
Date: 04/29/07 23:00
Chapter: Chapter 17: The Call to Arms

Uh-oh.... not good, not good, not good!!!!! AHHHHH!!!!!

Author's Response: Hee hee. I hope you mean the cliff-hanger, not the chapter! ;)

Reviewer: KnuckleHead6270
Date: 04/29/07 22:04
Chapter: Chapter 17: The Call to Arms

Battle scenes!
I love them!

Author's Response: They're so tedious to write, though! I hate them, yet love them at the same time...Thanks for the review.

Reviewer: liveonluna
Date: 04/29/07 15:29
Chapter: Chapter 17: The Call to Arms

Whoaa. I am confused.... I thought Dumbldore said the sword was NOT a horocrux? And what happened to Lily and Peter? Do they ever remember in the future? And when does Peter betray his friends? I can't wait for the answers... *hint**hint* =D

Author's Response: Settle down, now; the answers are coming, I assure you. ;) Yes, in Half Blood Prince, Dumbledore implied that Gryffindor's sword was the only *known* relic of Godric, and he did not *believe* that it was a horcrux. However, as he has said himself, he does make mistakes and his tend to be "correspondingly bigger." You'll find out what happened to Lily and Peter and their memories. Peter betrays his friends much later on, shortly before Lily and James were killed, at least according to the books.

Reviewer: skywalker
Date: 04/29/07 0:07
Chapter: Chapter 16: Many Crowns of Glory

This is really cool! I love James and Lily together!

Author's Response: Thank you so much. I love writing Lily and James. You have so much more leeway with that pairing than you do, say Harry and Ginny. With the latter, you have so much canon, factual information that dictates how you write the characters; but as Lily and James' are dead in the previous time, you can sort of make up their characters, using the few guidlines that JKR has given us. Wow, that was really long-winded and unexpected. ;) Anyway, thanks for taking the time to leave a review!

Reviewer: skywalker
Date: 04/28/07 21:57
Chapter: It's In Your Face

Lol, fluff is good. :D

Author's Response: Good thing, 'cos I've got plenty of that!

Reviewer: DaddiesGrl1919
Date: 04/28/07 17:38
Chapter: Chapter 17: The Call to Arms

I love the chapter! UPDATE SOON! I really gotta know what's going to happen!

Author's Response: I just have some minor changes to make to the last chapter, then I'll definitely be posting it as soon as I'm finished. Thank you for reviewing!

Reviewer: Hansolohpfrk
Date: 04/28/07 17:27
Chapter: Chapter 17: The Call to Arms

GRR! Cliffie! I love this fic to death!


Author's Response: Thank you so much! It has definitely grown on me as well; I'll be sorry to let it go. Sadly, the next chapter, which is the epilogue and entitled "The Motions of Normalcy", is the very last chapter. But thank you for staying with me! I appreciate all of the reviews you and everyone else have taken the time to leave me. They make me feel special! ;)

Reviewer: Prongsies_Girl_93
Date: 04/13/07 20:36
Chapter: Chapter 16: Many Crowns of Glory

ARRRRRGGHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Stop it with the short chapters!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! UPDATE SOOON!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Okay, I'm done. Great job!

Author's Response: Hey, thanks for leaving a review! I'm working out the tangles of the plot of the last two chapters, which shouldn't take much longer, then I'll submit it. Yay!

Reviewer: lumos_aeternum
Date: 03/10/07 9:53
Chapter: Chapter 16: Many Crowns of Glory

Yeah, noticed a few of my suggestions! Glad you liked them! Just had time to read this today! Thank you insane amounts of work!!! Can't wait to see what you make of the last one......(happy/sad moment of ending the story)...I've had more ideas for a couple of my own stories, but have yet to put them to page....crazy work hours..haha

Author's Response: Yeah, I like to kind of surprise you with the way I work your suggestions in :) I've made almost all of the changes I need to, but I'm delaying the end for as long as possible...Have you gotten more than 45 minutes worth of sleep lately, lumos? ^__^

Reviewer: liveonluna
Date: 03/02/07 16:38
Chapter: Chapter 16: Many Crowns of Glory

Awww. How sweet! Frank's proposal to Alice was soo nice.. =D DUNDUHNDUHN Th last paragraph creates drammaa. Ahh.

Author's Response: Thanks! I love it when I can make my beta's suggestions work out.

Reviewer: DaddiesGrl1919
Date: 03/01/07 20:39
Chapter: Chapter 16: Many Crowns of Glory

Nice chapter. I like it that Alice and Frank are getting married. That was cute. Keep up the good work! Keep updating!

Author's Response: Thank you! Only a couple of chapters left!

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