Ok, so you asked for some constructive critizism. First off, you really write the characters well. I love the inner dialogue and even though the whole romance between Lily and James is quite cliche ( but come on, how could it not be?) I find myself salivating over every emotion, interaction between the two. When I'm reading though, I find myself wanting more detail. Instead of just saying Lily was happy, discribe the feeling. I don't know . . . all around the scenes are great and I love this story so far!
Great job!
Author's Response: Yes! I feel the same way! I am so dissatisfied with this story sometimes because of the lack of detail. I try, and am still trying, but mostly I go overboard and end up taking out a lot of 'excess detail'. But I really thank you for the c.c! Now that is a breath of fresh air. And I appreciate the compliments. I can't wait to read your review of the next chapter! Thank you so much for reviewing!
OOH! This is a really sad and happy chapter! Lily's prophecy was horrible! But I loved it all the same! It makes me want to read more! Update soooooooon!!!
Author's Response: Thank you, thank you, thank you! You make me feel special!
Wow, that was really good.
Please continue!
Author's Response: Thanks! The 'wow' at the beginning really pleases me!
eeeeeeeeeeeew!!!!!!!!!!! LILY AND SNAPE??????? EWWWWWWWWW!!!!! Ah, now that's off my chest, that was a great chapter, even the thing with Snape and Lily, i can see how it may work in with everything, and was that snape's motive for joining Voldemort?
Author's Response: Yep, Lily and Snape. I'm glad you liked the chapter. I've sent the next to the mods, and I can't wait to read your reaction to it. Thanks for reviewing!
haha, so sweet. I think Miss Lily is getting a shock soon, eh? That was great, I really liked it and I love the whole concept of the Truth game.
Author's Response: Thanks! The game of Truth is a really good idea, and I only wish I had thought of it first. Truth belongs to an amazing writer by the name of Sarah Dessen. But I'm glad you liked the chapter.
silly girl!! Go with him! go with him! That was great, I really liked it, well done.
Author's Response: Yeah, she's quite silly sometimes, especially where James is concerned. Thanks for the compliments & the review!
oh-oh, has little Lily developed a crush? oooooooh! nah, that was really good, I love your descriptions and detail, it's fantastic. Well done
Author's Response: Mm, I think she has! Thanks; I was really nervous and bothered about my 'lack' of details, but you've made me feel a bit better about myself. Thank you!
hee hee, suffer James! Actually, don't, you're too cute of a character.... Anyway, great chapter, loved it
Author's Response: Yeah, I think it's wicked cute when hott guys suffer or cry or something...I think that's why I'm in love with Harry; he's in pain so often...sad...
very sweet, and i feel so bad for James!
Author's Response: Thank you! Yes, James' situation is definately one to be pitied. But he himself can definately hold his own, as you'll see later.
Hi, I wanted to repay the courtesy you have shown me on my fic. I like your story. It really takes an interesting look at a critical time period in the HP universe. Although, in a literal sense, Severus dating anyone disturbs me, Lily is the only person I could have seen doing it. She's just that sort of person. I love how you work the emotions, carefully crafting them into the situations we all know will be. Excellent. Looking forward to more.
Author's Response: Thanks! I feel really honored that you read my story and actually liked it! Wow. Thank you for such a positive review! And I can't wait for the next chapter of "Aftermath"! Soon?
WOW Lily went out with Snape!? EEEWWWW!!! bad mentle images!!! your story is slightly AU (lily was populer, James was an only child so on) but i like it never the less, your beganing was awsome!!
BYE BYE
Author's Response: Mmm, I've realized it is slightly AU, but i like writing it all the same. I'm glad you liked the beginning, but are you implying that the rest of the story stinks? ;)
ewwewwewweww...
No!! Anything but Lily and Snape!!...
But its ur fic.
Author's Response: I know, that pairing rather disgusts me, but I believe that Snape really did love Lily in the H.P books, so I had to put it in this story.
heheheh! the last sentence made me crack up!! *still laughing*
Author's Response: Yay!
I kinda like the fluffiness:)
Author's Response: Good, there's a bit more coming up! But not too much more, that'd be gag-worthy. ;)
aww:(
Author's Response: Yeah, rather sad, rather cute. ;)
Great chapter. Please update soon...the whole lily and snivellous relationship was very amusing.
Author's Response: Thanks, glad I provided entertainment.
I feel so bad for Jame!!! And I guess Snivellus. Still, he came to Hogwarts knowing more curses than half the seventh years. Please update soon!
Author's Response: Yeah. My rendition of Snape doesn't garner much of my sympathy, but "real" Snape definately does. Update at the LATEST by next Wednesday. Thanks for R&R-ing!
What Happened? Please write more!!!!!!!!!!
Your hopeful fan,
Kimi
Author's Response: You'll find out! I have two more chapters written, I just need to figure out if I need more details or additional chapters. But I love your enthusiasm. Thanks for sharing!
This is a very different twist than all the other stories! Very unique!
Author's Response: Thank you! I was hoping to be one of those who differentiate from the "typical" Lily and James story. Glad you think so, at least! Merci for R&R-ing!
Why did she say No?!?!?!
Author's Response: Because she's a stubborn idiot who's scared. ;)
